There is a girl
Who is hurting
Wanting to know why?
She has been given the life she has
This girl has gone thorough more hurt and pain
Than many every will
The twist is she is only 16
At only one year old
Her mother was diagnosis with cancer and beat it
Life seemed to be going good, for awhile
Then school started
She became the girl always
Left out and left behind
Many years of taunting and teasing had she faced
Then in fourth grade
Her mother’s cancer returned
Many years of chemo, tests and surgery followed
Then in seventh grade
Her dear daddy died of an aneurysm
In his brain
What is this girl to do now?
A sick mother and a dead father
She goes on, being strong
For both her mother and herself
You would think things would begin to improve
But NO!
In ninth grade
This girl lost her precious mother
To cancer
After that she moves away to live with people
She hardly knows and who don’t really want her
Now at 16 and in the tenth grade
She is still hurting
Trying to deal with her past while
Struggling to live in the present and
Unsure of the future
Living with people who do not understand her
Has added more pain and hurt
To her life
Maybe down the road of life
This girl will stop hurting
For once
Author notes
I would love to be your AP aunt or AP sister
This poem was written when I was 16, I am now 21. THe girl in ths poem is me. BTW, I am still waiting to for the hurting to end.
A contest entry
- For Those Poets Who Have Never Won A Trophy Before by wings of an angel.
525 points, ended February 26, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FAMILY WANTED!!! by Lyre-Bird-.
430 points, ended March 18, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Painful Memories by Twilight4Eternity.
700 points, ended March 11, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Cry Like A Damn Baby by Dorcha Runda.
400 points, ended March 13, 2007, 28 entries
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Comments
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i am so very sorry this has happened to you. you are a very strong person for going on the way you have. i envy you for being so strong for i am not. Thank yo so much for entering and good luck.
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pretty good for a 16 year old. Sorry you had to go through that. I hope things have improved for you. Thanks for entering.
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Firstly I want to thank you for entering the contest!!!!
soooo sad hugs for you
Sooo much pain... your words pull at my heart... Im sorry for your loss.... but you have gotten this far, you have much strength...
I can really reflect your life into mine...
does the pain ever stop? I hope sooooo
I am sure you would make a wonderful aunt or sister
hugs for you
goodluck
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This is a lovely poem you penned here dear poet, well done and good luck in my contest
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So glad you're still around then! Some people would get to the point of apathy, or suicidal tendencies. But it seems like you're handling it well. Unfortunately, we are all waiting for the hurting to end to some degree (some alot more than others, of course). I can tell you, that it does get better. Of course, it usually does when you figure that it's NEVER, NEVER, EVER going to get any better. But, I'm rambling.... I'm sorry that all that happened to you. I think it's a great piece.
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I am amazed to read your work...Imagination is purely beautiful. Yeah and the rhyming pattern makes the poem just perfect..this is stunningly lovely.
you are such a gifted poet..keep it up. I love and adore this poem, and I think many if not all the readers before agree that this is a very beautiful and well written and a well crafted poem. I like the rhyme and I love the alliteration. This is simply spectacular. I applaud you and I salute you for it. This poem has great imagery, so much description and details. Its incredibly good. you have terrific potential. -
This piece really hit home. I didn't loose my mother and father to disease or any other thing like that but my mother didn't want me and my father was excluded from my life. Yes I was the one that was left out an left behind. I know how this feels. Wonderful write and thank you so much for sharing it with us.
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I LOVE THIS PIECE!!!!!!!! It is simply amazing. It is beautiful in all its sadness and truth.The flow is perfect and the emotions are real and intense. My fave part would have to be:
Trying to deal with her past while
Struggling to live in the present and
Unsure of the future
I LOVE this part, and can relate so much. Really this is one of the best pieces I have ever read.
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thanks for the wonderful comment..it is much appreciated. take care
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It's very nice, and it expresses the emotion intended well, but it would still look better if you condensed the lines. Good luck on your next piece of poetry.
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I know i can never feel your true troves of anguish
and heart felt misfortune. With all, you've been through, through your thoughts here it is a task that cannot be readily undertaken without great care. And some of these days you have spoken of, in some ways, though on subtler levels, i can relate, in loss. And have always tried, the best i could to save some of those days that would lead into those tomorrows of dispair, to focus on those, that in by cherishing those moments for love and laughter, that even if for a brief stay, would soak through all of the rest of the times, so sad. And then, remembering that there still are these to surface as they'd in the past, the good tomorrows, that still lay ahead!!! For me, it is your poem that can be turned into an eternal love, that shows so well, for what your parents meant for you, and indeed, that on this path, that they will always look down on you, their precious child, and with so much gladness, that no element of this world could ever overcome. Indeed their thoughts speak now even. They have spoken here in your words.
And for that, I am grateful, and as are your parents in heaven, and for their child. Stay well, dear poet &
take good care.
a friend, fallower.
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wow, this is amazing! you express your pain really well, the story is well told. keep up the good work! -
aww i really feel you pian my friend lost her mum to cancer but her dad is still allive i just cant imagin how much pain you must have felt all i can tell u is that eventually one day things will get better and everything that you have been through has made you strongre xxx
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Sad Reading
It is truely a sad read...The poor thing looks at life like she had no chance...
The write is very good,I would suggest to you that in
Line6 every should be ever...and some punctuation
would make it more dramatic.For this is a dramatic write...Just trying to help
I loved the full effect of the story.Could feel the sadness of the girl.The rejection and abandonment she felt...Thanks for the read..
God Bless and have a Blessed Day.
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The hurt of losing one parent is bad enough...to lose the second is just tragic. The pain you speak of now might not ever REALLY go away, but I hope that it's lessened as the years have gone by.
This is a very heartfelt and sad write, no matter the age. I hope that you begin to have some peace soon. After what you've been through...you deserve it.
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Whew!!!!!! I wish good things and comfort for you!
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Thanks for the compliments! I am now in college but I wrote that poem when I was 16 and that girl was me.
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a very in depth piece with good flow and the imges expressed the plight of this girl so very well,,,blessings...Fire Storm
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