Dearest diary of mine
Absorb these tears I resign
And record my tortured soul
On it's quest through self-control.
Please consume this fear and hate
Ere my heart they desecrate
And wickedness should predate.
Tonight I bear a dark heart,
I feel like I'll rip apart
At these seams I've healed before,
Stitched and sewn but can't restore.
I fear my face will convey
The sorrow I feel each day
And my spirit's slow decay.
My world is slowly shifting,
Like the sands of time drifting,
From vibrant colors and hues
To a gray I can't diffuse.
Rejections a bitter taste
With a poison interlaced
And I just feel so debased.
Oh, how is it I still live
When my heart does but misgive?
And if the beating did cease
Would death bring a sweet release;
Or would my hunger consume
While I languish in my tomb
For that heavenly perfume?
Wednesday, October 18, 2006
Author notes
I'm in love with my best friend and have been for three years but she is straight and is too good for me; she deserves better.
Image Credit: Humanity by redletterflight at deviantart.com
love is like a photo
In a list
A contest entry
- It feels like the end of the world by Teenage Confessions.
650 points, ended February 1, 2007, 36 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Unrequited Love. by Aureola.
475 points, ended February 19, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i know how you feel im in love with someone that i cant have and have loved him for 8 years now...i hope your friend will at least give you a chance...thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!!
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Powerful words, the imagery is fantastic. Great piece of work. Good luck in the contest!
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wow. this peice had a lot of emotion in it. It filled the requirements beautifully. It's sad that this poem is true, but still it was excellently written.
thanks for entering.
~kit~ -
Very nice. Doesn't it really suck when the people that you fall for happen to be the opposite sexuality? This poem had a lot of powerful emotion. Great write and thanks for entering!
~Memoirs
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This is a really powerful write. I like the picture and ho wit went so well with this piece. The poem which followed was amazing. I enjoyed your rhyme and the rhythm to this piece. Nice flow and grand imagery. Keep up the good work.
Love always,
Kristen ♥ -
Wow
That's wonderful, I'm not always a fan of the rhyming, but this just flowed with such emotion. The third paragraph is definitely the best:
'Rejections a bitter taste
With a poison interlaced
And I just feel so debased.'
Magical!
=P
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Oh my god this is amazing, and I <33 the picture. I know what it's like to be in love with someone who doesn't love you back, and although for me it's a guy, I understand the pain. I love this poem, it flows so well and the language use is brilliant.
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I have been in this situation before. I fell head-over-heels for my best friend who was also straight. I felt that she was too good for me, too. I later realized that I, for once, deserved better. I hope you find happiness whether with her or someone else. I loved the way you expressed the heartache in this.
"Tonight I bear a dark heart,
I feel like I'll rip apart
At these seams I've healed before,
Stitched and sewn but can't restore."
Probably my favorite lines. Thank you for sharing this, and good luck. -
Absolutely lovely. You pulled me right in and I felt the pain right along with you. Take care of that heart of yours and thanks for sharing with us.
~Elora~ -
This is stunningly beautiful...
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A great write, with excellent flow and wonderful rhyme. Your authors comments just topped it all off, I was so saddened by them. What makes you say she's too good for you? I dont believe so and if she really is that good then you will be able to tell her how you feel.
Thats probably the worst feeling, to love someone from afar, keeping it a secret and trying to be normal around the person, especially if you have to see them with another, I know how that just kills you inside.
Well I wish you luck in the contest with this great poem of yours.
Take care and be well
Kind regards
Previn -
That absorbed me into your misery. Your words are so raw (perfect), I felt so much dark deep passion. These words stood out to me most "My world is slowly shifting, like the sands of time drifting, from vibrant colors and hues, to a gray I can't diffuse." Bottom line your words bleed.
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