Bristled Tears
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Laying here in cabinet cries
Longing through pinhole eyes
I watch as your fingertips caress
Each passionate touch escalating my distress
Your hands part through silken hair
I flinch under the bond of your adoring stare
I witness the break of Twilight's mesh
And the vows you trail across her quivering flesh
Silent tears burn- and I just don't understand
Your presence taunts my soul- bristled and sore
It was my own fingers running through golden strands
Long before you ever walked through that door
Blistex Memories
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Tucked away in a Nylon hold
Blistered through a pocketbook fold
Glistening a glossy ointment plea
I crack and bleed under the display in front of me
Withering as you gently kiss those precious lips
You steal my dreams as beneath the covers you slip
I leak stains of question- will she remember me tomorrow
I just can't let go as I cry Blistex sorrow
Not long ago, I was plenty enough to heal
All she needed for that perfect smile to seal
It was my breath that glided across that delicate face
Long before you kissed this Heaven's grace
Polyester Jealousy
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Strung out Polyester confusion
Hooked in clothes hanger seclusion
Forgotten threads- sorrowed in jealous remorse
Stalking solemn through closet doors
She shivers as snows drift
But you wrap her up in an instant
She no longer needs me- you've stolen my place
Melting her in a Summers embrace
Last winter it was I
Who kept her warm through the night
It was not you but I
Enveloping her in a snug sigh
Who protected that flawless form
Buttoning shields from the bitter storm
You weren't there for her- but my arms eased
The icy pain in that girl's shivering body
Inanimate Emotions
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She used to need us
Though it seems she's forgotten how much
With the strong intoxication
Of your heated soothing touch
So we remain shelved in yearning, envy keeps us weak
Jealous of the words you so perfectly speak
Disregarded because of your unrestricted romance
We aren't blessed with the voice to ask her for that dance
Inanimate... but we posses the truest of emotion
You could never compare to our pure devotion
We'd hold her forever- without broken promises
We love that girl with loyalty that you could never give......
Author notes
Well, I hope this turned out right.. I am pretty satisfied with it. I wanted to do a love poem, but I wanted to do it in a different way.. so this is a love poem through the emotions of a woman's hair brush, chap stick, and sweater. Hope you like it!
Written October 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Factor Finals Round 1 by Frodofan.
300 points, ended October 19, 2006, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This one feels like a series of poems, linking together. Really rather unique, in it's wording, and imagery. Great meaning, too. No wonder I idolize you, so.
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Exactly! I am so glad you felt the different poems molding together. I had never really read a poem that was more than one of a larger picture weaved into one and so I decided to give it a try and hope for the best. Also, this is my very first poem personifying inanimate objects.
though for some reason I still couldn;t get away from the love theme... I am such a sucker for love.
You idolize me???? well if that is the case I think the feeling is mutual because I do not think I have ever met another poet that I adored every single piece from... many pets with whom I love but very very few that amaze me endlessly. Ecspecially at your age, I was still so immature in my writing at 15 and 16.
Amy
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Magnificent!!
Holy Mother of Pearl
What a verse You have penned!
Very Creative and loved how You changed the rhyme for each stanza~
Congratulations on Your trophy win on this Masterpiece!
Many blessings to You
Thank You for sharing Your talent~~
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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BRILLIANT WRITING
BRILLIANT AND WONDERFUL PIECE OF WRITING. I LOVED THIS. THIS WAS EXCELLENT. VERY VERY DEEP AND CREATIVE PIECE. YOU HAVE SO MUCH TALENT. -
very creative and well written. beautiful write and best of luck in the contest. you are a wonderfully talented writer.
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wow wow really different and really good
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Thank you for the nice comment.. I worked for a bit on this and was hoping you would like it. I have never wrote a poem personifying inanimate objects like this.. so it was fun to write.
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Wow, this is very different. I liked the way it was worded thoughout. I thought the flow to start off was a little rough, but then I guess I fell into your beat. Well done. Thanks for entering.
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