Water so clear and sparkling clean
It's the color of an emerald green
A slope where the water comes in
Granite so smooth it's a sin~
Around the banks stand pine trees tall
Water so cold it will numb your toes
Sitting here just oh so peaceful
Will release all your sorrow and woes
As I sit and watch the other side
I see a deer at the water's edge
Up in the sky
a hawk silently glides~
Overhead the willow branches sway
And way up high sits a beautiful blue jay
Feel the breeze on my face so cool
What a wondrous place
My emerald pool~
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Written April 30th, 2003
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I loved this! again, the effort in the presentation is well worth it, it really adds value.
A timeless piece this one, lovely phrasing and crystal imagery.
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I know a place just like this...you did a lovely job of bringing the place into reality. i really loved this piece it was lovely...hope to read more soon.
cynthia -
Beautiful piece you have here Susan!
I do so love your nature poetry
Lovely picture as well...very fantasy realm
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And EMERALD GREEN is certainly my favorite color of colors. In heaven, if there ain't no green, I ain't going. In other words, it's full of green. I bet even the angels have green eyes. Another lovely nature wtite. Big thanks. ET
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i really really like this poem, it kinda made me think, maybe this is what heaven will be like...it kinda made me cry, i wish i could see things through your eyes...great job on this poem, there so uplifting and so peacful,
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I wish we could all have an emerald pool..what a peaceful setting!!! The imagery is fabulous in this write Susan.. you take your readers away to the most serene and magical places...If we can't have our own, at least we're able to escape for just a brief moment while reading your wonderful words...absolutely brilliant!!
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AAHHH!!! i'm gonna bookmark it!!!!!! sniffles, it's so great...
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excellent job!
feeling the breeze... what a wonderful place, my emerald pool. this piece takes me away to a place only in my imagination... i know one day i'll find a place like it for real, but until then, i'll just read poetry about it! sigh... love this piece. well done.
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Nice combination between the pic and the words, well describing a peaceful moment in time with nature.
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Outstanding!!!!!
Susan...Fantastic imagery and words that soar!!! I like the thought of an emerald green pool. It reminds me of the colors of my ancestral homeland, Ireland. This poem is just as enchanting as the folklore of leprechauns. Thanks for commenting on "Night Of The Dream Chaser." I truly appreciate your comments because you are such an amazing poet in your own right. ***Ivy Rose -
I think that the rhyme scheme is a little rough on this, but that is only my opinion and it is an excellent write. The imagery is amazing and the subject is beautiful. A great write.
Meg -
Absolutely gorgeous write, I can see it so clearly. It sings like a melody and that pic is wonderful as well. I've reallhy missed reading you (i got to catch uup hehehe) great job hun. blessed be
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An excellently written piece that you have here. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I think I have time for one more before I go.
Damon D. Brewer -
Oh this is beautiful Susan.
I love emerlad and this place you wrote of, where is it!!!??
Beautiful work as always...
Love and hugs, ~ Ce
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I wish I were there with you susan - sounds like the most heavenly, relaxing place - I'd would really benefit from it - so good is your description.
~von~
thanks
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excellent
Oh.... I want to be there and see it all with you. This was one of those writes that enthralls { but that is what nature is all about eh ? } Wonderfully expressed
Reenie
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I'm going to throw in a critique.
In the second stanza
'around the bank stand pine tree's tall'
that was a little out of place. And punctuation, as Hawkie suggested, would be helpful.
You did a marvelous job of transporting me to that 'Emerald Pool'. It was a lovely visit. I needed a moment away.
Roury -
We should each of us have some place like this to escape to/within when the world tries to take away our connectedness with simpler things...
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Very nicely done. It's like a painting on canvas capturing a private moment for us. When I read it, I feel like I'm spying through the brush on you and your moment. Magic, truly magic. - SG
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What a beautiful picture it created. I could picture myself there, walking about which I haven't done in a while. A place of freedom and peace. Dreams are reachable, the stars are in our pockets. Good job. I hope that's where I go someday.
hir -
yet again you manage to have amazing imagery. I would love to go there and have my sorrows and woes released. Seems like a much safer way then anything else, lol.
This is beautiful, stunning even. Can I have an emerald pool just like yours? *smile*
Oh, and I am doing fine.. or at least better. Alot better than I've been recently, so I don't complain
*hugs*
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Oh, Sus, this reminds me of being refreshed, cleansed...free of worries and stress...a calm sweet secret garden and pool. Amazing and healing, I hope you use this place to heal. It's energy is great for serenity. Happy Beltane.
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this is truelly amazing it is so beautfully written, I could see the place in your poem . this was just grand. I love it thank you so much for shareing
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Ah, a most spectacular piece, the wonder of it all, a very beautiful touch to this, a magical transportation to this special place, thanks for sharing, loved this
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excellent piece
A lovely write you have created here,
the imagery is so beautiful dear!
Keep the writes coming so smooth,
know one does'em like you!!!
I loved this piece!!!
-Timothy
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i liked everything except the rhyme scheme. it seems too erradic for what i think you want to say here. the words are beautiful, and well put together, but i think the poem would have more impact if there were no rhymes, or if the rhymes were more coordinated.
OTHER than that. i liked this, it has a very calming and soothing effect, and the imagery was fantasticular
Nicely crafted.
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Wonderful yep I enjoyed this one....
Yes Susan your right I did like this one, a refreshing and lovely poem I liked this and the pictures of reflection very well done
Hugs,Sherry -
Absolutly wonderful and amazing!
Oh my sis!!!! Your poems are just so visually stunning!!
I want to be there experience this place now!!!! It's just amazing how you did this!
~Laura
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Sis this is beautiful.. so calming and tranquil...I really enjoyed this meander into this dreamy place.. as always as wonderful write.. well penned my friend
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Absolutely beautiful!
Ahhh! Susan! How refreshing and peaceful this write is! Wow! You beautiful imagery put me right there, and a measure of peace entered my being as I read, because I was suddenly transported to this peaceful pool, surrounded by serenity and absolute calm. Can I use your pool in my meditations? Lol! Really! Thank the Lord for my imagination because I can transport myself anywhere when I become still and quiet, and I love traveling to new places. This is a place I want to visit, for restoration, relaxation, and that peace that surpasses understanding. Absolutely beautiful, Susan! You did well! Love to you! Will IM you with my addy for the book purchase before the day's over. Lots of work to do today, and through the rest of this week and weekend. Work is good. Thank you again, for this write!--Kelly
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Excellent! Lovely poem!
Great poem, Sis! The surroundings you described are beautiful. Thanks for taking me there!
< 3 Maureen
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Lovely poem, so sweet. You really took me to the pool with this poem. Only suggestion I have it to play around a bit with the structure of it, and punctuation. As it is now, the reader just doesnt get time to stop and breathe. Maybe split it up in two stanzas, and inser some punctuation and commeas? Something like this:
Water so clear and sparkling clean.
It's the color
of an emerald green.
A slope where the water comes in.
Granite,
so smooth it's a sin
Around the banks
stand pine trees tall.
Water so cold
it will numb your toes.
Sitting here
just oh so peaceful
will release all your sorrow and woes.
As I sit, watching the other side,
I see a deer at the water's edge.
Up in the sky
a hawk silently glides.
Overhead
the willow branches sway.
Way up high
sits a beautiful blue jay.
Feel the breeze on my face so cool
What a wondrous place
My emerald pool~
I can't make it centered here, but copy it and paste it in Word or something and make it centered, and you will see the pace of the poem slows. You can make more emphasis on some words like this. I also corrected some grammar and spelling mistakes in my version, I think.
Lovely poem, Susan.
/Jen -
So beautiful, Susan You always bring all your nature poems to life with your amazing images, I wanna go!!!!!
Love ya,
Karen
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wow susan!
you certainly described a place of absolute beauty in this!
your images bring old memories back to life, for i have experienced a similar pool within my lifetime! thank you for bringing back such fond memories!
blessed be
love and light
and
peace be with you
mike -
the imagery is awesome truly amazing loved this
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You have just described Boundary waters as if you were standing there wow. Imagery is wonderful. If you ever get time do a search on Boundary Waters Wilderness Refuge. Oh I miss it so much and this poem brought me home.
Red -
Oh... Susan... what a beautiful, tranquil; serene, and gosh do I need a place like this! My husband and kids drove me nuts tonight! Noise, noise, noise!!! Can I join you in your emerald pool?
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Another beautiful picturesque write Dear Susan ...
Very tranquil and peaceful ...
Love to be there ...
Take care, Dear Friend,
Sammy.
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I LOVE the end! You always have such fabulous nature poems susan! This one was no exception Well done... PS... SHould there be a 'D' in your title? hehe
Edited on Apr 30, 1:51 because ''.
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