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echoing




sinking back into a black, vacuous

oblivion

of starless meaning,

where light fades

to grey-


floating under an endless

ceiling

bleeding with bleak echoes

and somber tones,

blue souls


breathe in the vaporous mists

of a quiet

purgatory,

a mindless ecstasy

void of peace.


still night catches

with pale

hands,

the memory of breathing

and feeling.


in an endless tumbling

of words

and thoughts,

hunger and waiting

for what is never known,


a light that can't be shown

even after our last breath

is drawn,

and we are sent into a void 

where sleep is endless,


and searching is in vain.









Author notes

I feel all my poems are the same in the end, and my vocabulary never changes. oh well.
Written October 21st, 2006

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  • Axelle Black
    October 23, 2006
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    yes... uh yes... what did I say? yer yer. hmmmm. And I'll probably never ever write again at this rate. It's like I'm afraid to. It's the getting started part. And school is a great big cause of my block. And I'm in it for another 10 years or some. .... celine's birthday soon soon oh fock.. it's roxane's birthday soon too and I have nothing.. oh nevermind...b ut still. ok shot op. concertina concertina lalalallaa.


  • g r e y i s m
    October 21, 2006
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    you mean I should write under the influence? hmmmm...
    lol. well thanks then, I'm glad you liked it. and I do hope you write one very soon.

    Lea

  • Axelle Black
    October 21, 2006
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    Try writing under the influence of some substance whatsoever. That may help. And really I don't know. But whether it's true or not... I don't really mind. All I know is that I love that fourth stanza. Nicely done.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    "still night catches with pale hands, the memory of breathing and feeling." Sighhh...Ahhh, Lea...You're much too hard on yourself, my Friend...You may write in somewhat similar patterns, even using comparable words...but your arrangement of them is always pure & artistic, Lady...Your descriptive techniques are immaculate, as always...A vivid penning, poignant & lovely...Please carry on, Poet...We shall follow where you lead... Wanda


  • pattyann4500
    October 21, 2006
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    Well, I don't think you appreciate your words very much. I've loved every piece you've written, and I certainly don't think your poems are all the same. You've been on my favorites list for a very long time, and I'm sure you'll remain there. Another wonderful piece. Hugs, Patricia

  • Fallen Angel
    October 21, 2006
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    Awsome poem, it gives great imagery.

  • marrow
    October 21, 2006
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    Despite whatever feelings you may have towards this poem, I still am loving it. You always have a knack for fluidity. Your words connect very well with each other. You've a gift.

    How have you been doing? I'm glad to see you post again. Hope you are well.
    Justin

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