Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

Unforgivable Deed

And if this is what I have to do
Set things straight and say goodbye to you
Then surely I am capable
Of something so
Unforgiveable

Bubble bubble
Brew and steam
Keep things going
Fueled on a dream
Unrealistic, unhealthy, and harmed
When I say goodbye, dear
Don't be alarmed

Hanging on
And standing tall
Linked in a chain
That soon will fall

We stood at edge
And we looked in
To what I wanted
But could never begin

So now I cast my feelings aside
I can't cling on
This is what's right

Author notes

.
Written October 22nd, 2006

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Allik
    October 23, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    This is a great poem I can relate,or to better state my feelings I have related to this.
    I love the way you put this poem together.
    Every thing about it screams talent.