I wasn’t kissing him;
I was whispering in his mouth…
My longing, my dreams
All the secrets that sleep deep within me.
In a precipitation of movement
That brings with it, its own surrender
That hurts in the most exquisite way.
I long for the touch
The gentle trickle of emotion
That washes the tears that formed in words
What a heart can no longer express.
I wasn’t kissing him;
I was whispering in his mouth…
What an undeniable pleasure it is
To feel the words that fall between breaths.
Like a sigh with a serrated edge
That scars as deeply on the inhale
As it does on the exhale.
Just an expulsion of breath,
Until someone comes along to give it meaning.
I wasn’t kissing him;
I was whispering in his mouth…
The lyrics to a song
That only he can compose.
Author notes
Written October 23rd, 2006
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Such a sexy piece...nicely done!
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Elegantly unique ...
and I enjoyed your thought-full poem that had stylish imagery not often found! Very nicely shared in good form. Emotionaly ... I was moved! joy
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i absolutely love this...the images, the gentleness of the sound...wow. So wonderful!
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This is fabulous. It is both romantic and highly erotic, not an easy thing to achieve. Great writing!
Chris.
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you're talking
with your face down
and I can feel the heat off of your lips
breathing poetic memories
breathing yourself into a bundle of thoughts and words
this is passion.
it has such an extreme taste of love and what also seems like longing...wow..all the words...they were the words not written on the wall..but carved..with a meaning
wonderful..
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This is so beautiful.............reminds me of my love :-)
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Unique take on what most of us would otherwise take to be only the act of kissing... Enjoyed this...
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I guess this poem makes lie of the words " a kiss is just a kiss." This has so much depth and passion. Good work.
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I wasn’t kissing him;
I was whispering in his mouth…
The lyrics to a song
That only he can compose.
oooh.
i love it.
beautiful write. -
breath taking
Well it seems our friend Wattle has directed many of us here... Rightfully so. You never fail to amaze me. Wonderful write, thanks for sharing. -
wattle brought me here to read...and I'm oh so glad he did. This is exsquisite. To even describe a whisper as a kiss....brilliant. So sensuous...so deeply romantic...so beautifully loving. Well....i see from the comments that wattle must love this more that he expresses in his comments as I'm not the first he's brought to visit you! wonderful....just wonderful
~Michelle~
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Intense
Wow! I'm glad dear "wattle" directed me here.. I have never as yet read anything that comes anywhere closer to what the entire moment feels like in words.. your poem has filled my heart with such joy, and because its expressed exactly (at least for me), even with satisfaction. Thanks a ton for sharing this~ Love, Kunjal.
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Oh wow, this poem is so damn beautiful, i loved every word you wrote but especially "I wasn’t kissing him;
I was whispering in his mouth…" these lines are so creatively written.. -
Awww thanks guys
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I love the imagery and the whispers, they are sweeter than a kiss sometimes.... I love this, not everything is about physical love... tis beautiful dear one
Karen -
I love the beginning and the end and I agree with Individuality, the part about not kissing but whispering in the mouth, beautiful description.
The last stanza was just magnificent,
"I wasn’t kissing him;
I was whispering in his mouth…
The lyrics to a song
That only he can compose."
You captured the essence of true meaning of love and intimacy and kisses quite expertly.
Well done and keep penning scribe.
Kind regards
Previn -
Awe, this is so fresh and lovely. What I love most this piece is it's overall original thought. Wondefully composed it flows like a song. Well done
~Mary O -
Well let's hope he gets off his butt and composes then, so we can all hear the other verse of this chorus...
Excellent opening BTW could easily be made into a song.
Hugs...Eddy -
Very Good
Very good, I think that sometimes a kiss communicates more than . . . well a simple kiss! -
oh i like that beginning with i was whispering in his mouth. a good piece here.
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Thank you sir wattle
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Oh my Ms Aliana wears a smile and hopes for hope. I'm impressed - Thank you. (he must be quite some catch - lucky you)
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