The pendulum of lofty time and space
is swinging gently hither fore and to.
It’s here we find we’re privy to a place
befit a lovely Elfin bride and groom…
Though perception is deception’s hand of doom.
“Hear ye, hear ye! Gather ‘round,”
was heard throughout assemblage,
“We’re here today to grace this ground
though ground be naught as can be seen…
I guess there must, it’s just so damn serene…”
“Step quickly now up stairs of silvered white,
yet carefully young master or you’ll slip…
The future of your daughter seems so bright!
All know what pity’s sake that’d be…
How would you swirl and twirl her, ‘Pon broken knee?”
Thrown wide are crystal doors they saunter through
to waiting groom so handsome and so virile,
when magically musicians strum on cue--
As all turn toward doors in whispered sighs…
To see the elfin girl, a pearl in father’s gleaming eyes.
Her thoughts on passing those assembled there-
“I must confess his relatives are queer!
Though they’ve elfin ears, complexions fair,
I’ve never seen the likes of these…
Who sniff my hem, cough phlegm and buttocks squeeze!”
Her father places on her hand
a kiss of blessings for the day,
and nods to groom of illustrious land
then slowly gives her hand in his…
But not before he’s lured by sounds of bubbling fizz.
It permeates the air they breathe,
he fumbles toward his cushioned seat,
then sits and stares ahead; enwreathed
by mindless dreams on long retreat…
Where love is caught or bought, by webs deceit.
How sudden beauty fades away
from trolls once clothed with elf mystic.
They’d waited years to avenge the day
their king was felled from elfin stick…
His darkened heart departed; death came quick.
Snarls heard, bloody garments torn!
Alas, witness’ do they naught.
These elves were as a baby born
with nary a single helping thought…
For if they’d known, they’d shown this horrid lot.
The pendulum of lofty time and space
still swings so gently hither fore and to.
It’s here we find we’re privy to a place,
not fit for any bride and groom…
Lest we forget-- Perception was deception’s hand of doom.
Author notes
Combination 1 and 3
Picture/Story -- Tragic comedies -- where would we be without them. Best read aloud with emphasis of a minstrel player, I hope you enjoy!
In a list
A contest entry
- Show AND Tell! Image contest with a twist!! End date extended by request!! by DK akaLunaticSerene.
650 points, ended November 14, 2006, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pick! It's up to YOU! by redmarkonthewall.
525 points, ended March 6, 2007, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Well done... excellent images here. I especially like the last line, which reads, both in content and in flow, with wonderful symmetry.
Congrats on the bronze... it's well deserved.
Good luck in your future works.
~Das
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Exceptional
The last entries seem to be th better ones. Maybe I am wrong but for my contest it seems to be that way. This poem is exceptional! Great read and don't worry I tend to read out loud and I love to read with emphasis and such on certain parts, such as the minstrel player in yours. -
Michievous Marvel!
Illustrious Chapel? ILL LUST RIOUS? Wow I stuck at the title for some time. Suddenly the word spluttered its hidden meaning right into my face!
As did the narrative which followed. Some very insigtful lessons you taught in such a clever way, Sandy. And according to the comments, you certainly gained attention by your poetic technique. Absolutely brilliant.
I read all the exit lines of each stanza as a poem on its own, and it painted a very captivating surreal picture.
I am certain DK received the drama she asked for in this write. I especially was struck by the crudeness addressed by this line:
"Where love is caught or bought, by web's deceit."
It almost sounds like a realtime cheat.
Well done.
Myra
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Great mind! :)
Myra you are so insightful and are the first to desipher my jest in the title!
And it's so funny you stuck on that line also...did you notice the wizard standing to the right in the picture? He made the magic possible for their subterfuge..rotten wizard, for the right price he'd do anything! hehehe there was actually two more stanzas involving him, but I thought it was too much and deleted them, leaving just his air of mystery.
Thank you so much for reading and leaving your excellent thoughts behind, I truly appreciate you my friend
Love and blessings
Sandi
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Excellent Read!
LOL Sandi, I was all set for the elfin wedding of the century, and WHOOPS there went that plan! Sure glad I had a seat next to the door so I could escape the carnage!
Your repeated closing line sure has alot of undercurrent and meaning, I think I'll take your advice, I won't ever let perception get the upper hand. Awesome work, Good luck in the contest!
frostymorn
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you'veleadmeinandspatmeout!
Wow! Kinda catches the reader off guard... GREAT! in this sense. Actually, overall, I'd say VERY GREAT INDEED!
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Thank you! :)
Hi fallower, thank you so much for stopping by and leaving your great thoughts behind I truly appreciate it!
blessings Sandi
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Nice Twist!
Great job on the change up! I'm not entirely clear though, maybe I'm thick, which was the troll? The bride or the groom? Well done though! thanks for entering and good luck!
xxoo
dk
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Thank you!
hehehe the groom was the troll in disguise
Thank you for your great thoughts it was a pleasure to write for you.
Blessings Sandi
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That's too funny, because that is indeed what happened! I had that line buzzing in my head for a couple of weeks, I don't know if I read it somewhere, or heard it, it was just there driving me crazy...so I used it to give a little lesson not to repeat certain tragedies. Thank you for your wonderful thoughts and time spent reading
blessings
Sandi
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A very nicely built poem. You lulled me into a nice sense of security and lovely images and then threw me to the trolls. A great story, very true to the genre and a nicely flowing rhymthm.
'Perception was deception’s hand of doom'
a very philosophical line this, almost as if the poem is the vehicle for this moral. Good luck in the contest. -
Only you Sandi would place yourself in competition with yourself by supplying us with two wonderful writes.Both so different that should one not please the reader the other should.There were some very humourous lines that you slipped in That put a smirk on my face Another enjoyable read Good luck in the contest
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Now that was a deep anology!
you're right in part, the pendulum stops ticking to set this fantasy moment and to witness the travesty which occured. On any time line, history will repeat itself, it's up to us to not make the same mistakes as were witnessed in the past.
Thank you so much for stopping by to read my scribbles and for taking the time to leave your great thoughts behind, I truly appreciate it
many blessings Sandi
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Paul you are such a gem, thank you! I'm
by all your gracious praise, you've made my day! But even if it never wins anything, I'm happy cause I won your smile, that's the biggest award there is 
many blessings my friend, Sandi
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Masterfully Penned!
lmao I didn't read it outloud but within my mind as I fead silently I heard my voice bellowing it out and well I must say this is quite an ingenius poem! I really am quite impressed with your warped sense of humor from your muse because this is ingenius Sandy! You left me quite speechless but also you really bellowed those words out quite ebautifully. Highly impressive my friend and keep on penning away! You have such a magical way with words! you deserve more than just an applause but an award of some type LOL! Great Poem hands down nothing compares to it! Take care and have a good one my friend. Sincerely, Paul
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Ah Margaret Thank you! I'm thrilled you liked this!
it took me all night and three pots of coffee to get the flow I wanted, especially the variance for that last line in each verse....like an exaggeration Thoughts as yours make it all worth while! and thanks for the heads up, it's silvered 
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Ooh, I loved it. It seemed so pretty at the beginning, after all, who doesn't like a wedding? But then you added detail after detail to show that things were not as they seemed. Excellent story and fitting recapitulation to conclude.
I noticed in stanza 3, "slivered white", which was odd.
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Well, you of all people knows what happens when I've had a couple of pots! I love you!
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Where is the darn popcorn. I have to ask Sharon to make more of that! I had allready fun when you wrote it, but now its done its even more fantastic. What a tale! I just blame it all on the coffee
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hehehee I'm laughing so hard Ms Sophia is looking at me! Thank You!!
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WELL...... you certainly pulled the rug from under me with this on Missy! Here I am reading along in grace and beauty, pagentry all 'round and WHAM!!! CHICANERY!!! Dark, devious, decietful... ooooOOOOOOoooooo.........
A masterful tale, spun by a master. Excellent!
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