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Her Bloody Note


All her hopes and dreams decay in her head
Just keep taunting her, she'll thank you when she's dead
You'll be sorry when you see her on the bathroom floor
While in blood the wall says, "sorry I didn't want to live anymore"

In her room alone with tired blood shot eyes
Away from you she attempts to hide
Her inner defenses rapidly fall apart
As you unmercifully mutilate her cold heart

The clock ticks and her time runs out
She ended her life to settle her doubts
And you break down when you see her dead on the bathroom floor
With her bloody note that says, "sorry I didn't want to live anymore"

Author notes

eh, just comment please =]
Written October 20th, 2006

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  • CatQueen248
    September 1, 2008
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    Amazing write, filled with such emotion. Great write and thanks for the comments.


  • xAngeloftheNightx
    August 10, 2007
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    This is great! I love it!
    -xAngeloftheNightx


  • xXbroken lullabyXx
    January 14, 2007
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    thats depressing just thinking about it.but great write i love it

  • FedUpWitU80
    October 23, 2006
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    I like it! It ryhmed! I liked it a lot. Awesome write Is!
    me


  • American x Witch
    October 23, 2006
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    Short, but awesome, Isa!! The flow was alittle off, but it was still just awesome. Don't forget to check out my newest lyrics.

    Love you--

    ~Cris


  • Underratedx3
    October 22, 2006
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    Wow, very powerful

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