The lonely thoughts that enter my mind
I can't control
I can't withdraw;
The nonsense dreams I always find
You never see
You'll never know;
And I try, to understand, just what you see within my eyes.
I don't know
What it is that you're in love with.
My eyes.
My...
They gaze upon the world but cannot see what's staring back at me.
Those eyes.
Those unrelenting, unforgiving, piercing orbs that I hate, I despise, and ultimately can't seem to break away from.
Why?
Why would you look upon me,
when you don't even know what is running through my mind?
It's almost as if you really do see.
My lonely thoughts. My twisted dreams.
...but I know you really can't.
You just see your own reflection in my eyes. My soul.
I have to tell myself this.
Or else I might really believe there's something deeper.
...and I can't have that.
Author notes
Just an interesting piece, venting random thoughts and such. Not directed to anyone particularly (LIES... actually, it's about my ex Jenna and how I didn't love her at all, how I cheated on her), but it's also not an entirely truthful piece either (More lies! I just didn't want her to be suspicious!).
Written October 21st, 2006
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You know, I like this moreso than a lot of poems because I was able to look at this and imagine how beautifully it could be read/and performed. The work is just.. powerful, in my opinion...
Even if it was performed as a song.
Thank you for sharing.
(This is the part where I be a butthead, and ask that if you are going to comment back, if you could check out my poem, "Soldiers", as I wrote it most recently and is a sci-fi kind of poem that I don't usually write... thank you) -
For just venting this was strangely prophetic. It's easy to hide behind yourself and sabbatoge your own happiness just so you don't have to really put your own soul on the line. Many relationships begin and end this way. Sad that more people can't just communicate face-to-face.
Thought-provoking and creative. I enjoyed reading your work. -
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I think you did a great job on this, causes thought... ahhh thought provoking
. If you have done at least... that, you have done your job. Some writes are not always meant to have a deep seeded meaning. I think this was a creative piece and a pleasure to read, thanks for sharing it with us tonight. Keep penning poet ~Tia
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Very strong write on the "eyes" with a different twist. could be tighter in places, but very interesting "vent". sounds more like love to me...
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good write...i can sense the fear
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Venting yes....but sometimes our best works start out as a rant and become something brilliant...I like it alot. Great job and thank you so much for sharing this with us.
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Ooo! I can definitely see this being a good song. It feels really deep... gives me that feeling i can't exactly put my finger on. I honestly love this. Great job!!!
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A nice piece about the duality of human nature, especially when it comes to romance. Personally, I can relate to this poem... Afraid to love for fear of the pain. Good job.
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good piece, nice to see a write from you again. An answer of sorts... allpoetry.com/poem/2293207
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Bravo!
This is a really cool piece of writing my friend.I can relate to it totally. Excellent works! ~PeacE~GarY~
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