The wind humming in the rigging,
the ropes on the sails sing as more
canvas was called for and ran out.
She leaps as a wild thing,
the ship's soul sings through Her decks,
skimming the surface of the
world's life blood.
Excited, the crew with wet eager laughs,
faced in to the salt and sea spray
She threw in the air, laughing in
delight, they urged Her faster and faster.
The port side inches from the sea and the
starboard in the air as the breath of the Gods blew,
sailing as close to the wind as she could
with her Captain at the wheel.
This is true sailing, what all sailors lived for,
becoming one organic being in body and soul
on a vessel made from once living trees,
reincarnate.
Sailing and sailing on, into Heaven's embrace
leaving mortal cares far behind,
until, at last, as one, united being,
they join the cosmos.
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Written October 22nd, 2006
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i love it...
this is a wicked good poem...i wish that I will be able to write as good as you someday
blessed be.
~Crystal
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Merry meet Crystal,
Thank you for your applause. Writing "good" poetry is largely a matter of writing. Without that you can not get better. Thank you for your comments and I am glad that you liked this. I love the wooden sailing ships, not that I would sail on one since I get sea sick.
Amythest
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Merry meet Kevin,
Thank you for your applause, I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem.
Amythest -
A good poem! Applause!
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Amythest -
Merry meet Amythest,
I will agree! This ending gives more strength and a better flow to the write. The last word, though, I think is mispelled. Should "comos" be "cosmos"? -
Merry meet Room without doors,
Thank you for your kind applause. I'm glad that you liked the poem. I was really trying for the romantic sense of feedom that is associated with the sailing ships of old. Thank you again for your applause.
Amythest -
Merry meet Unca Goat,
Thank you very much for your applause. I looked over my ending again, and I think your right. I re-worded it and I think the ending is a lot stronger now. I would appreciate your thoughts about that. Thank you again for your applause and for your kind comments and thoughts.
Amythest -
Outstanding
I thought this poem showed a lot of depth and creativity with a romantic feel and I like how you developed the theme and created a sense of the freedom of the sea. Very impressive. -
Amythest,
This is a beautiful write about sailing the oceans! I loved the reference to the trees being reincarnated! How perfectly fitting!
On the last stanza, line three, should the last word be "cosmos" though?
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