Little Sparrow by Ethereal One at All poetry

I saw a little sparrow
on waking from my sleep,
entangled in the feeder
it almost made me weep.

I got myself together
out the front door I did leap,
to release his tiny leg
from the grip it seemed to keep.

I held his fragile body
very gently as I tried,

it’s position was quite awkward
but he could not be denied.

He slowly was untangled
but before he flew away,
he looked right into my eyes
giving thanks in his own way.

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Perfect Asymmetry
May 2

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This wright is beautiful, I love the choice of words and the flow
Nela
- Ethereal One
  May 2
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  Thank you for reading and commenting.
  So glad you enjoyed it.
  
  Jeannette
Celticmoon
October 24, 2007
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Thank you for taking the time enter and good luck to you!
Candy6
August 9, 2007
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This poem is a great and cute. I love the sparrows. I love reading other's sparrow poems.
- Ethereal One
  August 10, 2007
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  thank you
  Thanks so much for reading about the little sparrow. I am happy you enjoyed it.
  
  Ethereal One
Ethereal One
October 22, 2006
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Thanks for reading this one Sis. There have been so many baby sparrows this year. I was just happy to get him free. I am going to read the mail now.

Jeannette
Blushfulmoon
October 22, 2006
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heartwarming~
Beautiful sis...
I think birds and animals have an instinct when they are being helped out
I could just see this poor helpless little bird all scared then as he flew away eyes bright and singing a song tweet tweet...for your thanks...
Just sent ya an IM and e mail
Love ya sis
Susan~~~
Hope2MakeIt
October 20, 2006
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awesome
He slowly was untangled
but before he flew away,
he looked right into my eyes
giving thanks in his own way.

i think you are talking about the men in my life who are very thankful when the relationship is D O N E!!! kidding. but it did remind me of one flying to freedom after being held 'hostage'. a very great write and worthy of the applaus. hope2makeit
Ethereal One
October 20, 2006
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Thank you for your kind comments on this poem Valerie. I am glad you enjoyed reading it. You are right about animals being able to sense if we are trying to help them or harm them.
In all the years I have been feeding the birds, I have never had that happen before.

Ethereal Melody
superstition
October 20, 2006
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Aww. This is such a cute little story, and animals seem to really know when you're out to do them good and when we're out to do them harm. I love this write...love the sentiment and feel. Beautiful.
Ethereal One
October 20, 2006
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Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem. I am glad you enjoyed the poem, and especially the ending. That bird really did look at me too. lol

Ethereal Melody
Ethereal One
October 20, 2006
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Thanks for reading this one Lisa. I appreciate your kind remarks, and I am glad you enjoyed reading this one.

Ethereal Melody
Ethereal One
October 20, 2006
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Thanks for reading this one Jeannette. I appreciate your kind remarks, and I am glad you liked it. It made me feel good to help that little bird this morning.

Ethereal Melody
Ethereal One
October 20, 2006
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting on this poem. I am happy you enjoyed it.

Ethereal Melody
October 20, 2006
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Awwwwww, this is such a sweet poem. I especially liked the ending (not because it was over but because the ending was good lol). cute picture too
esroddo
October 20, 2006
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Really sweet and lovely. Well written I loved it (Lisa)
Wolf Mistress
October 20, 2006
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awwwww this was real adorable....and made me see this little sparrow in your hand ....good job you did on thisone..
My favorite part was this....

I held his fragile body
very gently as I tried,
it’s position was quite awkward
I really could have cried.

XXJeannette
Face of a Joker
October 20, 2006
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Awesome
Awww i really liked this poem1 It was very cute and kind. Keep up the great work!