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Honeybee

Some say she's an angel

Or the devil in disguise

She sure has fight

And one hell of a bite

But that's all right with me

Because she's mine

She's my sweet, sweet, sweet honeybee


Well she's a lady

The love of my life

Sweeter then sugar

Hotter then fire

But that's all right with me

Because she's mine

She's my sweet, sweet, sweet honeybee


Well they told me run boy

Better not slow down

But then again

They never held her tight


She's my sugar plum

And my baby doll

She's more of a woman

Then I've ever known


She's my sweet, sweet, sweet honeybee

She's my sweet, sweet, sweet honeybee

Author notes

I was in the mood for a song.  I am going to find this girl one day.  Time is not right,  Me being in Iraq and all,  With know plans on coming home anytime soon.  But who knows she maybe just around the corner hiding under a ryme.
Written October 22nd, 2006

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  • June-bug
    October 22, 2006
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    outstanding

    What a wonderful mood you must have been in. Truly terrific. You write your books, maybe you should try your hand at writing somemore songs. I Think their awesome and this one goes to prove the point. Your talent is reflecting in the honey!!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 22, 2006
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    To quote an AmericanInIraq, "Awe for the love

    A song about this honeybee would be lovely! You may be right - she may be hiding under a poem (or a song). When is your job finished there in Iraq? They probably don't import honeybees there...


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 22, 2006
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    Great - Very expressive and original work!!

    Impressive imagination! Very nice, romantic, endearing, sweet, adorable... makes me wish I were a honeybee... On second thought, it makes me really wonder (wory) whatever will become of our feminine mystique, now that you've begun exposing all of our little secrets to the world (in your poetry)! Yes, Sandy is right, this one is sweeter than honey - keep writing - and I'll keep reading!!


  • Sandygram silver member
    October 22, 2006
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    VERY BEAUTIFUL

    AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Charlie. This song is sweeter then honey. I love when you write about the sweet side of love. It gets so forgotten sometimes. I am glad there are still a few romantics around like you to write about it. This made me smile this morning. Always a pleasure to see you on line. I will send that address today. You stay safe. God Bless you. Always a friend, Sandy