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Modern Day Child

If I was a child, I’d go out and play.

Not sit if front of the TV all day.

But, I could see how I would get pretty lazy.

If I ate enough chips and soda to go crazy.

Of course my feelings would always be intact.

Because everyone would be to afraid to have an impact.

In a California town they stopped using pens that are red.

It could hurt a child’s feelings they said.

I could no longer play tag in Attleboro, Mass.

Because someone may get hurt in between class.

The pledge of allegiance I can no longer say.

I guess God and country aren’t important anyway.

I can no longer learn.  It’s not politely correct.

I’m sure living in a bubble will have no effect.

Teachers don’t have to speak English in Lowel, Mass.

I can’t tell what they what they are saying.  How can I pass?

My teacher doesn’t have to teach.  Her union is strong.

I guess they no longer care about what’s right and wrong.

It has been a long while since we could pray in schools.

I have to do what I’m told and follow the rules.

But it is still important.  We have to do what is right.

So please, at your bed, pray for me tonight.

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Written October 19th, 2006 by ringside

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  • Luna Argintie
    August 14, 2008
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    I like your sarcasm.It's a very nice poem, but it's not quite what I was looking for. I wanted something that was shouting for wars and discrimination and those sort of cruel things to be over.


  • LeilaJayne
    May 27, 2008

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    See this is already a trophy winner. Well done, i love it. I like the title aswell. Best of luck to you in the contest. x


  • still.she.waits
    March 18, 2008
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    i like the political slant in this. and the title of this fits perfectly. good jo


  • Great Cthulhu
    March 15, 2008

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    This is a wonderful write about some very tough subject matters. This contest is for HM winners only, thanks for entering, I have to let it go.


  • Amana Araya Jabari
    March 5, 2008

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    love it!

    I think it is so true. We don't often think about how much freedom there really is. This reminds me of a convo I had about tolorance is really becoming intollerance. in line 13 was long supposed to be longer


  • my1lovewearsdiapers
    March 4, 2008

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    The background make this slightly hard to read, my advice change either the font color or the background. thanks for the entry ~T~


  • Charley-
    February 19, 2008

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    Hello there and thanks for entering your poem was very good and very well written best of luck to you and thanks again for entering..


  • Fulabeans
    February 4, 2008

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    Well Written

    I like this piece very much it is quite insightful. I do not see how this is telling of your parents influence on you though.

    well done and thanks for your entry


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008

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    This doesn't sound much like a modern child I would imagine, but perhaps where you luve is different from where I live. Your gentle flow and awesome rhyme helps the reader read this mor easily and enhances the effect!

    Thanks for sharing & entering your write in A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • Naridill
    January 28, 2008

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    Wow ~ firstly wow ~ Minus or with the religion this struck me hard. Beautiful - honest and the words string together perfectly.

    One thing - Line 19 'Play' ??

    Thanks for entering,


  • loveisthemoment
    January 13, 2008
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    this is quite true. but please try to fix the typos. thanks for entering!


  • SweetNessaLynn
    January 10, 2008

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    There are so many bad changes made in our country. Thank you for entering. Best of luck in my contest.


  • tawk gold member
    January 9, 2008

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    Yes our freedom is being taken away little by little. I so agree with your write. Amazing imagery throughout. Good luck in the contest


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 8, 2008

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    wow this is an amazing write which holds deep and powerful wording within this and really makes the reader think well done and best of luck

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