The sweet simple solace of silence
guards me against the clamor
and chaos of life
to acquire a coveted and quiet calm
hush and be still . . . falling dead silent
and in this absence of sound
quiet your mind and listen
sometimes you can discover
so much more with a static and soundless void
than can be expressed with a simple articulated word
and you may learn while you contemplate that you are
slightly and pleasantly intoxicated with silence
Author notes
Written October 21st, 2006
A contest entry
- silence by Cat.
500 points, ended October 27, 2006, 23 entries
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Gold trophy winner
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What did you think
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This is a nice piece - but I have to be honest and say that it doesn't speak to me.
I'd like to see a bit more imagery here, something that pops more. Still, like I said nice -
lots of descriptions that seem quite similar to one another... I like the tone of this piece and there is quite a gentle beauty to it... the message is clear, stated quite well... thank you for this entry! good luck to you!
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love it..Silence is a gift..one which I crave often..
thank you so much for sharing
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this made me smile...especially the end. great piece. the flow was very well established, which the construction and form helped quite a bit. excellent word choice and imagery as well.
i loved:
"you may learn while you contemplate that you are
slightly and pleasantly intoxicated with silence"
i grinned big time when i read that. i love that. well well written and phrased. thank you for sharing this with all of us and keep up the great writing.
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Exquisite
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WONDERFUL
this is so close to a masterpiece!it's so powerful and it has that twist of idea to challange the reader with every line!well done!good luck! -
"slightly and pleasantly intoxicated with silence"
Yes.
Loved that line.
I hope you don't mind me bookmarking this poem
Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing!
~Princess of Shadows~ -
i love this poem
i didnt just read it, i felt it.
well done
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Thought provoking,indeed silence may scream when in despair but when in a state of healing it speaks without speaking in the hush of voice that we need to hear most.End of rambling.Good luck with this.
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Beautiful
I too have found an inner peace to silence from meditation and you poem infact had a pecuilar calming affect on me while reading it and when i finished i couldnt help but smile
kudos
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Thank you, it was fun
take care
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This is such a nice piece and a pleasure to find here in our contest, thanks...
al -
yes, i like this much better..
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thanks for reading and your suggestion, I tried the left align and see what you mean, I think it is easier to read as well, so I will leave it to the left, glad you enjoyed the ending, I usually have a hard time ending one of my thoughts, but this one came more natureal
well thanks again and good luck with your contest
Michelle Fey -
I am so glad you enjoyed and that a calm came with the reading, just what I was going for thanks for the comment and you take care
Michelle Fey -
and you may learn while you contemplate that you are
slightly and pleasantly intoxicated with silence
Your close here is lovely- like something we may have quoted for the contest itself. I think your poetry would be even stronger left aligned- because it has strength and doesn't have to rely on center alignment to be lovely, or beautiful- or words do that in and of itself.
definitely an asset to our contest.
thank you.
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'and in this absence of sound
quiet your mind and listen'
truly words upon which to contemplate.
The calm feeling of this poem flows with the shape of your lines, they compliment each other in a way that seems to enhance the meaning. A very enjoyable read.
Good luck in the contest
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