darkness, silence
not even a sliver of light, strange, this feeling,
as though something is amiss, the silence, blaring
i can’t see, rubbing my eyes, i mumble out loud but
no sound escapes my lips, only the vibration in my throat
panic, disbelief, this can’t be? why can’t i hear, see?
oh, God, what’s happening? why?
what did i do, God? what did i do for you to do this to me
my children, my grandchildren, will I ever see them again?
is this to be my life?
forever darkened… forever silent…
dee garner
© october 19, 2006
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This is what I imagine it might be like to wake up blind and deaf
Written October 19th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- The Contest Said... by individuality.
300 points, ended October 20, 2006, 2 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Kudos!
Why do bad things happen to good people?? This question remains unanswered fot time imortal.A poem deserves silver trophy
Dr.Hemant Vinze -
Oooph, scary thought! Your feeling here, about never seeing your children (and grandchildren) again, would also be what would freak me out the most! That and the isolation captured in the words: forever darkened… forever silent…
You have made this very real, it is a great write.
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woah!
woah! that was like...a little mind numbing there,
i LOVE your description of your reaction to fears, the rubbing the eyes, not being able to speak i mean wow!
i am assuming (ya know what that does) that this is about waking up blind and unable to talk?
well, if i'm right, i imagine you've captured that angry, panicky, sick feeling when you realize what's going on.
same thing happened to me once from too much cough syrup, i FLIPPED out when i woke up cause i thought i was blind (lol)
anyways, enough of my ramblind, great write!!
- joe
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Congratulations on a silver win Dee... well deserved. You depict so well just what it might be like to wake up only to find you're blind, deaf and can't comprehend why it has happened. That would definitely be a scary thing to wake up to!! Yes, we definitely have to be grateful for what we DO have, just in case someday it just isn't there!!!
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You cut the contest short ? Thank you for the silver, though
Dee
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Thank you for the silver, Ian I see you cut the contest short, though
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What a scary thought. So much we take for grant-it not stopping a moment to realize things can turn for the worse in a split second. You depicted well a reality of darkness and silence in this piece. Good luck to you
~Mary O -
Yep, that would be bad, but the way I look at life someone ALWAYS has it worse than us. Even tho this would be bad, it would be even worse if they were paralysed so couldn't move too.
This is probably one reason I don't get super upset when life deals me a bad hand, for I know that no matter what cards I am dealt. It could always be a worse hand or even no hand at all.
Hugs...Eddy -
deep
This was very deep granna.You've done a powerful job..I think that would be a lil scary waking up to that..I couldn't imagine.
Kari -
forever darkened….forever silent….
ellipses are three dots for their correct use dee
now this is more like it yes, you focus more on the emotional rather than external. just those ellispes you need to edit. good job i couldn't delete the contest eh
thanks for entering and good luck
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