"Don't be so melodramtic."
and she scoffed.
The whales of your hands
swallowed her whole
and she perpetually prayed for release.
Fasting sounds so easy when offered as a
choice.
But she’s been starving off harpooners
(and oxygen)
for far too long.
Webbed fingers spread wide
with your veins pulsing life,
a chlorinated typhoon will be the
death of her.
(of us all)
Daffodil yellow strands fan out
and ocean blue eyes stand wide- frantic.
Bubbles burst in protest
and limbs thrash- frenzied.
Even the slightest error in timing could prove fatal.
Author notes
Anyone care to take a guess at what I mean? I'm trying to make sure I got my point across...
Written October 21st, 2006
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A relationship gone bad ...and ended in an Abusive death perhaps??
ethier way it was really good (I had to read it twice) Good Job! -
Wow... this was really different. I'm surprised. I mean, after having read your explanation below, it makes sense, and I thought it might be about death, but my idea was a bit different. I thought it was about a girl being strangled... which perhaps goes with the drowning theme since strangling and drowning both cause a loss of oxygen. Now I understand some of it better though.
I like this. It's very different... unique. I don't know quite how to describe it. I do have one question though. Why did you choose that title? Is there some significance to it? I liked the line: "a cholorinated typhoon will be the death of her." Though the part about it being the death "(of us all)" confused me a bit. You have an interesting idea about symbolism and whatnot. I like it a lot. Wonderful job on this, my dear! Keep up the amazing work!
-Rae
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hmm that's actually an incredibly interesting response hah. i reread it and yeah, you have a point. the actual meaning though was about a girl being drowned in a pool and the whale bit was nothing but metaphors and rambling. my writing can be a bit random at times...
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I will begin by saying I took the time to read your autobiography and found it quite interesting. Now, for the poem. I want to guess a "save the whales" fanatic? The poem is lovely, especially when broken down by verse. I would like to know the meaning of the poem, please. Shancy.
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