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Love forever.

A small little wink,
Of round bright eyes,
A gurgling song,
Towards the love of life,
Pristine toes,
Unblemished skin,
Little understanding,
About the world he lives in,
The mother watches over,
Her eyes are ablaze,
Neither with hate or anger,
But with a love that will outlast,
Anybody,
Any event,
Any life,
That will last forever,
Throughout times outlandish ways.

Author notes

This is a bit difficult for me as my poems are normally quite depressing. But watever happens i gave it my best shot.
Written October 20th, 2006

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  • LilyHolt
    June 17
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    I liked this. It's beautiful.

  • heartsnbows
    December 21, 2006

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    aaaawwwwww

    now this is beautiful, what a joy to read, fantastic, take care and please keep writting, i loved this.


  • CrimsonxxMachete
    October 25, 2006
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    I liked this piece but it through me off when you went from a little bit of rhyme to free verse. Sorta just freaked me out and made me have to step back and take another look. LOL This had a great meaning that made me say "awww" just as the subject meant. Great job.
    Love,
    Marisa
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  • Frodofan silver member
    October 20, 2006
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    Pretty good a nice piece of free verse with some rhymes fit in as well. Not bad. Glad you made it in.