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Spíritus Sancti [dark]



Ripple my essences, and blur the
edge of your humanity.
Place your soul in my barren emptiness?
Look-see, not what I am, but who
I have become.
Caught in a Meccano past,
always searching for the why of me,
teach me to stop this thinking.
Exorcise this spirit.



In nómine Patris et Fílii et Spíritus Sancti:


Suffocate me and
Play God.
I’m begging you -
right the wrong of me,
I cannot stop this on my own.
True to the Holy Spirit;
uplift the sinner's soul and
sacrifice this shadow to The Light.

Spíritus Sancti
allow me to drift away in peace,
Nexus Am I [A.I.]
caught in the in-between of boundaries.
Trust and faith are mine;

eternity, take me

in nómine Patris et Fílii et Spíritus Sancti. 








Author notes

Meccano ~ a children’s construction kit, based on the principles of mechanical engineering. [® 1907 UK]

In nómine Patris et Fílii et Spíritus Sancti [Latin] ~ Sign of the cross ~ In the Name of the Father and of the Son and of the Holy Spirit




Written October 21st, 2006

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  • Nereida Nightshade
    February 15, 2007

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    wow and I like the latin. This poem is diffently dark and very morbid. I love it! Thanks for entering and best of luck!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 25, 2006
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    Tastefully morbid. Anything with latin in though is actually quite scary in my opinion. I don't know if supposed to be a vampire or demon, but the words used and the images expressed are very hollowing. I also love the picture, made me a little freaked out though Which is good, my friend.


  • hoodoolover silver member
    November 24, 2006
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    Amazing

    This really did send a shiver up my spine, as I contemplate the reality of this write, it's like a peek into the not so far future. What an original take on the subject, a great acrostic, congratulations on your well deserved trophy


  • individuality gold member
    November 24, 2006
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    a.i. they have been showing it on television here over the alst few days - i watched it a couple of nights ago spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • PrettyRagDoll
    November 19, 2006

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    I really liked how you italized "in the name of the father and the son and of the holy spirit". It gave a sad prettiness to the whole write. I loved your storyline and the way you wrote it. Beautiful! Thank you for entering my contest.
    -d0ll


  • forever - silenced
    October 29, 2006
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    Excellent

    Mummy!!! Awesome write!!! It's very different! but excellent just like all of your writes!!! The lines i liked the best were probably the same ones that vampireblood liked as well:

    "Spíritus Sancti
    Allow me to drift away in peace,
    Nexus Am I [A.I.]
    Caught in the in-between of boundaries.
    Trust and faith are mine; eternity, take me

    In nómine Patris et Fílii et Spíritus Sancti."

    I really liked the way that this whole poem flowed well together! Spill Ink mummy much love

    ~Ur loving daughter


  • panegyric ink
    October 29, 2006
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    !!!!!!! WOW !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Robotica Prophatica!


  • dutch2lips gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    Ah sister, my piece is reputed to be terrifying, yours is stone cold dark, hauntingly so even.
    Brilliant (as usual from you)


  • Master Anarchy
    October 23, 2006
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    Nexii Eternatii Teleologicii

    I shan't check the Latin for grammatical correctness. Pidgeon languages are good enough for me too.
    "Nexus Am I, Nexus A.I." would strike me better than the near offensively patronizing, or adolescently leading, "[A.I.]".
    "Uplift this Inner's Soul" would I also prefer - but then I am not a Christian, and Sin is dependant on the reilgious practice one pursues. (Originally it meant "failing to hit the bullseye", as in an arrow let loose upon the world with a particular aim). Point is, the "s" of "this" bleeds into the Inner, and expands the range of implication for the reader, let alone the author.
    "Caught between the In-Boundaries [I.B.]" would avoid the recent repetition of the "in" phoneme. But again, I am casting too wide a net at what is, after all, not my writing, nor my butterfly-soul to catch. {In part it was suggested to me by the idea of a "drift-net", qv. the 1st line of the verse.}
    Laetitia et Tristitia,
    (and I do mean "et"),
    Ciao!


  • April Somerston
    October 23, 2006
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    woo! i remember A.I., it scared the shit out of me. as did this poem. both in a good way. just so happens that i'm in the mood for good, dark poetry and this hit the spot. well done!


  • Shauna D
    October 23, 2006
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    Excellent

    I must admit I've never come across an "acrostic" poem before but I like the content of this piece. It's the defining nature of our being not to mention foretelling how it could be if we let machines and computers become too intelligent: they will see us as their enemy and wish to destroy us. This piece shows that we are only mortal and life can be taken away in an instant, taken back as quickly as it was created.

    I've never read anything like this before and I really like how you incorporated the Latin for the sign of the cross. This is a modern, deep and dark write. It's superbly written. The words just seem to flow like water... Your expression is very clear and concise and the imagery presented here is wonderful. It's quite amazing. You have a fantastic gift. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. I feel honoured just to have read it.

    Good Luck in the competition.

    Shauna D.


  • Anaiya
    October 23, 2006
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    Very different, and interesting!! Well done!!!


  • vampireblood
    October 23, 2006
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    This was an excellent poem. I liked the following lines alot:
    Spíritus Sancti
    Allow me to drift away in peace,
    Nexus Am I [A.I.]
    Caught in the in-between of boundaries.
    Trust and faith are mine; eternity, take me

    In nómine Patris et Fílii et Spíritus Sancti.

    These words I found more appealing to the eye. Overall this was one of the best I have read. I also liked how your poem flowed together. Great job and thanks for sharing


  • Cerridweneyes
    October 23, 2006
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    very interesting. And very true... I like it, props! :-)


  • capricornpoet
    October 22, 2006
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    spirit and man's godwill

    The world of spirit and our ingenuity blind, perhaps one day we will be at odds with creation, God and the spirit of us.
    Original as the mecano , dark portrayal , the acrostic fit
    the subject well..


  • Toni A Christman
    October 22, 2006
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    IW (Incredible Write)! I've been MIA for awhile and just reading some of my favorites. How wonderful to find this one from you on my first evening returned. Dark doesn't begin to describe, yet I found not one blade nor crimson drop. Thank God! I am in awe of you for finding so much darkness and not relying on the AP Standard Angst Toolkit (not that I was expecting you to do that). I must say this is one of my favorite pieces of yours. It is intense, in some cases severe and quite powerful all around. In short, I love it! Good luck in this contest. Good to see you again - Toni


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    October 22, 2006
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    JUST PURE GENIUS. its one of those poems that make you sit up and think about how life can be lived. well done.

  • Bad Bill
    October 22, 2006
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    Superb

    A very intense and haunting portrayal of someone caught between two modes of existence and belonging to neither. And I like very much the religious imagery. Excellent poem.
    Cheers,
    Bill


  • October 22, 2006
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    Excellent

    Wow Jan, this is a very well written and beautifully versed Acrostic , you have a flare for the Acrostic's. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest.

    Cheers
    Terry


  • leo2
    October 22, 2006
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    I didn't see the movie but I can infer the message from the photo and content. To me it's a plea to be completely human again. Which I sometimes wonder if we haven't all lost a part of our humanity to the cyberworld. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • shuggie
    October 22, 2006
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    Inspiring stuff Sj really well thought out too.Shug


  • Floorboards
    October 22, 2006
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    i'm trying to understand this but it's still early sounds like you want to die or something,
    i'll have to come back to this when i wake up, it seems to be very well written tho my friend,
    alexander


  • GuardianPhoenix7289
    October 21, 2006
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    Wow... Though I do not fully understand the meaning of this, I really thought it was pretty interesting! And good luck in the contest! Ps... that face is freaky looking! XD


  • Radio sirens4 Death
    October 21, 2006
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    Nice form, I like this poem and yes I remember from a while ago n the days,
    Good Luck.

  • individuality gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    yeah i remember meccano lol back in the good old days. a good piece here, you have a lot going on yes, great language with the theme, i saw that film. all in all a splndid poem young bean spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

  • afireinthisheart
    October 21, 2006
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    awesome

    awesome write Janice...intriguing and very intense...outstanding...smile....hugs, David

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