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Happy forever?

I feel asleep crying last night
Nothing between us is right
I miss smiling for no reason
Celebrating each new season
Me in your arms, you in mine
Nothing could stop us, not even time
I beg you to show me that you care
But all I get in return is a blank stare
I wanna go back to that place
So I hold on tight, just in case
Thing finally go back
And our lives stay in tact
Maybe this time we'll stay happy forever
And never fight like this again, ever.

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Written October 22nd, 2006

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  • freespirit51
    October 22, 2006
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    Truly a breautiful write.It is full of emotions and feelings with every word. I live this every day and know how you feel. Great job.


  • tropicalgurl
    October 22, 2006
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    WOW! I really like it maybe cause I know how this is with my ex.I've cried myself to sleep over him.But then I relize no one is worth crying over espeisally and ex.But its so true and I love how you can feel the emotion in this poem!!!Its written really good!
    ~Tropicalgurl~