with eyes wide open
in the middle of the day
sweet visions of you.
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Written April 30th, 2003
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A contest entry
- Dreams of a Beautiful Poem (Poetry at its Best) by lotticaygirl7.
300 points, ended May 27, 2005, 23 entries
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i am a fan of senryu but always perefer them to be written in as little words as possible,
just my opinion but this is how i read your senryu (take or leave)
Middle of the day
eyes wide open with
sweet visions of you
as well i try not to use too much descirption in mine but i dont want ot screw aroudn with this poem too much and anyway i break my own rules frequently ill just say it was enjoyed.
JT -
nice haiku. i think daydream is one word.
great job, though.
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Short and sweet. The most direct way to set motion to a great write. Best of luck to you.
[ - Stinger Bee - ] -
This was great!....Loved it!
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Very nice poem about dreams. Short, sweet, and well-written. Has a great meaning behind it. Good job. Good luck in the contest and keep writing!
~CT -
Beautiful
A wonderful poem that in few words gives out a big vision.Thank you for entering and good luck..helen
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Great job!!! I'll be reading more of your stuff.. Please comment on some of my work.. Not very many people comment ...GREAT JOB!!!
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well it is short but i still like it very much and to me it is still a great piece work, thank you shareing
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short but sweet... thats what they say and you know what they're right!
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