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Pangs of love



Pangs of Love


I feel pangs of Love
Piercing into me, soothing me to ecstasy
Crushing my body, breaking my bones
I want to escape, but feel paralysed
I lie motionless, gasping for breath

You say love is happiness and ecstasy
I feel love as sad and agonizing
Sound of foot steps, stolen looks
What do they give? Agony or ecstasy

A pat on the shoulders cannot alleviate my pain
So you raise your hands to wipe my tears
But you are helpless, motionless –
What can you do? Only gaze into my eyes.

I feel it a miracle, you beside me
Chanting words of consolation
But can any words quench the burning fire of passion?
Or bring back to me my battered life?

Not a face that launched a thousand ships
But a face that betrays a shattered self
Trying to keep alive in the midst troubles
Facing you with a borrowed smile.

Nor have you any romantic charm
How do we come under the spell
That could raise me to another world
That could make me drunk and lost.

Not for the moist print of your lips
Nor for the mark of teeth or nail
But for what? I do not know
Thrilled, I sit in front of you.

I feel my path strewn with flowers
To welcome me to a whole new world
With the weight of your living presence
I feel myself born again.

You ask not my comfort, nor I yours
We are apart, we are near
But how, again, I do not know
Do we share our joy or sorrow?

Keep your ear on my chest
I will hug and hold you tight
To make you listen to my heart
Pounding for you on my sleepless nights.

These words are from my bleeding heart
Not for your stroking hand on my hair
Not for the panting breath on my neck
But for the showering bliss of love.

Author notes

the agony and ecstasy of love
Written October 20th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • Grateful
    August 4, 2008

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    Wow! this is a wonderful poem that erupting straight from the soulful heart...so true...life within the realm of pain and pleasure....

    but this pain is only for the mystic lovers...thank you so much for sharing...i really enjoyed it...all the very best...


  • Shifting
    July 16, 2008

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    Very good write. I like the thinking that words and simple gesturers cannot help the pain, as they are sometimes just an excuse to run away. I think that ectasy was maybe a bit overused, but other than that, I like it.


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    July 14, 2008
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    This is beautiful work I'm sure Sammi wll locve it


  • GypsyEyes
    July 1, 2008

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    this is great and i loved the imagery in this piece! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    oh my this was amazing, even though a bit sad at times, I still like it a lot. Wonderful job, thanks for entering!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • PrettyxoxPoison
    June 10, 2008

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    Pretty piece
    I do like how you put both sides of love into this
    To me, It looks like you spent some time on this =)
    Favorite Part:

    I feel my path strewn with flowers
    To welcome me to a whole new world
    With the weight of your living presence
    I feel myself born again.

    Thanks for your entry!
    Good Luck
    ♥[Katee]♥


  • Suna Ketsuma
    February 15, 2008

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    its both sides of love, though it has sad parts i really like it, good luck in my contest! I hope you do well!


  • Endeavor gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    I have read your verse
    Thank you so much for submitting your words to my contest
    I will comment in detail on my final selections
    I wish you well in the contest
    Thank you

    Rick


  • BeautifulFlame
    February 4, 2008

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    I thought this to be alittle sad but loved the last two parts. They were very beautiful.
    Goodluck
    ~Lisa~


  • Swan song gold member
    June 30, 2007

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    This is a very sad poem and shows a lot of thought has been put into this. There are small tinges of hope through out the lines and there is a nice rhythmn throughout very good


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 25, 2007
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    Nicely written piece here thank you for entering my contest.


  • Amicus2K9
    March 15, 2007

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    thoughtful and wide ranging

    One seldom knows...when leaving commentary on another's work if the effort is appreciated or intrusive of thoughts.

    If I pontificate, forgive me, 'love' is such a poet's goldmine and also an universal 'pang' that comes along with being human and being mortal and knowing it.

    There is, by definition, an existential 'aloneness' endemic to life, almost, as the poets say, our other half, that kindred soul to complete our being, exists out there...somewhere.

    All the things you mention here and in other writes of yours reflect that search, inner and open, that we all perform to discover and locate that other half.

    One can cheapen that quest, even betray it perhaps, and still recover and still maintain the search with innocence and trust...though it be not easy.

    Or one can be forlornly cynical and sentenced to a hopeless existence with no joy and no hope for it.

    Thank you for sharing your thoughts.


    amicus...




  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    January 2, 2007

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    However I asked for words you'd written AS YOU ENTERED not for you to repost something that you've entered in 4 other contests

  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    January 2, 2007

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    This is an amazing poem. I heard electronic music in my head as I was reading it... Funnily enough because I don't like trance lol

    Thank you for entering this and good luck
    Faerie


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    December 25, 2006
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    A most beautiful write, thank you for sharing it with me, Bella


  • Blooming Poet
    December 25, 2006

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    This is a beautiful and very emotional poem. I liked it very much. Please tell me your catagory. Thanks for submitting


  • SurelyWritten
    November 8, 2006
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    The initial repetition of ecstasy was a little derogatory of this poem, and took away from it's value a little. I liked this poem overall, however I'm not sure if it is what I want for this contest. I will leave it in the contest, and read it again tomorrow when my mind is more clear, and make my decision then.


    Best wishes and many blessings fellow poet,

    Shirley


  • drybones
    October 29, 2006
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    Well done

    The agony of love is sometimes overwhelming, yet we all embrace life to be touched by that sweet pain. It is the only thing that gives our life meaning and purpose. Well done.

  • mimiagatha
    October 28, 2006
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    greatly expressed my friend, you don’t keep it “fashionably” short, you spill all there is on your heart – passion, questions, unknowns – and finish it only when all was said and whatever is left... cannot be said. much appreciated reading you.


  • individuality gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    ah love, it is indeed agony at times as well as insane pleasure. a good poem. i thank you very much indeed for sharing your poetic talent. good luck in the contest. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • otepsaint
    October 20, 2006
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    THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!1 great job, this seems so sincere, I love it, youdefinately will be considered in judging
    GOOD LUCK

    alie

    aka

    otepsaint

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