Blonde ponytail flying through the wind
soarin' with my dreams to a faraway land
Just me and my horse, he's my best friend
Runnin' down the road, we're kickin' up sand
Golden summer sun on my back burnin' hot
teachin' me lessons, I learned such a lot
Trust and patience to name just two
He never let me down, and together we grew
If little girls didn't dream of hooves
poundin' on the Earth
mane blowin' in their faces
finally knowin' their worth
sweet brown eyes
never tellin' a lie
soft nose against their cheeks
smellin' sweet as apple pie...
without horses, where would little girls be?
Growin' up together, we had our fun and flings
But girls become women, going on to other things
They put away their childish dreams, for just a little while
And put on grown up attitudes, and sport a grown up smile
One thing I've always known: The little things in life
Will keep me whole and steady thru turmoil and strife
And so I have a special place, where I will always hold
The memories that I have today which should not go untold
Because...
If little girls didn't dream of hooves
poundin' on the Earth
mane blowin' in their faces
finally knowin' their worth
sweet brown eyes
never tellin' a lie
soft nose against their cheeks
smellin' sweet as apple pie...
without horses, where would little girls be?
Without horses, where would we be?
Author notes
My mom and I wrote this song together. Hope you like it!
In a list
A contest entry
- Write Me A Country Song by TheseAreMyWords.
300 points, ended February 11, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write Us A Song by SensualWhispers.
525 points, ended February 10, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Congrates
I like it don't ever stop writting i see that you could have a career from it
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lovely....
excellent background and i loved the first two stanzas just magnificant.. Blonde ponytail flying through the wind
soarin' with my dreams to a faraway land
Just me and my horse, he's my best friend
Runnin' down the road, we're kickin' up sand
Golden summer sun on my back burnin' hot
teachin' me lessons, I learned such a lot
Trust and patience to name just two
He never let me down, and together we grew
excellent work. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Kassie. -
Wow
Hey! This is great! It's really sweet and true too. "without horses, where would little girls be?" Makes me think of the carefreeness of a childs life. Well done.
Shady
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I appreciate your kind words very much. As for you offer, may I think about it? Maybe send me a link? I'm not sure that I will have the time, but I would love to at least check it out. My mom collaberated with me on this, so can she join your site? Her name is Ozma. I work all of the time and I honestly don't know if I will have the time it probably takes for your site. I really really appreciate the offer though. You have no idea how good that makes me feel! And, if I don't win the contest, it doesn't matter bc I feel like I have won with your wonderful comment on my work! Thank you so much!
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Beautiful Write!
Love the view! The images were almost like art work, so brilliant and vivid. The tone in this piece was also something to cheer about. After reading this poem I have a warm and fuzzy feeling in my gut, that is always a good feeling. One that I don’t have as often as I would like too.
Favorite Stanza:
Blonde ponytail flying through the wind
soarin' with my dreams to a faraway land
Just me and my horse, he's my best friend
Runnin' down the road, we're kickin' up sand
The repetition you used gave the poem a song feeling, which is what I was trying to help authors gain a bit of understanding to different types of poetry. In lyrical poetry, there is a smooth flowing, almost symphonic feel to it. The flow should begin and end on the same note more or less. This was a tough contest, so no worries about your talent. You have much talent! I enjoyed reading this and would like to invite you to join my wiring group that will be starting officially in its permeate home (a website that I am having built)
There will be writing workshops for several forms of writing, poetry, free verse, blank verse, narrative, sonnets, ballads, limerick, lyric and short story writing as well as a class on writing query letters for publishers/agents. There will be three instructors, on editor and several poets helping in the workshops. I would love it if you would come on board as one of the helping poets, you would get the classes for free with this invite, since it is my site, well I can do what I want!!
I hope you accept, even if your poem does not place. It is hard to pick the top three with a contest as this. The form is the most important element, so I had chosen very carefully. I’m sure this will win other contest or even are published with a little revision (only if projecting a poetry) or for a song writing contest/magazine.
You have a lot of talent, I feel honored to have read your work,
Thanks!
Again,
Thank you!
I’d clap but I need to buy some more points. I’ll come back and read more of your work after I get more and I will find something to clap!!! Promise.
So,
CLAP, CLAP, CLAP
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Amazing!
Without horses, no one would have created unicorns and I would not have written any of my poems lol. I envy you for having a horse. All my life I wanted to ride a horse but my parents would not let me take any lessons coz falling off a horse gets you a serious injury.
Anyways, I loved your poem! I love repeated stanza, it is amazing. The rhyme and word choice are spectacular.
This is one of your best poems V, so if you have more horse poems that I have not read, please send me their links in an IM(s).
Keep on writing and good luck in the contest. You deserve to win!
Nooni
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Thank you for revising your entry!
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horses and little girls dreams
Yes those steeds do have a big heart and they do take you for great adventures as they canter on morning's fresh breath..
Lovely song and true of horses and those who love them ..
Great little rhyming song.
Edited on Oct 22, 11:41 p.m. because ''. -
I love it. I love horses and I love the background.
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Well then, let's go....thanks
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You got it!
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Thanks so much
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Love it
I love this,it makes me want to be there riding with you.My love,Don. -
[[wads up old copy of song and throws it away]] This is a little different than the first version isn't it.
This is great and I can hear it with the music. Excellent job.
Paul
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