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Painfully Deflowered

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Exhausted, bloodshot eyes

muscles weak and worn

bones frail and sore

my mind filled with chaos

causing migraines to erupt

laying my head upon the pillow

closing my eyes, I drift

into the darkness

then, there it is

the face of evil taunting my vision

disturbing images flash

distorted thoughts remain

hands attack with unwanted

physical contact

manipulation and mutilation

settles into my being

a mangled spirit

painfully deflowered

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Exhaustion.......
Written October 20th, 2006

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  • Dead Star--x
    August 1, 2007
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    you wont know just how much i relate to this poem
    thanx for entering
    CureMyTragedy


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 1, 2007

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    wow, this is really good. I'm sorry tht happened, tho. you did a good job writing it. good luck.


    Crimson


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    July 31, 2007

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    That face of evil is unrelenting. This is a powerful write, filled with emotion, even though it is a short piece.

    Good luck in the contest
    Storm


  • PoeticFlame
    November 7, 2006
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    Hello there again. I just wanted to say that I can relate to you in so many ways. I have no pride in myself. I have been abused in all sorts of ways by lovers. I did hate myself all the time in the past but I think I'm doing better now. I don't know. Anyway, I just wanted you to know that I'm here for you if you need to talk to somebody about anything. I'm going to school to be a counselor so I want to help as many people as I can.


  • Poetic Sunshine gold member
    November 3, 2006
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    Thank you fallower, I appreciate you for taking the time to read and comment. Glad you liked my write.

    Sunshine


  • panegyric ink
    November 3, 2006
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    i wish i could write as well as you do. i love your thoughts and how you've expressed these thoughts to the reader!


  • Nicole Cudworth
    October 27, 2006
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    Amazingly done. I don't think there's anything to add after reading the other comments so far. I agree... keep your head up. Think happy thoughts and such and always keep writing for it allows the soul to settle for a little while.

    Love and luck to you in all you endeavor.


  • ckwriter69
    October 22, 2006
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    Hi Sunshine, what a poem. Very dark and meaningful. It is so sad to read of those feelings of abuse and unwanted contact. No one should ever be forced to do something against their will. Keep your head up and keep writing, rid yourselve of those damaging nightmares. Thanks for sharing.
    Love Yah,
    ck


  • Andy Stephenson
    October 20, 2006
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    This seems that it might be closer to home than I would want for you. I hope you are getting along better soon. I know how exhausted one can feel when not getting enough rest for a period of time. I try to get at least six hours in a twenty four hour period. I am bipolar and it is necessary to keep me sane. Anyway, this is a very good dark write.

    Andy

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