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Ultimate Submission

 

Splayed across a canvas of red satin I lay,

dressed in nature's wardrobe for His

pleasure. Silent dominance

radiates from icy blues;

gentle hands blind

emerald gems

with black

silk.

 

Mighty

oak becomes

the foundation of leather

restrained wrists. His whip like

tongue lashed over caramel peaks

inflaming my internal desires of domination.

Brutal talons, releasing lusting passion, race over my

fevered body, bruising flesh. Wolven jaws beastly

devour delicate olive tones, savagely marking

His terrortory. Soft whimpers of pleasure

slip from half parted lips quickly

capturing a stern response

commanding silence.

 

Forceful fists clutched chesnut strands while straddling

over my ripened breasts. Steeled flesh roughly

slammed between strawberry glossed

submissive lips into an abyss of

oral delight. Virile hands

manipulate the tempo

of Desire's lust-filled

injection. Rigid staff abruptly

retracted as masterful digits masquerade

over my aching vessel. Inner columns teased with

an ethereal waltz til bound ankles find restrained wrists as company.

 

Olive tones become branded with rose colored paw prints.

Lip biting pleas for release go unanswered as they

reverberate against His ears. His animalistic

hunger takes over as passion's liquor

rages from a hidden cavern now

exposed. Morse coded

message tongue

tapped with a

carnal urgency

against my taut button.

 

Soaked scruffed beard slithers up over velvety smooth

flesh drenched in Aphrodisian perspiration.Sword

plunges, hard and deep, rupturing the scared

chamber of ultimate submission

overflowing with

unconditional

love and

trust.






 

 



Author notes

For my Master, Blazing White Wolf



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  • Arkbear gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    You Go Bel ~

    Richly favored in this contest ~

     

    Soooo many lines which threw me into a sweat

    of ooze & twitching croth ~

     

    Beautifully *laid* out and grafted with imagery rich in

    sensual affair ~

     

    You have my vote....yet you are up against a

    couple more that have grabbed my

    rod and *stiffened* the competition ~

     

    Well done...and thank you for taking the time

    to *enter* such a *deep piece*

     

    The best to you my Dear ~

     

    Papa Bear ~


  • annoyedfairy
    April 10, 2007

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    That was excellent!!! I loved the form in which you wrote. Wonderful imagery and flow. You have a great talent indeed. Thank you for submitting this wonderful work into my contest.


  • Whoochi gold member
    March 13, 2007
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    Awesome write and form done here...and what wordplay you have created..am sure everyone reads will be thinking in their own minds about this and substituting themselves and their loved one! Then , all will smoke a cigarette and have a shower...heheh..Good job!

  • The tie guy
    March 4, 2007
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    Very erotic and animalistic! Thanks for entering!
    The Tie Gu


  • unanswered
    February 28, 2007

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    wow! that was damn good. It was creatively written and I enjoyed it very much. You express the feelings of a submissive very well. Simply brilliant


  • requiempoet gold member
    February 28, 2007

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    teeehee!! Celtic darling I lovey you!! I read this one already but it's so great and sensual.

  • requiempoet gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    I love how you described him as a majestic animal!!! great job!! Tell everyone you know about this contest!! I want alot of entries! sintilating as usual!!


  • Spiritual Nature
    February 16, 2007
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    Well this was quite steamy. I think I need a shower after that.


  • Ephiphany
    February 16, 2007
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    Superb Structure

    Very creative. I thank you for entering & GOOD LUCK


  • Dorcha Runda
    January 20, 2007

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    i love the structure of this poem! very creative. the feelings in this poem and overflowing, thanks for entering and good luck


  • yumesandman
    January 13, 2007

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    "Nature's wardrobe"- I like!

    The one thing I hesitate on, and though I could see this working since the girl was supposed to be the submissive one, is the capitalizing of "His" in the middle of a line. It makes the guy all the more powerful, but it also makes me think of God and, although it's quite heavenly, I try not to think biblical thoughts during sex.

    Also, there's a few word choice bits I noticed. Um..."inflaming" (it may be the nurse in me, but it makes me think of inflammation), "slammed" paired with "delightful" (doesn't sound delightful!) and "injection" (again, the nurse thing) are a few of them.

    Still, I like the poem. There's something very...violent about it, where sometimes it borders right on that line between sexy and unsexy. Now, if you could only teach the other S/M submissions that. ^_^


  • Asylaarix
    January 8, 2007

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    SHIVERZ

    Wow ... absolutely amazing ... you are brilliant ... The form of this write ... so beautifully done ... the way you made my legs shake through each stanza ... omg ... amazing ... it's so wonderful to see this kind of write ... I love every part of this ... but I do have to say my favorite part had to be ...

    Forceful fists clutched chesnut strands while straddling

    over my ripened breasts. Steeled flesh roughly

    slammed between strawberry glossed

    submissive lips into an abyss of

    oral delight. Virile hands

    manipulate the tempo

    of Desire's lust-filled

    injection. Rigid staff abruptly

    retracted as masterful digits masquerade

    over my aching vessel. Inner columns teased with

    an ethereal waltz til bound ankles find restrained wrists as company.


    SIMPLY AMAZING!!!!! GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST LUV


  • slipperssun gold member
    January 1, 2007

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    This write is awesome. i love the way that it is set out. really looks good before you even start to read it.

    Splayed across a canvas of red satin I lay,

    dressed in nature's wardrobe for His

    pleasure. Silent dominance

    radiates from icy blues;

    gentle hands blind

    emerald gems

    with black

    silk.

    This is where the pull begins. would love to have this written for me... your master must love the way that you weave your words of love for him. good luck in my contest and thanks for your entry


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 21, 2006
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    I love the imagery and language you use... I love how your poem shows both love and lust and how colours, pictures and senses bring out true arousal. Never nicely written. Thanks for sharing and good luck!

  • Thedragonisgone
    December 6, 2006
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    congrats on your honorable mention - well deserved.

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  • Thedragonisgone
    December 3, 2006
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    This pic makes me HOT!

    nature's wardrobe - great phrases here. I enjoyed the vocab.
    so far I haven't heard the soft, lovemaking scene - still looking...
    Enjoyed giving this a read, my dear. Best wishes in the contest.


  • Luna Darling
    December 3, 2006
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    COLD SHOWER FOR ONE PLEASE!!!!

    Good gods! That was the most sensual and hot!! I think I need a shower now...............................................Okay...*goes and reads again* Iiiiiii. Come back to me in about a day or two!xD

    In other words! It was frikin-frakin awesome!

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Jocilynn Destroyed
    December 2, 2006
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    For the love of God!

    Every poem I read it so much better than mine! This was amazing!!!! Holy Hell! The words! Painted a picture like I was there....or at least watching it on T.V to make it sound less stalkerish lol. Great Job! This was totally good and made my day!

    Joci!


  • Lionslove silver member
    December 2, 2006

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    ( i already know this is you, Celtic......so I won't ask you to put your AP name in the auth. box )

    Awesome write again, sweetie!!!!

    All the best in the contest!!!

    .............................Lionslove


  • Trixie08
    November 25, 2006

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    Beautifully Erotic!

    This is a very lusty poem/story I loved the lanuage and emotion you created within the poem. Thank you so much for entering and good luck to you in my contest!

  • Trixie08
    November 25, 2006

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    Beautifully Erotic!

    This is a very lusty poem/story I loved the lanuage and emotion you created within the poem. Thank you so much for entering and good luck to you in my contest!

  • She Stole My Voice
    November 15, 2006
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    AMAZING! Well, thats one word for it! I love this so much. I reall do hope you don't mind me bookmarking this The picture goes with this piece very well too. Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing! Good luck in the contest

    ~ImmortalUndead~

  • ea silver member
    November 15, 2006
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    your writing is just seamless! Very well done. (The pics are nice, too )


  • Blazing White Wolf
    November 10, 2006
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    yummy! my oh my you have a way with bringing my blood to boil so graceful and alluring like words traced in the water with a stick mmmmmmmm Love you, My Lioness
    your Master


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 5, 2006
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    Oooooh you go, girl! Dang! But this was HOT! Thank you for sharing your fantasy and what a fantasy it is! Whew!


  • Kari gold member
    November 5, 2006
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    wow

    woah this is incredible and the format and graphic is amazing! The best of luck to you in the challenge..tho I don't think you need much luck lol
    Kari


  • rollingzen
    October 30, 2006
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    mutuality of dominance & submission beautifuuly expressed


  • Wesley Storer
    October 23, 2006
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    Some great metaphors here-in. You are a great form poet.

  • fairygurl120
    October 23, 2006
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    Wow, this was hot and kind of turned me on. lol Good work! I like your use of description in this peice. Two thunmbs way up!!


  • Fire Storm
    October 21, 2006
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    EEErotic

    a deep sensual poem with great imagery and the flow took you upon a erotic journey that surely could be illegal very very well done,,,,blessings of love and life...Fire Storm


  • Astral Lady
    October 20, 2006
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    What can I say! WOW. This is without doubt the best D/s erotica I have ever read. Wonderfully vivid imagery captured the essence and depth of your passionate submission to your Master. Thank you for putting into words that which I can identify with so well from my own experience, but have never got even remotely near to expressing with such accuracy as this.

    I wish you good luck in the contest, though somehow don't feel I need to!

    Moira.


  • Dragonsong silver member
    October 20, 2006
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    Amazing!!!

    Absolutely amazing, this must be the best erotica I have ever come across on AP, I really love the D/s and the sensuality that streams forth out of your pen. You have captured the Magic that only one who has experienced true submission within a loving relationship can fully comprehend. Good luck in the contest!

    ~Naids~


  • Sunkissedrose
    October 19, 2006
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    It's amazing what something like submission can bring out in a person. This was simply breathtaking..and every stanza a fevered tempo into heated passions. Great write....more!!!

    ~Carrie


  • pyewacket
    October 18, 2006
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    Wow, this is amazing and beautiful!!! It gives such wonderful imagery and touches every sense. This is the best description I have ever read for the feelings of a submissive, truly fantastic!!


  • Desire gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    Wow!!


    Holy Shindig and Party On!!
    What a Sensually Sweeeeeeeeeeeeet~Master Piece
    Meaning Damn HOT Masterpiece!!
    (hoping it comes out right..but not doing a
    very good job of it)
    Every piece of this piece just pieced together~ steams..
    I could cook my dinner on this monitor...
    -prepares for Mongolian BBQ-


    When I prepared my mind to inhale this...I did not
    think to bring a defibrillator...
    Geez
    Thank You for sharing Your talent to get people
    to just strip nekkid
    The form was giving me phallic symbol images

    Best wishes to You in the contest..
    (not like You need it)

    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Lady Voldemort silver member
    October 18, 2006
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    woohoo...this is fuckin awesome.

    Morse coded
    message tongue
    tapped with a
    carnal urgency
    against my taut button.


    ^ That was just great. I love analogies... [laughs]


    ...I'm assuming the visual form of the poem was on purpose? 'cause that worked nicely too.

    MORSMORDRE!
    - The Dark Lady

  • White Dove
    October 18, 2006
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    wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow if I could clap I would. An exceptionally beautifully written erotic poem. Your master is a lucky man indeed. Thank you for sharing your talent.


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    October 18, 2006
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    Sis..this is absolutely awesome. You have again written a piece that is moving and very erotic at the same time, and only befitting to one person....Brother Blaze. Good luck

    lil Bro


  • Lady Wolf
    October 18, 2006
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    one word...wow. cold shower...cold shower...


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    October 18, 2006
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    Holy $#!t woman, this was hot. When I opened this contest, I never thought so many fetishes, 'off th beaten path' things could get these senses stirred. Boy was I wrong. Wow, wow, and more wow. Excellent job, beautiful detail and imagery.

    Thanks for entering and best of luck
    Storm


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    they said it all Sis!!!! Fantastic job and great imagery! Loves ya!


  • tanzanite
    October 18, 2006
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    This was awesome Celtic. Such sensual descriptions and so erotic. You nailed this and I loved it. Well done and good luck in this contest. You definitely rocked this one.


  • RockinToyotaChick
    October 18, 2006
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    Awesome!

    Wow! Potent!

    Reminds me of my last encounter with someone I adore!

    Well written, very erotic, to say the least!

  • RockinToyotaChick
    October 18, 2006
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    Awesome!

    Wow! Potent!

    Reminds me of my last encounter with someone I adore!

    Well written, very erotic, to say the least!


  • Kain
    October 18, 2006
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    I dare not say what just happened.. This is the most.. inspiration I've had in a long time.. Extraordinary descriptions, incredible detail.. Thank you, my dear, for directing me here.

    Yours in lust,
    Kain
    Edited on Oct 18, 11:54 because ''.


  • Lil Miss Pirate1
    October 18, 2006
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    ummmmm you know what i think lmfao! Well written though .
    Just a few pointers if you want them -
    Line five should it be gentle hands bind not blind?
    Also line 32 an ethereal waltz 'till' bound ankles...
    Also you could put a commar after soaked in the 5th Stanza.
    Well done keep it up.
    Lil


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    October 18, 2006
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    No most women would light up take a deep draw and say that was a dam good Shag LMAO mistress of the erotic you have put this most eloquently.... Cop-u-later
    Paul


  • Ami amour
    October 18, 2006
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    Wow, I agree your master will want a cold shower or perhaps a few. If I was him (though I am woman) I will print this and put it under my pillow it is magnificent.

  • deleteit
    October 18, 2006
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    Tantalizing

    Now see, I wish I could write like this and you so got my senses stirred. You are good at explicitly yet tastefully expressing the desires of the soul. {I'm taking notes} I think I'll show my Master, sorta ummmm persuae some inticing action tongiht LOL. Awesome write and I can't wait to read more


  • masterblaster gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    Hi, he will need a cold shower after reading this, lol, erotica is not my big thing but this is well written and bound to be a big success, all the best a good erotic poem, Di


  • Chilko
    October 18, 2006
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    *whistles*

    Wow, this was beautiful...and hot...sexy as hell, and just fun to read. I loved the discriptions you used here, the imagery was second to none. Good luck in this contest, you definately have my vote. Muchas amor, Amanda

  • Kari gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    sweet

    mmmmmmmmm what a wonderful delight to read in the morning. I love it sweety. The very best of luck to you in the contest.

    Kari
    aka
    Broken Wings Fly

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