Stay in your dream world
Where everything is perfect
In the place where the Demons can't get you
And the Angels keep you safe
Don't open your eyes
For the blood of the dead
Surrounds you
But don't worry my little one
I'm here to protect you
Try not to listen
Cover your ears, I beg you
I don't want you to hear
Screams of pain
Then the cries of death
As the Demons kill the people around you
Don't make any noise
So they won't know your there
Let them walk by
Try to make your self invisible
It's the only way to survive
Killing surrounds you my little one
The earth over flowing with all the blood
Decaying bodies littering the grounds
People crying as their loved ones are killed
Begging for there lives that are never spared
I'm trying to save your sanity, my child
So don't open your eyes
Please cover your ears
And try not to make a sound
Just stay in your dream world
Where the Demons can't get you
And the Angels keep you safe
Cause the world around you
Is nothing but a nightmare now
Author notes
ok this came out of no where so I wrote it and posted it... so tell me what you think.....
Loves....
Written October 19th, 2006
Loveaswellashate<---------my name^_^
A contest entry
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This is fantastic! I love dark poems like this! I don't even know what else to say!!
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wow
I like the intensity in this piece and the background almost made it darker than it was. The words are a bit dark so maybe they could be lightened a bit but overall, the imagery was fantastic. Congrats on the HM!! good luck in this contest!
loveees,
transit!!
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a very dark piece. but very well written. only thing is that it is a little hard to rad- maybe change the background a little?
thank you for your entry,
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This is graphic. I put in the rules no killing or suicide. It is creative though. Bravo! Best wishes to you in the contest!
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A-M-A-Z-I-N-G
Oh, I can tell you what I think....this was a great piece. Wow, so dark and just wow. You have an amazing talent! I really liked this one! I had images flash through my head very descriptive and good! Thanks a lot for entering my contest, I guess I should be saying good luck but....I've decided your in the next round (next round is not till next week or so, I'll keep you posted
So, I guess I should be saying...good luck in the next round! My final thought on this poem? Simple it's A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!
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lol.. wow.. uhh thanx.. i really happy i get to nbe in next round and i cant wait! thanx for the comment and im so0o0o glad you like it..
Laters
Loves...*hugs*
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oh noes, i'm up against a tough poem. i loved it. great image of some kid trying to survive in a world of pain.
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Very good...
This a very nice poem... What I read this was a little boy being cared for by an Angel telling him to stay safe... While he's looking out a window... Very nice -
I thought this was really good. wish you all the luck in the contest! toodles
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And you should be proud just as I am proud of you. I can't wait to see how you wrok gets better and better as you write on here. I look forard to it.
your fan, James.
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I like this one too, I dont know where it came from but it did so i wrote it and im proud of it
.... BYE!!
Your lil dark poet
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OOHH dark dark dark way to say "Ignorance is bliss" I like the little silver linning you threw in as far as you protecting your lil one. Good poem.
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