Memories once shared
slowly fading from existence
A mere outline of importance
is all that's been left
Nights we wished would never end
Lying next to one another
Legs tangled in a mess
The sweet sound of your heavy breath
Is all that could be heard
As you slept peacefully at my side
A love so strong it seems to linger
On my lips, in my mind
And so heavily on my heart
A bond that can't seem to be broken
No matter how far you've wandered away
Or where your heart lies now
But the past should be left there
Never regretting a thing
And using only the memories
Tucked deeply in my mind
To help me move on
Knowing whats meant to be will always find a way
True love endures forever
Growing only stronger in my heart
Unlike the memories I find
that are slowly fading away
Author notes
yes i write in fragments, i always have. they're just meant to be short spurts of the little moments i remember..and i just, don't feel like writing any other way. it'd been a while since i'd written anything, so i thought i'd just get on and wing it - writing about whats been in my mind lately.
Written October 23rd, 2006
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KICKASS!
lol wow, I am impressed! you have a very unique way with word! ^_^ (you are VERY cute, too, if I may say so myself! srry, but I HAD to say it!)
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Works well!
You know, I don't find this poem "fragmentary" - the theme follows through fine. I particularly like that you make the point that the past no longer 'is' - but its residue is now part of our present consciousness, a memory. Just as soil is the residue of all the organic life now gone, so much of our present consciousness is formed of the residue of past experiences and, like soil, the more we have experienced the more fertile our consciousness becomes. I really like this piece. Cheers. jimmy
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i can relate
I like poems that are just winged, they always seem more real... more emotionally involved... this one in paticular I can totally relate too... I got the feeling you were about 4 months out of a bad relationship in this...or maybe i'm just imprinting... anyways, beautiful write... I hope i get to tell you that more directly...
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Very nice write. I like how you begin the poem building up the love to make the reader buy into how wonderful it once was, still, this helps us to understand the end of the poem and how painful the end of the romance must have been for you.
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I quite enjoyed this one. There have been many tears and trials but I am now surrounded in happiness as we will all be (if patient)
An excellent poem
John
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