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"My Everything"



Darling

you are the light
of my life
the candle in my room
I burn for you

you alone
are the wonderful dream
I sought and wanted
and could never find..


until you

you have become
the music in my life
the melody and rhythm
that paces my heart

my future

the place I am going
from where I have been
for so long
a sea of loneliness

my dream
my destination
my destiny in love


forever yours

you are the face
I see in my dreams
the eyes
that draw me near


my lover
the warmth
I feel in the dark
with your tender love

my friend
the one that listens
loves me
even if I fail

the center
of my soul
the beginning and the end
of my thoughts each day

the place where I reside
inside you

and most of all

you are my love
the place where I keep
my heart

entrusted to you

and now
you have become

my everything





LeeL



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Joyce, I wanted to give this to you, Rick
Written October 20th, 2006

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  • Nicole Hanna
    July 6, 2007

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    I asked for left align poetry, but I must say that this has a wonderful dedicative feel to it. Even though I don't know any of the parties involved, I always feel like I do after reading pieces like this. Many thanks for entering my contest and allowing me to take a peek.


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 6, 2007
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      Hi Nicole


      I forgot your preference

      If you like, I can left align this

      Thank you for your close reading

      Rick


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    July 4, 2007
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    That does entail everything. A very emotionally open write. I so enjoyed this poem!
    Azlyn


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 4, 2007
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      Azlyn


      This great woman still writes for me

      She is an impossable dream

      I still care

      Rick


  • mysticstorm gold member
    March 8, 2007

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    Rick,
    This is a beautiful write you have penned for Joyce. I know she adores you and your love and friendship. What a wonderful way to show her what she means to you.
    Very romantic and tender write.
    What a wonderful place to keep your heart, not easy to entrust another with something so precious.
    Beautiful!


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 8, 2007

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      Hi Mistic

      I think we were very good together
      We are still close friends

      She says I am like my words
      That is the nicest thing that can be said to me

      I thank you for you kind comment

      Rick


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    January 31, 2007

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    Just reading my favorite poem that you gave to me.
    I love this one the most, of all the ones you wrote for me. This is where I come when I am missing my special friend the most. The words in this write has touched my heart more and more each time I read it. I feel close to you when I read these words.

    " you are my love
    the place I keep
    my heart ".

    Now that is what I call true beauty.

    Love Ya.
    Joyce


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 1, 2007
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      Joyce

      Thank you for reading this

      I made many pritty words for you

      You were a great insperation for me

      I have been blessed to have known you

      Love Rick


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    December 14, 2006

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    this is beyond beautiful,
    i love this write so very much,
    it is another one of my favorites.
    you can be the most loving man ever.,
    you are so good to me.

    joyce


    • Endeavor gold member
      December 14, 2006
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      Joyce

      This is also a favorite of mine for you.

      Some words become more inspired than others

      I was full of the thought of you when these were created

      I feel it now as I read them again

      Come close to me my friend

      Rick


  • savagevoid
    December 5, 2006
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    great

    inspiring, I wish my boyfriend was like you!!! he doesn't believe in love.


  • poet2angels gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    Such a beautiful declaration of love,Rick!
    TY so much for sharing your wonderful words with us all!

    Lynda


  • Kiran silver member
    October 24, 2006
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    Oh i loved this!!!! I can relate to such wonderful feelings myself, and there was a great depth of emotion to this! Beautifully written..(i couldnt help but comment!) Was so lovely!
    Kiran

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Thank you for reading so many times. That is a great complement, Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Freespirit, Nice of you to say she is lucky, of corse I feel the same my self, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Granny, I thank you for reading my thoughts, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Tolerance1, I think you are shoping in the wrong isle of the store. Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Rosemarie, I know you have read most of my writing. I have loved, lost love, found love, lost love again, and now hopely found somthing perminent. I can only say, Machines are easer to deal with then women and men, and romance. I say, look again and be brave.

    Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Oce, I wrote this stright out and never notice "it" till I read it with "You Are" in mind. I am always open to thought if it makes my work read better. I found ways to remove the repetition and not harm the meaning and the thought. Please re read and measure the difference. I think the work was improved. I hope you will forgive the trite words, I give them in the thought of deep romance for this woman, Rick
    Edited on Oct 21, 1:55 p.m. because 'Spelling as usual'.


  • phsycoawesomeness
    October 21, 2006
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    tis awesomeness

    a beautifully romantic and grand poem, i loved reading it so much, i read it twice, and i'll read it again
    i love it, i love it, i love it,
    and although i feel this way about someone, and she doesnt feel the same way back, it still doesnt fail to inspire me, unto no end,
    i love love
    nice job


  • Tirrell
    October 21, 2006
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    Beautiful Cosmic Fabric:)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    very nice write, I found it easy to follow, with nice images. very sweet. emotional flow.--Robert


  • freespirit51
    October 21, 2006
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    Wonderful and a truly romantic poem. You have a special inspiration in Joyce and she is lucky to have you. continue the great penning.


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 21, 2006
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    Wonderful metaphors you have used here - sentiments well expressed in these lines - make it easy to read and understand what feelings you are conveying.


  • October 20, 2006
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    Ahh! How wonderful is young gay love!


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 20, 2006
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    awesome

    very heartfelt. sincere. loving and disgusting that noone in my life feels this way towards me. but, filled with hope that dreams do come true. thank you for sharing your heart with me. viyanna rosemarie

  • ocerus
    October 20, 2006
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    This is okay but suffers from certain flaws, specifically the repetition of "you are." You don't really need to say that at the beginning of every line, yet you so frequently do. It makes the poem seems a little childish. Also, I felt you could have been a bit more imaginative with some of your metaphors here. Most of them just seemed liked tired, old cliches. - oce

  • savagevoid
    October 20, 2006
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    awesome

    I wish my boyfriend was like you


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Victoria, I thank you for reading and commenting on this writing.
    Thank you for saying well penned. Love Ya, Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Tia, you always leave me the nicest comments. I think you like my style of loving in words. This women took me by suprise. Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Miller, it you can feel my words, I did my work in words well.

    I thank you for you nice comment, Rick


  • soulfultia gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    excellent

    Love does inspire all, It truly inspires you. You have penned yet another lovely piece to be simply absorbed and admired. Lovely words and rhythm to this piece and it just flows so softly and quietly as you read.... Just lovely Rick. It is a pleasure to read your work as always ~Tia


  • duckee
    October 20, 2006
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    loved it

    i loved this poem it really reminds me of the love that i have for my justin. hes my everything. thank you for relfecting your thoughts and feelings in such a way that others can relate to. <3-MiLLerGuRrL


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Master, your comment is quite perfound, I think my attorny could answer you better.

    In truth, to give so much is safe, if and only if, you have chose your lover well.

    I thank you for reading, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Morgan, I am lucky, to have a women like this to write for, rick


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    interesting piece. trying to grasp reality myself. a man of many facets. Any woman yes would be honored,with such gracious words. Well penned.
    VSutton


  • Master Anarchy
    October 20, 2006
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    Love is the law

    I like the way "r" and "n" combine in this poem. (Plenty of poor couples I know would appreciate it too).
    A specious, if not philosophically unserious comment: if this person be "your everything", do you still exist? And therefore have nothing to give? Are you now a Taoist?

    A tad cliched for my other than simple appreciation - I know the feeling, but it bespeaks an immaturity in love, though not an insincerity.

    Love Life, Light Liberty.
    Love is the law, love under will.


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Molli, if you read almost anything by me, you will see where love fits into my mind. I thank you for reading, Rick


  • Mrs. Mautino
    October 20, 2006
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    awwwwwwwwwwwwww that is SO sweet. She's a very lucky woman to get a poem like this! -MK


  • WishMeAway--x
    October 20, 2006
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    That is so sweet! Love is the most magical thing any of us will ever experience!
    Always
    Molli

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Thank you for reading. I think this is more like, "New Love"


  • AgeofAquarius
    October 20, 2006
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    Beautiful write Rick!
    A beautiful tribute to loves grandest moments, first love. Very tender and comforting to your Joy...



    For both of you...


  • ScarletO gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Seems I read this before,,,it is deliciously filled with love. You have a wonderful way of expressing yourself so sincerely. Love it.


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Trista, you are one of a kind and you are right. Must be that Friend thing again...lol Mabey I will do a secound book

    "Words of Love for Joyce"

    I thank you for your gracious words, My lovely AP Wife


  • trista gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Hi Rick,
    Me thinks you will have an entire book written just for Joyce at the rate you are going. Your words are soft and I know they come from your heart. Any woman would be honored to have them written for her. I bet I am the only wife you've ever had who would not be green with envy.

    Much love,
    Your AP wife,
    ~J.


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Thank you for reading. I live to make her happy. This work in words is becoming a personel favorite, Rick


  • JoyfulWriter
    October 20, 2006
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    This is so precious and beautiful, Rick! It seems you have made someone a very happy woman......smiles, Terry

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    I thank you for your very flattering comment. My best is farther back, Rick


  • esroddo silver member
    October 20, 2006
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    Excellent I loved it truly amazing I applaud

    Wow I think I am in love. Your words have entered my heart. Your words are so full of passion and love. I can feel them as I read them. I love this stance (Lisa)
    "you are the center
    of my soul
    the beginning and the end
    of my thoughts each day
    the place where I reside
    inside you"

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Thank you so much for reading. If you find the word, tell me, Rick


  • KirstenWar
    October 20, 2006
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    beautiful

    this is really beautiful, cant find the perfect word for it, but i love it


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    My love, if even once on our lives, we are able to have a dream come true, we are blessed. I have had many dreams become reality. My most induring has always been, a great women to love. I feel now, this moment, my most needed dream of all has come to me. For now, I found you. Hiding on my page, reading my words, never knowing what you would become to me. Now, you fill my dreams. I thank you for feeling my words to you, so completely.

    Rick


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    i adore you...

    i'm your everything
    wow that is the most beautiful,
    thing anyone has ever said to me.
    i had tears in my eyes as you,
    read this to me this morning.

    I'm going to do what you do a lot of times to me.

    here's my favorite part.

    Darling

    you are the light
    of my life
    the candle in my room
    i burn for you.

    you alone
    are the wonderful dream
    i sought and wanted
    and could never find.

    until you

    you are the music
    in my life
    the melody and rhythm
    that paces my heart.

    you are my future
    the place i am going
    from where i have been
    for so long.

    a sea of loneliness

    you are my dream
    my destination
    my destiny in love
    forever yours

    you aare the face
    i see in my dreams
    the eyes
    that draw me near

    you are my lover
    the warmth
    i feel in the dark
    with your tender love

    you are my friend
    the one that listens
    loves me
    even if i fail

    you are the center
    of my soul
    the beginning and the end
    of my thoughts each day.

    the place where i reside
    inside of you.

    and most of all
    you are my love
    the place where i keep
    my heart.

    entrusted to you

    and now
    you are

    my everything...

    still crying here lol.
    but you know your brat well.
    thank you so very much.

    love you joyce



  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    i adore you

    love joyce

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