In robes of passion igniting a craving desire
In disdainful wantonness, devoured by bloom
Apathetic soul dancing to the tranquil lyre
With a heartsick enigma of an impending doom
A mystic gatherer, in rumours sway the trees
Villainous telltales from great shadowy hell
Bizarre conceptions not quixotic like breeze
Lamentable future, the visionaries foretell
Pathetic affection for bonds they never share
Aversion of senses fell not the gloomy scorn
Detested tears show the somber mask you wear
Madly amusing being, now just a doll to adorn
Filled not with loathing just an eternal Ruth
Infatuation with the nosy distressing being
Lousy tearful malice haunts the bitter truth
A hunger for affection, love forever fleeing
Returning from inferior thoughts of their life
Away from mournful devotion of miserable men
Away from the sorrowful, and depressive strife
In hysterical scandals she'll progress again
An inclination to appreciate the chosen path
The extreme walkway on untrodden spirituality
Laughable and amusing, but a cleansing bath
Even to a low babbler in haunts of eternity
Excessive beauty yet remains in this place
Where none fell prey to the entangled net
Where blissful cerebration's entwine in grace
And relish freedom from clutches of regret
Author notes
Abstract poem.
Wakingdevil
Written October 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- Round One of Five by Kei-Aira.
450 points, ended February 5, 2008, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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What a delightfully unique and very creative write you have given us to enjoy here. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Hoodwink! this poem is rich in well used vocabulary though abstract. I appreciate good rhyme and have found someone besides rakerman1 now who can pull it off
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I have a feeling you did this one for the contest by ImKahy
I saw a lot of the words we had to use and I do really like this one well I'm off to reread your other one again
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i love this! its deep, it haunts you, and it makes you really stop and think for a few minutes, this is amazing you are a superb writer in my book, many kudos!!!
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I liek this one. tis powerful. thisis my favourite verse:
Filled not with loathing just an eternal Ruth
Infatuation with the nosy distressing being
Lousy tearful malice haunts the bitter truth
A hunger for affection, love forever fleeing
I liek it. good job. it made me think
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darkly
dark, mysterious, i like the rhyming, a longing ness that will never come it's brutal yet sorrowful
it terrible murder to ones heart i ;like its like a fantasy that can and will and has come true i think i understand if i don't please tell me so -
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Thanks for the comment
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Hmm.. Lovely
Lovely. A well-written, well-thoughout poem here. Great and terrific job. I ABSOLUTELY LOVE the wording you used here it sounds so great and strong and powerful over man-kind alike... sorry... getting a little over excited there. I know I am supposed to pick out what is wrong but nothing really seems wrong at all. I can say my favourite part though-
'Returning from inferior thoughts of their life
Away from mournful devotion of miserable men
Away from the sorrowful, and depressive strife
In hysterical scandals she'll progress again'
I am not quite sure why but it just struck something deep down with in me. You are a great writer. Keep up some good work. -Ryan
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Thanks for the wonderful comment and applauds.It's appreciated
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Hi Wakingdevil, I thought I would stop in to visit your poetry pages here on AP, and I'm glad I did! This poem is very stimulating and thought-provoking, and has me rethinking my simple lil' submission into your new contest, although the mournful voice of mortals is heard there, in 'A Child's Voice' as well. Thank you for sharing your mesmerizing and colorful masterpeice here with all of us!! I'm always grateful for the experience of learning more about the art of poetry!!! Rose of Ireland
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Thanks for the wonderful comment and applauds
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I love the rythm and intelligent flow
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Set verse was different from what i am used to, but still a great read, vry deep, i will need to read this again and again, which is good, it keeps the reader coming back to it, Great work!!!!
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BRILLIANT!!
OMGFG!!! This was excellent. so deep n haunting! i love it!!
An inclination to appreciate the chosen path
The extreme walkway on untrodden spirituality
Laughable and amusing, but a cleansing bath
Even to a low babbler in haunts of eternity
My Fave Part.
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Lol.Couldn't figure out the rating thing.Anyways thanks for the wonderful comment
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Lol.I really have no idea but I din't bother asking
Thanks for the comment.This really took a lot of time especially looking for 50 words and then placing them 
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Fab!
Oh WOW! Each of ur lines is so beauifully written, ... I read it thrice and I think I m getting the meaning now... ... good job again, poet! PS- wats smexy?..amethyst butterfly's comment!
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Damn, this is awesome! I LOVE your poems! Gawsh, you damn smexy writer
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