The Devil loved an Angel princess and she loved him as well.
She made his life heaven and he made hers a hell.
He told her how he felt and looked her in the eyes.
She only believed him a Little,The Devil is known for telling lies.
It's hard to love one so wicked and remain pure.
Yet,in him the angel found what she was looking for.
He was a monster though like all the stories say.
So our Angel princess had to run away.
Now the devil is twice as bad.
He still longs for the love that they had.
He can still feel her soft skin and feathered wings.
He can still hear the songs she used to sing.
The angel on the other hand,Well she lives her life.
And the only times she misses him are cold like tonight.
The Devil loved an Angel princess and she loved him as well.
She made his life heaven and he made hers a hell.
She told him he wasn't wicked and that she knew he was good.
He told her she was special and he really understood.
Now and then they see each other and the flames start to rise.
But before their love can be rekindled it flickers out and dies.
As our story nears it's end some things must be said.
Our Devil is not so bad he just has a messed up head.
And though not every angel is perfect or pure.
The Devil knows with all his heart that his was for sure.
The Devil loved an Angel princess and she loved him as well.
Yet, she chose serving heaven over reining with him in hell.
Author notes
This is a ture story,The devil here is me.
I know I'm not the actual devil but I had become a devil and the girl was far from an angel but This how I felt about our break up.
Written October 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- la la la love! by j-ay rose.
535 points, ended March 8, 2007, 75 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Tis a true form and true words I can say no more then that. A love that spreads through heaven and hell is something more beautiful then heaven itself. Even though I know the stories and even knowing them something as evil as the devil, cruel and unweilding. Even it should know the beauty that love can bring. The truth to the way you weaved these words I could see her angel wings as he caressed them. I could understand his feelings about her. Well your feelings. But I can also understand why she left. Sometimes love isn't enough. Even though so many say our love will find a way. Sometimes it just isn't the way it should and if it is meant to be then it will be. Destiny plays its rolls.
~Dragonia~ -
Hells love song:
In other currently running contests: no.
Creativity: 8/10
Concept: 8/10
Language: 5/10
Overall Effect: 4/10
Final Grading: 25/40
Notes: interesting but not emotion invoking.
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Awesome poem. I'm sorry that you went through this, it's always hard to be on the bad side or at least feel like you are. You did a nice job of telling your story with this metaphor. Your rhyming is good too
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huh?
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Any particular reason why "Little" is capitalized? If you were to personify rather than saying "he" and "she" so much or calling them angel and devil... I feel that this would be a bit better. Aside from that this is pretty interesting and you have created some interesting visuals. Well done and thank you for entering my contest.
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Kinda sad. But I liked it nonetheless. I liked how you repeated the first two lines. "The Devil loved an Angel princess and she loved him as well.
She made his life heaven and he made hers a hell."
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nIIIIIIICely done~~~ gawd i am speashless right now.. not really. i can say "hi" and such.
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I love the addition!!!
By the way, Before He Got Wierd. That's about me.
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That's a good story. It is sort of bittersweet, a love that's impossible, which is such a major theme in poetry. Great job.
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This is... indeed, a rather quite true story. In an aspect, I am not saying an angel princess fell in love with the Devil, but what I am saying is, is that there is good inside of him. It's just the fact, that God sent him to Hell for the reason being that he hated mankind, and thought we were all worthless beings. Truly fantastic, and somewhat religious! Amazing write!!!
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What a catch line! In relationships, we often label our partners (ie... she's my angel) and it's so very hard for us to live up to those expectations. I'm rooting for the "devil" here because despite the fact that he has some issues he remains true to her to the end. Amazing insight into the inner workings of a relationship damned from the start.
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I agree with Whispers... those first 2 lines made for a great opening. Beautiful, strong, vivid. Another poem that I have found to be a pleasure to read. Loved the whole thing... loved each line!!
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This poem is so good!
I automatically had doubts when I was seeing it was about the devil, but it's not like that at all.
It's such a good contrast.
This is the first from you I've read I belive, and I adore it.
Good job and keep up the great writes. -
'Our devil not so bad he just has a messed up head.'
'And though not every angel is perfect or pure.'
Love it!
And I really love the punctuation. I myself am partial to using periods instead of commas. It really ties something extra into the poem...Great write. My favorite of yours! -
Wow, wow wow wow!!!! This is a really fantastic poem!! I love the topic, how did you ever come up with it? the flow is so beautiful and easy like it took no effort at all.
"The devil loved an Angel princess and she loved him as well.
She made his life heaven and he made hers a hell."
Those 2 opening lines are amazing, this is such a beautiful poem, the best that I've read during my time here at AP (which isn't much but anywayyy)!! This si a really fantastic poem and I hope you keep up the fantastic job!!!
~Sarah
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