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Missing Jewels

Mothers jewelry box, 

each costume piece

out of their musty case,

laid across my bed, side by side


A faux ruby missing

from a Sarah Coventry pin,

Trifari with diamond unglued;

pieces designed by an aunt,

too gaudy for mother to wear,

stretching after so many years.


Mother’s polished pine,

only bones in the stuffy box;

lying next to Dad,

forever side by side.

 

Two more jewels missing.


Author notes

appreciate everything or love nothing
Written October 23rd, 2006

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  • make-me-feel
    January 24, 2008
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    wonderful


  • dead-love-for-fun
    January 21, 2008
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    i love it. this rocks


  • Maureen silver member
    May 24, 2007
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    Very nicely done!

    I appreciate and love your poem! Best of Luck in the contest!

    Maureen


  • Triste
    April 20, 2007
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    I loved the way you related the ideas of your mother's jewelry box and then, at the end and in veiled words, her coffin. It was very beautifully done. And I liked the personal remarks about your family that made me feel as though I somehow knew them. The last five lines are very touching. Nicely written poem, thank you for the entry.


  • DancingRed
    April 9, 2007

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    This is filled with a beautiful sense of deep sadness. I also like what you've got in your author notes - what very good advice.
    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • tomisb
    December 6, 2006
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    Diamonds are forever

    You capture nicely how the settings in our hearts are only meant to hold certain jewels. I loved how yu captured memories and history nicely with the jewlery box and the jewelery with it. Good job. Love Tom B.


  • imperfectperfection
    October 31, 2006
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    Parents are the most precious jewels, only a child like you, know their worth! You sure poured your heart out, can feel the pain, the sorrow & quest to find your jewels is all very vivid & clear. Beautiful!


  • Kari gold member
    October 31, 2006
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    good

    I've never thought about it like this before. You've done a great job. Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading.
    Kari

  • ocerus
    October 31, 2006
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    I like this. I didn't quite catch at the end whether or not the jewels were missing because they were stolen or what, but this is well done. Good job! - oce


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    you pulled this together with such talent. wel penned, great detail. rythmn and flow perfect. thanks so much for sharing best wishes to you,.
    vsutton

  • rvh1956
    October 29, 2006
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    Ah.....this made me want to pay attention right off. You know the thing some forget to remember. It is in mind called 'preciousness'. Thank you. Rich.

  • Pome
    October 29, 2006
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    wonderful methodical metaphor that really really works. Great poem and excellent presentation of emotions left behind when the crown jewels rest.


  • panegyric ink
    October 29, 2006
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    ilovelovepoems!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Ilove the way this came together! The Love spill'th over!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Bungalow Bill
    October 27, 2006
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    This is superb, very touching, tender and to the point...


  • Nicole Cudworth
    October 24, 2006
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    I love how you have compared your parents with the much-loved jewelry. I would love to have had a relationship with my parents other than the constant fighting but that wasn't to happen for me. I can see that you do truly love and treasure your parents.

    May their memory live on through you. Beautifully done.


  • individuality gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    i meant a heavy sigh, one that just drops your shoulders. i did not mean tired in a negative sense.


  • Carly Pop gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    I am not sure what you meant by tired sighing - my mom who I am writing about - I loved her more than I could tell you. I usually don't question reviews but when it comes to how I came across with my mom or my dad I guess I get a little defensive. I am not questioning your judging - everyone has different likes and dislikes - but I just wanted to know what tired sighing meant - thanks!!

  • individuality gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    mothers box - mother's box
    a good poem, a tired sighing quality i picked up when reading this. i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

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