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Of You: for Night Hope

Of you I think wonder at night,

O woman of poetry, hands across the miles.

You found me in a dark place, a Blue Moon overhead.

Stars failed to come out to comfort darkened orb.

To walk down verdurous winding ways,

A shaft of light through the clouds, striking the path.

Of you I long for these things, and so much more.

For peace of mind, far from the city's dirty  streets.

Of you it has come to this: searching for empty

Expressions and vacant words to quantify the way I feel.

Of you there is no measure: love is beyond the moon and stars

Which now blind the night; I 'd share this with you if I knew how.



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Written October 23rd, 2006

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 24, 2006
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    I too feel like hugging myself and smile while I watch something beautiful unfold. I wrote a poem many years ago called, "Once I Loved A Poet". I must ressurrect it and share it. I have long said that love isn't love until it moves the full Medicine Wheel: physical, intellectual, emotional AND spiritual. Here, I see spiritual unfold like a sacred blossom. These poems could make the most bitter believe. Beautifully done!


  • Griswold
    October 23, 2006
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    hmmmmm, I'm thinking that you DID share it with her, and to a very fine degree with these beautiful words penned in her name, very well done and vivid imagery kept me interested throughout...Scott

  • Rudolf
    October 23, 2006
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    well stoked

    a powerful poem you've printed,pushing passionate thoughts through your pen onto paper,sure hope you two will find a way to get together real soon.....i call this poem fuel,the longer you wait,the more you collect,the bigger the fire...rudolf


  • DryIce808
    October 23, 2006
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    Very well expressed and worded. The ending is great.

    "To walk down verdurous winding ways,
    A shaft of light through the clouds, striking the path.
    Of you I long for these things, and so much more.
    For peace of mind, far from the city's dirty streets."

    Those were my favorite lines, primarily the last line. Good write.


  • SGaaerith
    October 23, 2006
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    Heartfelt and beautiful, "I'd share this with you if I knew how..." excellent work. I love it.


  • MenschMariah
    October 23, 2006
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    thanks for sharing!

    very mysterious and heartfelt.down right a good write. i like the lines at the bottom the best "serching empty" and so on. those are really powerful and very bold and really divined lines..you have a real talent here and your work is so intresting. i enjoyed reading this it was quite worth it


  • soulfultia gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    Sigh...........

    I believe you are expressing yourself just fine! I get little goosebumps when I see another poem to and fro between you guys.... I seem to be getting a birdseye view of a growing love and it is just .... awesome from this angle. What a pleasure it is to be (indirectly) included in your adoration for one another. I feel like someone left their diary out and I had to take a peek! ... Thanks for sharing this with us and... leaving the diary open blushing.... I peeked! ~Tia


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 23, 2006
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    Beautiful poem, but I'll just sit on the sidelines and smile for you both.
    G A

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