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Belief

A withered ancient
Leans over the dried steam bed
Nature has moved on

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It was part of my dream today.
Written October 22nd, 2006

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  • LongHairedBaldGuy
    January 26, 2007
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    Brief!

    I see tree, but where lies the belief? That nature owns a merciless clock? Or that dreaming can lead to realizations? The picture is sharp, the statement unclear. To my eyes. But, then again, I have suffered head injuries.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    January 9, 2007

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    A really good piece

    I like this a lot. Nature, never ever stops moving. This say's a lot in so few words. Keep writing.

  • MissontoDeath
    November 25, 2006
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    good