Enslaved To Your Curse
You look upon your own hands,
bloody and calloused.
That curse which lives inside
of you always to remain hidden.
Until..........
finally what was inside of you
has been raped and killed.
No longer a living being.
One bite consumes your soul
and all that lived.
Upon this Earth you now roam.
Tortured and alone.
Void of all emotion,
just a cold dead stare.
Death.......
Is only what you crave.
A beast in the shadows
is what you've become.
Killing....
without mercy.
Seeking only what you
can not have.
Eternal peace.
Satisfying your craving
for death,
you feast on the bodies
and the blood of
the weak and innocent.
Half man....
Half wolf....
By the light of the midnight moon
you are enslaved
to your curse.
Author notes
Written October 20th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- The Wolf Within by blackrosesteph.
450 points, ended August 13, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - VAMPIRES POETRY & STORIES by ennovy.
700 points, ended March 17, 31 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 13 of 13
-
Life ain't easy for the werewolf. Thanks for entering and good luck in our contest.
Novy & Brazos -
This a very well done piece of art...paints a excellent picture of the lycan/werewolf........thank you for entering...Novy & Brazos
-
This is pretty cool, so is the background lol.
Satisfying your craving
for death,
you feast on the bodies
and the blood of
the weak and innocent.
i like this verse a lot, good job and good luc -
I'm not sure I follow how this is about "the wolf within". It sounds much more like "the demon within" or "the emptiness within". I'm really not trying to throw sour grapes at you or anything; if I hadn't read this poem in the context of the contest, I would have had no idea whatsoever it's supposed to be about a werewolf. It would have really helped if you'd included some references to actual wolfishness. Even reference to bestial features like a snout or fangs or claws would have helped a lot.
What would especially do it is some reference to how the main character became how they are -- just mentioning a bite as the cause of their current state, for example, would be enough to jog the associations and realize the poem is about werewolves.
As it is, though, the idea that this won gold in a "wolf" contest when there's not a single trace of 'wolf', whether realistic or otherwise, in it is ... strange. -
-
That curse which lives inside
of you always to remain hidden.
you feast on the blood
and the souls of
the weak and innocent.
By the light of the midnight moon
you are enslaved
to your curse.
if that does not say werewolf then you tell me what does......
There are ways to elude traces of things without actually mentioning them. Some people can do that, and as you can see, you are the only one that feels the need to critisize that fact.
And for you to suggest any notion that the there was favoritism shown by the judge , without any proof is wrong. Seeing as I have never before spoken with the judge prior to the one and only comment below.
I ask that you back off before I am forced to take this issue to the site moderators.
-
-
I love the first two lines they, to me they brought me right into this tale.
-
-
Thanks for the gold, glad you enjoyed this write.
-
-
thanks so much for entering my contest,, thi swas wonderful and you did a great job here... thank you agian..
-
Great write kiddo you did good. Quentin would be proud of you..
-
Very very well done, my friend! Dark and eerie and so well done! Loved it! All the best to you in the contest!
-
nice piece here, I liked it. dark and on the maybe not so nice side of the lycan..
well done and good luck to you in the contest..
Krystal -
This is good, i'm not into the werewolf thing but I like the darkness of this poem. I think you did well with it
Love you
Elizabeth
-
deep
Woah Master Ktulu this gave me shiver..it is so very deep.You've done a wondeful job.The best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari
Adding your comment:
1 - 13 of 13
4 old applause
