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All Within A Moment


It was a quiet night like this, not too long ago
When I looked up into the sky to see a heavenly show
It was a night just like this, when heaven touched earth
The beauty, the memory, of that night was of endless worth

Lying on the beach, looking across the water of the bay
Seeing the splendor that comes as the sun is going away
And, just for that split moment, the world stops its spin
The kind of moment that makes little boys, like myself, grin

It was within this moment that God tore apart the skies
Reaching down from heaven and opening my blind eyes
So that the true beauty that lies in life, I might finally see
The beauty, the truth, which releases the soul to roam free

So with the heavens open, the love that dwells there poured out
And in that instant I knew that there was a God without a doubt
Then the moment was gone, but the memories of it remained
Memories of how, for just an instant, the wonder of heaven was contained


by Sharcu (Tim)

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Graphic designed by me using Photoshop CS:
allpoetry.com/Poem/2281749

My inspiration has really been running low lately. Guess I need to do something exciting to get my pen moving again. But anyways, decided to write a poem. I looked at the picture and these lines just poured out onto paper.

Thanks for reading and hope you liked it. Let me know what you think
Written October 21st, 2006

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  • grannyeri gold member
    February 18, 2007

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    Great creative powers at work here on the picture and the poem. They fit so well together, easy to read and understand the lines you have penned here. Wonderful flow and great message.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    February 14, 2007

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    A beautiful write, message and presentation. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice imagery. Deep expression of emotion. Lovely rhythm. Good word choice. Nice alliterationa and descriptives. You paint a lovely picture, nice visual. Your faith shines through in this piece. A most enjoyable read. You have just been hoodwinked by a member of The Poetic Bandits. Shelley


  • StarEyes
    October 26, 2006
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    This is fantastic!!!!!!!! Inspriation running low? I don't think so! WOW!!!!!!!! The picture is just amazing with this piece! Fantastic!

    Standing Ovation to you for this one!


  • Twinstar
    October 25, 2006
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    A beautiful piece!!! How can we not know that God does indeed exist when we can see all the gifts he has given us, in nature and everywhere around us, we just have to open our eyes to see it all there. I think this is very well written, I so enjoyed it and is filled with inspiration.
    Love & Light
    Twinstar


  • RevHead
    October 25, 2006
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    wow that was so peaceful, and yet it stirred my heart too. Very nicely penned you did an awesome job, and I'm glad i (had to) read this This was a pleasure to read

    from NMNM


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Wonderfully spiritual

    This is such a very spiritual write full of love and hope. I agree it would be wonderful on a poster as the opicture also goes beautifully with your words. This is a wonderfully inspiring write and I love it Tim
    Gaylene


  • Fug-azi
    October 24, 2006
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    Excellent

    I've never really been a lover of religious based poetry, but this has so many great images poured into it, I can appreciated the whole thing without the religious aspect becomming over powering.
    Thank you for a great read.


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    excellent work...

    A tranquil write which filled my thoughts with hope and a beautiful image of heaven opening up and showing you and us through your words, the beauty of life and love

    Nice rhyme and flow, this poem would be nice on a poster, especially with that gorgeous picture

    It's a wonderful feeling to sit under the sky at night and let it speak to you in this way, I can't pick out any particular line as my favourite because it would mean me typing all of your poem out, but it is one of those pieces that remains in your head for a while...thank you for sharing your gift of poetry

    Love and smiles ~sis

  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    A beautiful write and presentation. Lovely imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Beautiful descriptives. Deep expression of emotion. You faith shines through in this piece. Very nice word choice, metaphor and alliteration. You paint a delightful picture with this piece. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley


  • Kal.
    October 24, 2006
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    Agree with the above posters, hardly do can think you're running low in the inspiration department.
    Main fact brought up, the poem is...AMAZING. At first to me it started out simplistic then slowly unravelled an amazing foray of descriptions with each passing word. Imagery, what can I say, its excellent.
    It'd be useless to say to "keep up the good work" because I can hardly see it failing lol.

    Cheers,
    Khalid


  • keeyley
    October 23, 2006
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    Great poem!there is a new shakesphere in town lol!


  • Robbwindow
    October 22, 2006
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    cool

    WELL DONE TIM. Great page and well done for getting so in involved in such a short time 300 poems phew big bruv, look forward to recieving help from your greeting in the near possible future. Have fun and god bless.


  • Ragan
    October 21, 2006
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    Tim, this was awesome, Babe. I love it and I lvoe the picture.


  • Frogzter gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Oh my gosh Tim, this simply stunning! The pic is so beautiful! You certainly have grown in your rhyming! I love this to bits!
    Fantastastic!
    Frog


  • pattyann4500
    October 21, 2006
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    Tim, it certainly doesn't seem that your inspiraton has waned. This is a lovely poem, and as always, your art is marvelous. A beautiful piece. Hugs, Patricia


  • Sharcu silver member
    October 21, 2006
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    The last poem I wrote was over a week ago. But that was for a school assignment. the poem before that was almost 2 weeks before that. I use to write almost a poem a day and now its more spaced out. Glad you liked it and I appreciate your comment
    --Tim


  • AgeofAquarius
    October 21, 2006
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    Doesnt seem like your inspiration is running low...

    This is a masterful piece Sharcu...

    Grafic is stunning and the message is powerful about seeing what you HAVE not what you don't.

    So with the heavens open, the love that dwells there poured out
    And in that instant I knew that there was a God without a doubt
    Then the moment was gone, but the memories of it remained
    Memories of how, for just an instant, the wonder of heaven was contained...

    BEAUTIFUL.!!


  • WolfHeart
    October 21, 2006
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    endearing

    Most excellent! That beautiful work of art by your hand could have no more deserving words! Just lovely and so spiritual.

    hugs Wolfie


  • Broken Machine
    October 21, 2006
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    Very awesome poem! I loved it! Keep up the good work!


  • Sanguine Silence
    October 21, 2006
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    Absolutely love the picture.
    As for the poem; well, I'm speechless. That was amazing! The words were beautiful together, the flow worked so well it was all like one great big word (that is a good thing ) and... well, I loved it!


  • Kari gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    deep

    This is breathtaking bro.You've done a wonderful job. That picture is pretty.
    Hugs,
    Kari

  • serious clown gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    excellent

    Love the picture,the poem is absolutely breathtaking,the imagery of heaven touching earth at sunset is fantastic,excellent write, best wishes---Norman

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