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Dream: for Night Hope

the dream came

        so easily: falling in love

   poetry and loneliness

                we had in common

now poetry and warmth

              shared words

      and fierce little whispers

          whip up steep delirium

      elevating two souls

to heights unimaginable

      only birds and butterflies

are so exalted

        rainbow on a hill

            pastel clouds floating through

       hope touches sky

  love is eternal, mysterious

                men have lived and died for it

       O I need your love, Darling

please, please give me your love

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Written October 19th, 2006

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  • grannyeri gold member
    October 30, 2006
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    Like walking down crickety steps at an angle - LOL very unusual stages of lines- kind of scattered in a pattern . Not one I see often. Lovely thoughts, great flow.


  • SekritlyCharmed
    October 26, 2006
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    I adore the phrase "steep delirium" so much. Also "poetry and loneliness we had in common." It just made sense to me. Thank you for this.

  • Gypsy-at-Heart
    October 20, 2006
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    I really love this poem. I love the structure of it and the general message. It does have a almost sorrowful tone in places, but then like the comparison of loneliness and warmth you make it suddenly cheerfully romantic. I loved the imagery in it, especially of soaring because I think it is so appropiate in it's place in the poem.

    Really good work.


  • orionrising
    October 20, 2006
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    Whoever you are, give her your LOVE!!! What a wonderful write. Rich in purity and truth. Loved it. Thank you so much for sharing.

    J


  • individuality gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    oh you are there lol i thought you were having a break


  • individuality gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    ah love, it is on its twisting path here with you i see, where is wanda? she has been absent for a bit. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • buddyho
    October 20, 2006
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    nice write that really makes your heart an open book for all to read.your sweet words could only have been inspired by genuine and open affection and I wish you all the happiness pal. She is an incredible being!!


  • Rita Krocha
    October 20, 2006
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    One of the Very Best Poems I came across.Its just perfect...Wah, I can describe how good this gets! What way to bring Love and Dream together.They are two lovely words.....two elements that make life even more worth....and in a way reasons why we live....because we walk the lane of life to achieve Dreams and to be Loved. Beautiful!!!


  • Nicole Cudworth
    October 20, 2006
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    This is why we write poetry is it not??? Love and luck to you both. You penned a beautiful write. I like the way it intensified as you progressed. Great Job.


  • MotherMachineGunn
    October 20, 2006
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    Very nice

    I enjoyed the words, and not to be too critical.. but the flow was a little off. There was a touch of sorrow in this, a sense of longing. It provided me with great imagery and I am glad you shared it with us, keep penning
    ~Mothermachinegunn~


  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 20, 2006
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    first let me say... may this feeling last may it survive each bump, twist and turn it's obvious that you and Wanda are happy and this makes me happy
    you've a 'unique' way of writing...in form and vocabulary, which attracts me to keep reading.
    good writing


  • Previn
    October 20, 2006
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    "Love is in the air, everywhere I look around, oh love is in the air, every sight and every sound."
    I can hear the song in my head right now.
    You've got it bad my friend, and thats a good thing, lol.
    Love truly inspires some beautiful words and even more beautiful feelings. Enjoy the ride, make the best of it.
    The poem was sweet. So you found each other through poetry. See
    All Poetry is about much more than just poetry. Thats assuming of course that you'll met here.
    Anyway take care and be well.
    Kind regards
    Previn


  • Teddibly Abnormal
    October 20, 2006
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    heeeeyy
    that was really good~
    i can imagn.. it a slow love song.. that will be sung by lovers all over the world soon
    maybe. who knows.
    awesome write
    keep it coming.
    nicely said and the feelings expressed almost perfectly


  • Summer Dawn
    October 20, 2006
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    when two souls relate poetically it can be very musical to the heart, but it is reality of being together that can kill the dream. nice poem.

  • pvenugopal
    October 20, 2006
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    Beautiful poem. "only birds and butterflies are so exalted" is a superb line. I am not comfortable with "fierce little winds whip up in steep delirium," though.
    -- Venu.


  • moonmagick
    October 20, 2006
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    A short story in a peom. I loved it. Thanks.


  • Caiyte
    October 20, 2006
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    I think this was really good - it almost created an atmosphere when you were reading it.
    Well done


  • soulfultia gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Love it

    And so they danced in words and rhythm... ~Tia


  • FaithInWords
    October 20, 2006
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    you're structure is really cool.
    it's not a typical form for writing poems, but it looked really good for this one, and i appreciate when people can be creative with their format
    great job, the poem was enjoyable


  • masterblaster gold member
    October 20, 2006
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    Hi, it sounds like love is in the air,love is a wonderful thing, this is a very pretty poem and very intense in the last verse, like a plea from the heart, all the best, Di


  • keanes
    October 20, 2006
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    This is good.

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