one, two
cuts for you
three, four
they're getting sore
five, six
a quick fix
seven, eight
lifting the weight
nine, ten
where've you been?
Author notes
i know it's not the best poem, it's actually kinda ameatur. and that's because i really didn't feel like being some amazing poet when i wrote this, i just wanted to put words down... but i'd still like your opinion.
Written October 22nd, 2006
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I like this. It's short but still full of emotion. Well done.
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It is an interesting poem, it kind of reminds me of a ghost story i used to be told, of someone girl with a knife walking up some stairs. its intersting to name what each cut is for, i think you could exband this idea, wiht like haveing the number cutting into the poem, wiht more feelings and reason behind each cut, if you understand what i mean.
good write, hope to see more.
starlockxx
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