Two Poles are on a journey
Travelling night and day
Not even stopping for a rest
No matter come what may
The cold winds blow - the ice and snow
Twas the opposite of Hell
But they must carry onward
As far as they could tell
They sojourn an entire year
From whence the Poles did start
Ending up somehow - someway
At the spot they did depart
Their names I did not mention
I should have from the start
One is North the other South
8000 miles apart
Author notes
Don't know what inspired me to write this one - just wrote it this week - Sometimes I write on the lighter side too - ha ha - I guess it's a spinoff of my poem "From Where I Stand" - I believe this poem came from on high - thank you Lord.
Written October 15th, 2006
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What did you think
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That is one thing about us writers why it comes to us to write what we write about...makes us feel crazy, but it is unique, different subject that makes you think, Rather head south for the warmth but not for hell. Well done. Blessings.
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Thank You Kindly
Some of my poems are sent to me I believe - well sometimes I do feel a little "crazy" and wonder - why did I write that ? I writes it as I sees it and let the chips fall where they may - just don't head too far south - lol - it's mighty cold at the south pole - lol - thanks for the applause and comment/compliment - Bless God - Joe - dobar dan ------------------------------------------------------ be of good cheer
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Great
I knew since the near beginning that it was about the North and South pole. I want to argue a bit about the opposite of hell but I don't want to get into that. Great poem keep it up. -
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Maybe Hell Is "Colder Than Hell" - Lol
thanks for the comment and compliment - this is a "Where did that come from poem" - thanks for the comments and compliment - Bless God - Joe -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- cheers
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This is awsome. I loved the lines
They sojourn an entire year
From whence the Poles did start
Ending up somehow - someway
At the spot they did depart
and the rhyme sceam was good. All and all this is a very nice poem. ANd the ending was really good. -
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Thank You Kindly Young Lady
I'm glad you liked it - it is one of my personal favorites - the poles of the moon are a little less than 8000 miles apart - something like 7987 miles or about there - Bless God - Joe - dobar dan --------------------------------------------------------- cheers
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Awsome! This makes perfect sense
I had to smirk as I reached the ending - nice job at lightening it up a bit!
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Where Did This Come From ??
Must have been sent from above - thank you for the compliment/comment and no applause - lol - do you need some points ? I like poems that teach - my poem "Sneaky Snake" is a true story of God's wonderful creation - Bless God - Joe
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Wow! I love astronomical writes Dobar Dan!
I even like the humor in your author's notes section too:
"I guess it's a spinoff" (*the poles spinning)
lol
I got what you were writing about by the 3rd line.
I never knew the distance though.
btw: I looked up the other day the total circumference of the earth. It said 24, 900 miles around.
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Thanks Red - Glad You Liked It
For the compliment/comments/applause/rewards - I edided the poem now - back to 8000 miles apart - wow thats a long way around our jewel - imagine - it being the only planet like it in all of creation and the only one with life on it - boggles the mind ehhh ? I write a lot of true story poems - Bless God - Joe -------------------------------------------------------- cheers
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This is wonderful! So clever. The rhyme is fantastic and it reads really well. I love the last stanza too. THis just put a smile on my face. Thank you for that.
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Thank You For The Compliment
I honestly believe that this poem was given to me from above - although it did take me a while to complete it - I'm glad it put a smile on your face - it is also educational - Thanks for the applause/rewards - Joe -------------------------- hugs ---------------------------- cheers
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I love it!
Scrolling down the list of poetry, the title caught my eye, because seeing as this poem was in the nature section, I wondered how "Two Poles" could have something to do with nature, so I was hooked from the title. Your rhyme is nice, and it reminds me of something Shel Silverstein would write--and I love his work. The way you ended with the bit of humor was great--especially with specific number of miles. I had to smile. I really enjoyed reading this. It's a nice and unique piece.
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Ha Ha
Bet you thought it was about 2 Polish guys ehhh - I am glad you liked it - I must admit this poem is unique - I think it was sent to me from above - Thank you for the applause/rewards and the compliment - I smile when I read it too - lol - Bless God - Joe ----------------- hagd
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This is really cute.The rhyming was excellant ant the flow was perfect.You could actually sing this as a little song.I love the way you are not sure what exactly you are talking about until you remember the title and read the end.This is kind of carefree and something just fun to write about.You are such a talanted writer I love reading your poems.Great job.
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Why Thank You
I had fun writing this - I got mixed up a few times - but I am happy with the poem. Come to think of it it could be sung - lol - Some folks think it's about 2 Polish guys - lol - thank you for the compliments and comments - have you read many of my poems? They all have a lesson of sorts - feel free to share them with friends - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) ----------------------------------------------------- smiles
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hmm great job I enjoyed this piece from beginning to the end. Great job and keep on penning.
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Thanks for the compliment
I enjoyed penning this poem - you take care too young lady - and I will keep on penning - Bless God - Joe - (dobar Dan) --------------------------------------------- smiles
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I thought that this was a great and wonderful idea for a poem.
Also, I enjoyed very much the beginning.
But this portion here:
"They sojourn an entire year
From whence the Poles did start
Ending up somehow - someway
At the spot they did depart
Their names I did not mention
I should have from the start
One is North the other South
7,899 miles apart"
really began to lose that sweet poetry that was in the beginning. I did truly enjoy this and would love to see it improved a bit, so that the loveliness will be extended.
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Let Me Know
Thanks for the critique and comments and compliment as well - be my guest to improve it - I did have 8000 miles apart at one time and it did flow better and thanks for the applause and rewards - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) ----------------------------------- hagd
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Cool poem its very neat and I liked it! It sounds like it was fun to write and its really cool!
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It was fun to write
At one point I had the Earth and Moon confused - had the earths orbit taking 28 days - lol - I think this is one of my best poems - I believe it was God given - thanks again for the compliment - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) --------------------------------------------- hagd
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This is a fun write. I like how the poles travel full circle (one solar year).
nice easy to read rhyme
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Hello James
Glad you enjoyed reading this one as much as I enjoyed writing it - Bless God - Joe (Dobar Dan) ------------------------------------------------------hagd
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a thought that has never even crossed my mind before- the distance from one pole to the othe. well done. a cute write
spreading some love
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I Had Fun Writing This One
At one time I confused the earth with the moon - lol - took my grandson to straighten me out - lol - did you think when you started reading it that it was about to Polish guys ? You may like some of my Quotes as well - Bless God - Joe - ( Dobar Dan ) ---------------------------------hagd
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I love it. A cute little tale about the poles in a poem! That's great, creative. And the way you were able to tell it in words that was so storylike but in a poem - I applaud you for that. Wonderful job.
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Thanks A Lot
Wow - I'm glad you liked this poem - I had fun writing it - thanks for the gracious comments and compliment - will get to your site and check out some of your works - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) ---------------------------------------------- hagd -
Thank You Much
I am glad you liked this one - it is one of my personal favorites - you have my permission to use this pioem any way you like - I had fun writing it - it would be a good poem for teaching kids - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) --------------------------------------------------------- hagd
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This is so cute! Where do you come up with this stuff...what a good imagination you have. I loved it!!
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Glad You Liked It
Thanks for the compliment and applause - and rewards - where do I come up with thos stuff you ask? - well this one was sent from above I believe - glad you liked it - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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this is great fun. I really enjoyed the read, and it made me smile as I realised what you were talking about. So refreshing to find something on here that is less serious.
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Hey - This Is Serious- LoL
I guess you thought it was about 2 Polish guys ehhh ?? glad it made you smile - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)-----------------
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I gladlly welcome the awesomeness of this poem. The way in which you discribe t3h two poles is great. J00 @|Z3 [\/]0$7 l33t. This poem rocks my socks. thanx for typing this up for all the world to see.
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Why Thank You
I had fun wrting this poem - I'm glad you liked it and it wopuld be a great educational tool I think - not to often a poem like this comes to me - must have been sent from above - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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A great piece to teach children. The flow easy and the message the truth. Frans
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Thanks Frans
You can use this poem any way you see fit - it would be great for a teaching tool - thanks for the comments and compliment - you have as great day - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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i love the great emotion behind the write, heres my favorite part:
"They sojourn an entire year
From whence the Poles did start
Ending up somehow - someway
At the spot they did depart"
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Glad You Liked this One Too
I wrote this one day - it came together quite easy except I had the earth and the moon mixed up - lol - this is a spinoff of my poem "From Were I Stand" thanks for the compliment and comment - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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simple yet wonderful to read, indeed ^_^
it is fascinating to see poets writing pretty pieces
about places and all n.n
i might as well try writing one poem someday
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Glad You Liked It
Thank you for the compliments and comments - go for it - write like mad - pick a subject - like "Road Rage" - lol - have fun with it - I miss the applause - lol - Bless God - Joe ---------- (Dobar Dan)
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Hi Joe,
I came back with the applause,
so sorry, sometimes I click too fast.
The picture is my one and only grand child,
her name is Nyla and she is my joy
in life. I love her more each day.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Thank You Joyce
Lol - Thank you for the applause - I guess Nyla is your life - now don't spoil her - lol - we have 18 grandchildren and 2 great grandchildren - thanks again - God Bless - Joe - Hugs
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I think this was the cutest piece ever.
I think this was really a great piece of poetry,
the flow was perfect.
Glad I stopped by to check it out.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Hi Joyce
Thank you for the compliment and comment - waaaaaaaa no applause - lol - this is one of my personal favorites - there are other poems that are on my site that are educational as well "Sneaky Snake" is a good one for kids too- is that your baby in the pic? - Cute - Bless God - Joe
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i like it..but..
i like but it ends.. weak..
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Ends Weak ????
How else can it end? thank you for the comment and 1 applause - it was worth at least 3 - lol - it is an educational poem that gives the diameter of the earth about - When I first wrote it I had the last line "8000 miles apart" which flows better - "In the beginning God created the Heavens and the Earth" - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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Liked the rhythm, rhyme and flow in these lines. An informative piece, entertaining as well as educational. Easy to read and understand. Such a neat thing to write about. Have got to feel comfortable writing poetry without capital letters and punctuation, so think this is just fine.
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Thank You
Well thank you for the compliment and the one "clappy" and the rewards as well - don't know what you mean about feeling comfortable writing poetry without capital letters and punctuation. oh well - thanks again - Bless God - Joe
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Bravo! bravo! Bravo!!!!! This is fantastic.... The words flow together so marvelously smooth when reading even out loud!!!!!! I never thought when I first started reading that it would end as it did!!!! What a imaginative surprise!!!!! I disagree with the other commenter about adding puncts. to this perfect piece!!!!
My very favorite format for poetry is void puncts., void or few caps. and no forced rhyming..... I think this is fine as is.....
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I Agree 100%
You know poetry my friend - that comment from the other poet about punctuation is a teenager - my poetess friend (daisycup)who is on here too and I know her personally says this poem is ingenious - I say it came from above - thank you for the compliment and applause- Bless God - Joe
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Perhaps you should have added some punctuation to this piece of poetry, It seemed a bit like one long sentence. It would make a huge amount of difference to your work and your results. Overall though, a beautiful and moving piece of work. The flow is fantastic, and it looks like you've put a lot of thought into it, this is an extraordinary piece of fine poetry
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Thank You For The Comment
In poetry grammar - punctuation - spelling don't really matter to me - I did quite a bit of work on this poem - it was fun - even had the the earth doing a moons orbit - lol - and the last line I had 8000 miles apart which flowed better - but decided to give the exact diameter for educational purposes - and the start of each line is capitalized in lieu of punctuation - Bless God - Merry Christmas - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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INNOVATIVE
Most poets on this site write on serious themes, but here is an exception, a model light verse that amuses you. It is very pleasant and funny. It found another Pole who was asking about the correct distance from one Pole to another. Does it really matter? What matters most here is a good laugh which the poet has admirably produced in this easily flowing rhyming verse. Enjoyed it very much. -
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Why thank you
Thank you for the good report - most poets on this site are not poets at all - they just want to tell their story - it would be okay if if they were poetic about it - the correct distance between the poles matters not in poetry - could have read "about eight thousand miles apart" would have flowed better for sure - I'm glad you liked it and you got a laugh out of it - dobar dan (good day in Croation) - Bless God - Joe
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Cute. Are they really 7,899 miles apart? That's what....12,000 kms or so?
Their names I did not mention
I should have from the start
One is North the other South
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Why thank you
Yes they are that far apart - when I first wrote the I had put in 8000 miles apart - the I look it up - could be 12,000 klicks - i should know, I'm from Canada - glad you liked it - most everyone does - Bless God - Joe
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Very creative and unique piece
I much enjoyed this one!
Thank you so much for sharing and for being in this contest!
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Glad You Enjoyed Reading It
Thank you for the compliment - this poem was fun crafting - had to do some research for it - I thought I would try entering your contest - I came in second the last contest I entered - Merry Christmas - Bless God - Joe
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i love it sometimes the best poems come from something completely random and seemingly unimportant but it will probably mean something to you later in life so in other words remeber what is said in this poem it may be important one day and rememeber NEVER STOP WRITING FOR SOMEONE ELSE ONLY YOURSELF
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Why thank you
For the gracious comment - this is one of my favorite writes - it's a keeper for sure - all my poems are written for others - to get people thinking - thanks again - Bless God - Joe
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Awe yes a very interesting write somethings we just take for granted....
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Hello blonde one
Thank you for the comment and compliment - I had fun writing this one had to check out the earths diameter - at on point I had the earth orbiting the sun in 28 days - my grandson caught it - I'm glad you liked it - Bless God - Joe
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very cute
very educational. should be obligatory reading in schools
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Well Thank You
Thank you for the comment and applause - how this poem ever came about is puzzling to me - must have been sent from on high - my wife says it should in a children's book - "In the beginning God created the Heavens and the Earth" Bless God - Joe
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This is quant and intriguing. Overall it is a good read and I thank you for hsaring it with us all =)
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Thank You For The Comment
I'm glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I had writing it - I had the earth and the moon mixed up at one point - lol - my grandson caught it - be of good cheer - Jesus' birthday draws near - Bless God - Joe
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Wow
They sojourn an entire year
From whence the Poles did start
Ending up somehow - someway
At the spot they did depart
So I loved it! It's simple but beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
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You Are Welcome Dommi
Thank you for the compliment -and am glad you liked it - this is one poem that gets me thinking where it came from - it seems to me it was God sent - most of my poems tell a story - and get the reader thinking - - Bless God - Joe
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Pretty interesting piece!
I love that you included the distance
between the two poles. I had no idea
just how far away from each other they
really were. Great job wit this and
thanks a lot for sharing it here!
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Thanks Jeremy
I'm glad you liked it - I had fun writing this one - had it all wrong at one stage - had to do some research - I even had the moon and earth mixed up - lol - had to revise it several times - when I read it I chuckle - haha - Bless God - Joe
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Great write, lots of fun to read at first I thought it would culminate at the gates of some hellish concentration camp for my mind can certainly read ahead but I do certainly enjoy the read.
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Ha Ha Ha
I had fun writing this one - thanks for the lovely comment and applause and rewards - I really liked your report about what you thought as you read it - ha ha - I really think this poem was sent to from God. I think it is a spin off of my poem "From Where I Stand" - my poem
"Surprise Surprise" has a trick ending too- we are kind of look a likes - I have less hair on top is all - Bless God - Joe
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Very Creative
I liked this poem. Very creative writing you have here!!! And it was fun to read out loud because of the it rolled around off the readers tongue. Good flow!!!
Anna
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Thanks Again
I had fun writing this one - sometimes I think God sends me the poems - thanks for the compliment and applause - reading it aloud to your kids would be educational as well - as far as my poems go - this one is some where near the top - Bless God - Joe xxx
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This was sweet!!
Thanks for sharing!!!
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You are Welcome
Thank you for the applause and good report on this poem - how this came about - must have come from above - I had fun writing it for sure - haha - this is a good poem for a children's book too - at least thats what my wife says - this poem is a spin off of my poem "From Where I Stand" I guess - Bless God - Joe
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A really unique poem. I like it's style and simplicity. I love poems which are written beautifully on simple, known day-today things and potray them in a new light. I really liked it beacuse it rhymes naturally. I have read many rhyming poems which look as if the poet has really tried hard to rhyme it!
Poems should rhyme naturally as yours does.
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Why thank you
Thank you for the comments on this poem - I try not to force the rhyme - and write about real life things - if a poem doesn't rhyme then it's not poetry as far as I can tell - thanks again for the gracious compliments - Blushing - will head for you site now and check out your work - Bless God - Joe
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thank you for sharing this well written poem with me today on allpoetry.com. i enjoyed reading it very much. viyanna rosemarie
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Why thank you
I'm glad you liked it Marie - it is one of my best I think - thank you for the compliment - I went to your site and read and commented on your write - going by your picture was not sure if it was a personal experience -ou look so relaxed - Bless God - Joe
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This was a very good read. You painted a very vivid picture. Great imagery. It also flowed nicely. All and all a very good read. Well done.
Keep up the good writing.
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This is a great write and the rhyme and flow was great! I like real life poems, and the added humor...it makes the reading fun! Thanks for sharing!
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Why thank you
Thank you Angel - I'm glad you liked this poem - I think it was a spin off of my poem - "From Where I Stand" Thank you for the favorable comments and applause and rewards -- my wife says this would be a great poem for kids - a little humor along with being educational as well - and a bit of a riddle too - I thank God for giving me this poem - Bless God - Joe
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This is perfect, I love to find the simple things and just write about them. Ones own perspective on life and what tickles our fancy. Good write and thanks for sharing your work.
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Thank You Jen
Thanks for the compliment - I am glad you liked it - this poem has garnered many favorable comments - It' the kind of thing I like to write about - I have several poems on here along the same lines - like "Truth Of The Matter" - just gives a different perspective - but true. Bless God - Joe
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Outsanding great description, words, flow it's great all around though i hate the cold i think it's hell. Great write about the poles
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Thank you kindly
How this write ever entered my head I will not know - must have been sent from above - I wrote a poem "From Where I Stand" about the same time - ya soon we will be getting cold days - ice and snow the cold winds blow the opposite of hell - lol - thank you for commenting and glad you enjoyed it - it is one of my personal favorites - Bless God - Joe
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I really like the way you written this piece. It goes straight from the page, right to your heart. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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Thank You Lacey
Thanks for the great review on this poem - not sure if I replied before or not. I am glad you enjoyed this poem - would be a good one for a kids book. I write in spurts - lol - may go months without penning a poem. I need a subject. Bless God - Joe
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Outstanding. Your choose of words are awesome. The way you wrote this is great. the flow was and is beautiful. Thanks for the read and keep on writing
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Why thank you
going by the picture atop your name - you are writing somewhere from the south Pole - thank you for the compliment - I'm a rhymer - most of my poems rhyme - and have a story or subject matter behind them - I will get to your site asap - Bless God - Joe
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got me!
though I did wonder at the beginning if it was a play on words. Then I got sucked in. I admire your choice of subjects, things it would never occur to me to write about.
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Thanks for the applause and comment Judy - I did have fun writing this poem - made a rash of mistakes then had to check out the Earths diameter - I like to write things that get people thinking - gotchya ehhh - how this ever entered my head I don't know - lol - maybe it was a "God Send" - Bless God - Joe
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I like it..
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Thanks for the lovely compliment - I write a lot of poems along these lines - you may run into them on my site - I think most people that read this poem think it's about two Poles - lol - I am glad you liked it - it's educational too - Bless God - Joe
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very good
second time around
send me the link for,
having trouble getting there,
Perpetual Reflections"
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< I'll Try
"Perpetual Reflections" is now - "Truth Of The Matter" - thanks for the applause - Bless God - Joe
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