Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

The Two I Lookup Too

When I need Strength

I see my father

Son stand tall and proud

Stand up for what you believe

Even if you take a fall

When I need Warmth

I see my Mother

Son be tender and caring

Love with all you heart

Love will take you far

My Father gave me wisdom

Character and my beliefs

He made me a patriot

And a adventurous sprite

My mother gave me sympathy

For my fellow man

She taught me to be honest

And how to be a gentleman

The man you see before you

Is part my mother and my father

I hope that I am a man

That they can both be proud of 




Author notes

I choose two becuase they ar both so much a part of me,  For better or for worse.
Written October 18th, 2006

In a list

A contest entry

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 6 of 6

  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 22, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    Tears flowed down my face as I read this. This is a very touching piece my freind. YEs our parents are a great part of us, good and bad lol. And no matter what they will always be. You have penned a great piece here with such emotion and feeling I can feel you as you penned this. You have touched my heart and soul with such compassion you write about your folks. May God Bless youa nd all that you do.
    Vsutton
    Best of luck to you friend, but seriously dont hink you'll need it.


  • paullallady silver member
    October 22, 2006
    Edit | Reply

    good

    I really liked this. It is really good. The pride and love you have for your parents really shows through in this piece. Your wording was very good. Thank you for entering because I am so glad I was able to read this. thank you again.


  • panegyric ink
    October 22, 2006
    Edit | Reply

    Keep writing!!

    Their couldn't be truer feelings! It's a guarantee you've always had great parents ...it says this in this poem! Awsome!


  • debilynn gold member
    October 20, 2006
    Edit | Reply

    excellent write

    what a wonderful tribute to your parents! i can believe they are very proud of you. your writing shows the warmth of your love for them. keep the ink flowing poet for you are very talented!

  • June-bug
    October 18, 2006
    Edit | Reply

    Fantastic

    Super Charlie, There is no doubt in my mind that your parents are very proud of you. I have seen everything you write about in our friendship and your words. YOU are a wonderful person and awesome friend.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 18, 2006
    Edit | Reply

    Outstanding!

    This is a wonderful poem! Your spirit shows in everything you do, whether it be in writing about your parents, your comrades- at-arms, your children or friends, you look out for everyone and have something nice to say about all. The writing here is a little difficult to read, because of the red letters on a blue background (it hurts my eyes), but I may have bad eyesight anyway. I enjoyed this piece - it is a great tribute to the ones who helped to create a man. In actuality, the man was created from his own self-determination to be like his parents!!

1 - 6 of 6