Colours of the rainbow,
Used in such a way,
To make an abstract picture,
Adding power too the scene I portray,
Where blood is not red,
But now green instead,
So when I touch glass,
I seem to grow grass,
And purple takes over,
from me feeling blue,
And my heart fills with orange,
When I think of you,
Colours corrupt in these few words,
This change brings about bright pink black birds,
Flying so high,
Against a purple sky,
And I stagger through the yellow grass,
Bleeding green quick and fast,
I lose all this colour in the blink of an eye,
Wiping away the sparkling blue tears I cry,
Death stands before me embodied in white,
And i know it's useless to try and fight,
I give in easily and embrace my fate,
My skin fades to a shade of slate,
Plunged into black,
I'll never get back,
With no sight,
And strangely enough you know that light?
At the end of the tunnel?
Well it isn't white....
Author notes
Written October 18th, 2006 all colours 
In a list
A contest entry
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I can agree with you there. Colours are very expressive and they mean something different to each person, but they paint a perfect picture.
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Amazing write. Good luck!
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A wonderful description portraying colours of the rainbow as to the heart and soul and inner feelings. Nicely written with a steady flow, the last stanza is very thought provoking indeed. Well done and thank you for entering my contest. Good luck with this lovely work.
Shaz xx
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Ugh.
I hate rhyming.
I really, really hate rhyming.
But I really liked this.
It really did paint a pretty picture.
Jesus. I wonder how many times I can say really.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Really.
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Hmm..
You already know how much I love this poem!! -
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yeah i forgot lol
hope u still love it!
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This is a very interesting piece. The way you personified the colours makes this a very unique piece. Very original with par excellance execution.
Lines worth remembering:
Death stands before me embodied in white,
And i know it's useless to try and fight,
I give in easily and embrace my fate,
My skin fades to a shade of slate,
In line with the contest, you were able to let me breathe with this piece. The figurative language used is really good. The words has it's rainbow like effect (there's always a rainbow after the rain). A job well done.
I wish you all the best in the contest and thanks so much for sharing. Kep writing.
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That is so cool. This is one of the most unique and original poems I've seen! I love it so much. The imagry was awesome. There was so much packed in. Te flow and rhyme was really intreging, too. I can't express my love for this poem enough. It just kind of hit me and stuck. The concept and all is just so cool. Wonderfully done!
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Brilliant!!!
Yes Yes Yes Yes Yes!!!!
SO GOOD! FANTASTIC! BRILLIANT!
Something different. Blood doesn't have to be red! Grass doesn't have to be green! The colour of love doesn't have to be red and the sky doesn't have to be blue. Imagination is all we need. If everyone had this much imagination maybe there wouldn't be so much depression in the world. You know? People would create their own worlds where they could escape to when they felt sad. It may be fake, but atleast they're happy. Somewhere where clouds are made of water and people are made of smoke. Im a g i n a t i o n .
So basicaly. I love this. And I know you want to know my favourite lines so here they are :
And I stagger through the yellow grass,
Bleeding green quick and fast,
And you know what else? The thing I always mention 'cause it is always so good.
Rhyming & Flow.
This whole poem just rolled off my tongue. Well I didn't say it outloud. But i'm pretty sure if I did read it outloud the words would roll off my tongue
Anyways. I think this is the longest comment I have ever made. And that's saying something.
So. Well done!! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE this <3
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very original.. very weird.. very unusual... very vivid and amazing imagery
great write!!!
gives a total other and new look to what's commonly seen..
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WOW!! this is stunning, i love it... i love it... i love it, i posted something around colour myself recently for a contest but not in the same context as this, well done on this piece it truly is fantastic.
jayjay x
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