When peace becomes the goal that you pursue
For nothing else remains a worthy cause
To weary mind you bid a last adieu
Renounce obeying to its fancy laws
The mind which dwells within the world of thought
A tyrant midst all power-thirsty kings
Will render soul’s light gloomy and distraught
Mind’s kingdom burdens subtle spirit’s wings
Dark heaviness will soon increase its weight
Upon your spirit, caught up in mind’s claws
Distractedness has now become your fate
A welcomed dish for mind’s voracious jaws
Stay vigilant, observe the mind’s great game
Keep up the brilliance of your spirit’s flame
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Take guard now outside mind’s enchanted gate
Be like a cat who by the mouse-hole dwells
For rising thoughts within your mind just wait
And render powerless hypnotic spells
You soon will state that there’s no single thought
Emerging from the mouse-hole of the mind
The stream of endless thoughts returned to naught
In restless thinking you’re no more entwined
You see, the mind is like a fearful thief
It silently sneaks in while we’re asleep
But, to our great and uttermost relief
His company is very hard to keep
Since when a thief is seen, he runs away
For other sleeping guards his role to play
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Please dwell within the empty spirit’s space
And let the silent presence now unfold
Just bathe your soul within this soothing grace
That gets revealed when nothing is controlled
Surrender is the magic word, the key
To freedom’s paradise, to inner peace
And soon, impermanence of mind you'll see
Its vision offers ultimate release
Please don’t identify with thought and mind
Be conscious of the constant rise and fall
Of thought-waves springing from a spirit blind
And wisely follow freedom’s final call
All waves return to ocean’s calm abode
Where everlasting peace shall be bestowed
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this poem won the silver trophy in the finale of wakingdevil's multiround-contest :
"BEST POET ON AP - FINALS"
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In a list
A contest entry
- Serenity Please. by Poetryintheblood.
350 points, ended May 24, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ Peace~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended June 14, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This poem is very deserving of the gold and silver trophies. I read it at a time that I needed inspiration along these lines; when my mind seems to be winning it's tyrannical will over me at times.
"The mind which dwells within the world of thought
A tyrant midst all power-thirsty kings
Will render soul’s light gloomy and distraught
Mind’s kingdom burdens subtle spirit’s wings"
Thank you for reminding me my dear friend. You are truly an inspiration for me!
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yes, the mind is very powerful ... yesterday, I took my hubby with me and we decided to buy some rollerskates ... like little children, we went to the playground next to our house and started our first steps on the skaters ... it brought up a lot of fear in my hubby, and a lot of naughtiness and laughter in me ... the kids on their bikes and skaters were driving around us, intrigued by such unusual company ... at one moment, I fell ... a little girl drove around me on her bike smiling with compassion, and I had the sudden vision of a dolphin swimming around me pouring healing light on me ... I got up like a rocket, rolling even crazier than before ... and she drove her way ...
hubby enjoyed his ride very much, too ... his eyes were glittering and he was smiling and laughing (which I haven't seen him doing for the last ten years I have known him ... I wonder if he had ever been a child
well, he is now becoming one 
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skating is a great therapy for putting the mind aside for a while ...
now, hubby is outside waiting for me to go skating again ...
much love,
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You are so right. Connecting with the child within us is like lining ourselves us with the Divine!
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"Be like a cat who by the mouse-hole dwells"
Yes, I AM the mind guard par excellance
I keep those ratty thoughts out of your head
The ones that are in there ensconced
I'll chase those thoughts all down until they're dead
Now waiting outside this mind-hole is no fun
I hear those pesky thoughts playing inside there
When I think my guarding job has just begun
I get serious because I really care
Here comes one of those squeaky thoughts right now
I grab that thing and shake the devil out of it
I claw it, jaw it, but it gets away somehow
I can not kill 'em all, but I do my bit
Oh, oh, I just found out why I'm not meeting my goal
I am just another thought in this mind-holeTiki Cat
flawless guard
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Just last week I read, to my six year old, a story about frog who invited his friends to his birthday party. The book was interesting in the sense that to see some of the images you had to set your eyes on a focal point and then move them to another focal point on the next page, at which point the eyes' "memory" would display a fleeting image that resembled the picture you had just viewed. Your piece reminds me of that book as the message that I came away with was that we should not overly focus on the nuanced life and instead try to glimpse a bigger picture by adjusting our inner focus. I think you have something there, though in practice it perhaps eludes.
Thank you for your entry.
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Refreshing view in this write on inner peace. It not like a new age write. It has a great depth. I truly liked the content it left me refresh. I think you took risk in the Sonnet it turned out marvelous. I think we all struggle to find a inner peace that does not dwell on material items. What we truly need can not be bought. Very well done. I truly enjoyed this much needed read tonight. I truly wish you the very best in the final round.
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It may often appear that peace and inner peace are rare commodities in our hectic modern society, especially when every where we turn there seems to be almost insurmountable troubles in the world but there comes a time for us all when we have to be introspective and seek that inner peace. In doing this we allow our minds to refresh ready for the following onslaught of thoughts and if we did not do this it would be all too easy to fall prey to depressing and stressful thoughts that would pull us down to the depths of no return. What I view in this triple sonnet is the process where thoughts can gain momentum to the point where they can overpower us if we let them but sometimes it can take sheer determination to step back from them, rest and heal before returning to a place where we have control over them and not vice versa. I think this poem has the ability to be viewed as both a non-personal and personal piece of work by readers because it has the quality of adaptability to each individual’s circumstances as we all strive to find peace in our own lives. It appears to me that this poem has also been created with an effortless flow which draws the reader in until they reach the calm ocean ‘felt’ in the conclusion.
Congratulations on reaching the final round of the Raven Contest 2007 and good luck with this entry.
Northern Raven
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This does reach out to the spirit within...calling for an awakening. You give the act of surrendering an entrancing, surreal quality. Blissful as a tropical ocean; the eternal sea where we all shall return one day. I wish you all the best with this magnificent and heartfelt write. Blue
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Holy Moly!!
Wow!!
Beautiful Sonnet You have brought forth to Touch Spirits and leave a memory etched within open Hearts
Love this and Congratulations on Your Trophy win!!
Magnificent!!
I have a tricky time with one Sonnet and You did two!
You are so good with form~Bravo to You
and Bless Your Heart
for spreading Love with Light
Precious-Priceless picture You painted!
Loved it!!
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~Desire~*~
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Congratulations on your award truly a joy to have you take part in this contest with us.
Many Blessings
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thank you so much for returning and sending your congratulations ... I am so touched about this gold-trophy ... thank you again for this wonderful gift ...
maa
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excellent~
I can see why this won silver in a previous contest...
A sonnet and a triple English one at that...I have only done one sonnet here on AP and it was hard I can imagine how hard a triple was.....
I really like the 9th stanza Please dwell within the empty spirit's space,and let the silent presence now ufold....Just bathe your soul within its soothing grace
That gets revealed when nothing is told....
Just excellent sis...
Very passionate words of wisdom you have penned here...
I love your drawing too can I right click and save it?
I entered this one too do hope you come read mine as well.....
Best of luck in the contest...
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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What incredible words of passion to go with the incredible picture you have painted! An awesome thought provoking entry into this contest! Thanks for sharing your thoughts and best wishes in the contest!
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I like how this took on a casual pros ( if I may address it that way
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Nice flow with much passion of thoughts.
Very spiritual in depths,
Thank you for sharing,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
This was a very well written series of sonnets and they flowed togethe rso well. Nice all the way through.
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Congratulations, quite extraordinary, three sonnets as these, wow, beautiful!!
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Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine
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Beautiful
maa, this is just so beautiful. What a wonderfully spiritual work of contemplative art you've created. This is the best poem I've read in quite some time. You really have a remarkable poetic talent, which combined with your deep sensitivity and spirituality, leads naturally to the creation of gems like this. Thanks so much for sharing your treasures.
All the best,
David Michaels
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Excellent
You know me very well. I do not flatter any body. This poem reminds me of jnaneshwari's 6th chapter in which the great saint describes the method of dhyan and its physical and mental effects. Jnaneshwar described them in Marathi ( A reginal language of the State of Maharashtra, India) you have described them in English
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I love the sonnet... Especially the English and Italian sonnets. I just love the way they flow. I also like this write as it's not just about love. Often enough sonnets just hold that quality, but this one looked inside deeper into spirtituality and humanity in general. Thanks for sharing.
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thank you
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I really like this piece, both in form and message, reminding us to be like that cat waiting at the mouse-hole of inspiration. I recently attempted a sonnet and was dismayed that I had to delete two stanzas! I never thought of doing a double or triple sonnet so that I could include all I wanted to say on the subject but now I will be aware.
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thank you so much, dear marcy, for your kind visit and message left ... I would be happy to read your double or triple sonnet ... please don't hesitate to send me the link as soon as your poem has taken birth ...
marion
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GREATNESS!!!!!
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thank you, dear lotus-flower-pond ...
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Congrats, my dear sister, for your silver. You did so well in the contest (all six rounds) and this piece was no exception! Luv you lots and lots, ♥ Annabelle
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thank you very much, cindy, for your kind wishes.
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thank you, dearest legend, for your precious services in judging this contest. I believe that it has been very hard for you. I appreciate your time and energy invested in this project and thank you for your kind wishes.
maa -
dearest diana,
thank you so much for your wishes.
when I just read your quote you create reality with your expectations, I had to laugh, since I had truly never expected to place amongst the first three. so that law didn't work in my case !
it was certainly Divine Grace ...
all the best,
marion
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Congratulations ma
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My congratulations of a fine array of works provided by you for this contest A richly deserved award.And you gave this judge some wonderful reading thank you
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I told you soooo!!!!! You rock! Congratulations darlin'!
xxoo
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thank you so much, dear belle, for your generous applause and your graceful and sweet words.
much love,
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Dearest maa, this is a lovely array of sonnets (tripled presentation). I feel bathed in its spirituality as its refrains of hope and inspiration resound through my inner chambers. I particularly loved the closing: "All waves return to ocean’s calm abode, Where everlasting peace shall be bestowed." Beautiful job, my dear sister. Thank you for gracing us with your words of elegance and hope. xx Luv, ♥ Annabelle
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dearest legend,
another stone falls from my heart (did I have two stones there ?
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which each comment I receive that makes me believe that my entries are at least satisfying, and maybe even a bit pleasing to the judges and mark, I feel less anxious and more relieved.
one more to go and then, I'll leave it all in God's hands ...
thank you so much for your outstanding kindness of commenting our poems and of encouraging us in such a way.
all the best,
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I think i have said before when commenting in this contest I have no knowledge of the ins and outs of certain form of poetry.All i base my judgment on is how i feel when I read a piece This give me a wonderful feeling I enjoyed its flow and rhyme,the message within An excellent piece and yet one more to set this judges mind on an explosion course How am I to judge such an array of works? Good luck in the contest
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thank you, dearest cindy, for your delightful visit here on this page ... miaouuuuu
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thanks, sweety !
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thank you so much for your encouraging and insightful comment, dearest lady margaret ...
much love and a big hug,
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you know, kirby, it means a lot to me to hear such words from you, since you are for me one of my "poetic idols", so to say, on allpoetry.
I am never really proud of my poems, since they flow through me effortlessly, and I haven't really worked hard, like many poets have, for many years and even decades, so I don't really feel deserving of such words of appreciation ...
I enjoy them very much, though, and thank you from my deepest heart for your kindness.
much love,
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dearest g a,
I am truly touched by your wonderful comment on this poem here ... I often have the impression that the thoughts that are written down by my hand, are flowing through me like a river, I can't force them to come, so I just stay quiet and wait within this still space of emptiness, and then thoughts just appear and are written down (or not ), and disappear ...
I mostly don't remember afterwards what has been written down.
and, believe me or not, many times, when I decide to re-read a poem of mine later, I wonder how "I" could have written something like this ... especially because I have only been writing poetry for six months, and english is a foreign language for me ...
I know now what "inspiration" means ...
but I can only write spiritual poetry. nothing else flows through me, and I know that because when I try to write a "normal" poem, my mind comes in, and it just blocks ...
so, I guess, my poems are not written through my mind ...
oh, I have talked a lot now,
thank you so much for your patience and for listening to this silly little girl ...
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thank you, dearest glenda, for your encouraging poetic words ... they made me smile a lot.
much love to you, sweet lady,
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Oh this is beautiful, I really got a big smile at the cat and mouse-hole line, nice touch. I wish you all the best
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dear maa, thank you for inviting us, so beautifully, to keep afresh the flame of the being, without any concession to our delicious starving friend, the so-called "mind"!
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This is a roadmap and guidebook to inner peace, Marion! How many have found the clamoring mind uncontrollable and given up in despair and anger? But the attitude of the cat works, and also the paradox that we only win by surrendering. The form is excellent as well.
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This is absolutely wonderful and fantastic, my fine French friend. The iambic pentameter is a thing a beauty in this. A spiritual poem laden with powerful images and thoughts. I think you've outdone yourself here. Terrific!
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Looks like a winner to me.
What beautiful thoughts you think, before or after you surrender to the "empty spirits space". I am most happy you think these thoughts long enough to pen them. And so beautifully stated in these lovely sonnets.
I am rightfully humbled by your excellence in your arts.
Thank you for sharing, G A -
Applause to you my dear, but then i knew you were a sonneter.
Congrats for getting this fair, I know that it has been hard.
Best of luck. Glenda -
I can go to bed peacefully too
I'm nearly asleep!*Falls over the computer and snores.....)
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thank you so much for your words of appreciation and encouragement. they mean a lot to me. now I can go to bed peacefully ...
much love,
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You are the master of spirituality!A brilliant poem extremely well written with nice profound messages and thought.The rhyming was great and you got the form down superbly.Again another triple sonnet Lets see if anyone has the courage to do a quadruple sonnet Anyways a wonderful poem.Thanks for entering and best of luck
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thank you, bunny, for being my first visitor here ...
I appreciate your kind words and your generous applause as always ...
much love,
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Wonderful english sonnet maa, great rhythm and flow and it was truly captivating, Excellent work as always! Bunny
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