Aromas of delicacies float through my senses
Euphony's are sung to weave an eccentric tune
Not barred by darkness, not barred by fences
Casting our mind in a truly delightful swoon
Mountains reach beyond the horizons and feel
Mottled clouds dancing in it's cool haunts
Ever present eye's looking on in jealous zeal
Eternal beauty of it's great shadow it flaunts.
Weeping leaves sway to the song of the breeze
Like the rosy petals weep often after the rain
Swift arrow blows, stings and ceases to please
The real birth of cerebration shall reign again
A fleeting mirage in the deserts of out soul
A small oasis breathes in greenery of our mind
What is our food without mere salt to extol?
Awake your senses for even the able is blind...
Author notes
Read it carefully and you'll find at least one mention of each of the five senses
Option:3
Written October 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- Options and Options and Guess What More Options! by neoladyem.
550 points, ended March 1, 2008, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow! I love the imagition done in this poem. Also the great vocab being done here. My favorite lines were: Ever present eye's looking on in jealous zeal
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well done
nice write and well done . . good word choices here . . liked "Aromas of delicacies float through my senses" and "Awake your senses for even the able is blind . . good first and last lines . .
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Thx for the comment
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Hoodwink!
What amazing imagery! I felt everything you said and could see it in my mind, floating about like paradise. Thanks for the trip!
~M~
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Hood-Wink
Wow what an amazing poem. Wonderful imagery throughout. You pulled me in from the start left me wanting more. Excellent write.
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Hoodwink!!!
Awesome imagery! Great poem about the 5 senses, and I love how you weaved nature into the poem. Wonderful job on this!
Love & Light
Debbera
You have been hoodwinked by "The Poetic bandits!
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I forgot the clappy mister dudes
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Hoodwink!
It seems that you have the greatest ease with writing in rhyme. A perfect ABAB scheme and again that steady flow within.
Reading your poetry makes me feel there's a lot more English vocabulary to learn than I originally expected
lol.
Great use of words! and thank you for sharing this with us
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excellent...great imagery...love the line-what is food withuot mere salt to extol?...good flow...thanks for sharing
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Thanks for the wonderful comment
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ohh ..well done. well well done. it was easy to see it in the minds eye, and its great that you've put the 5 sences in here. Claire
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a truly wonderful and highly inspiring poem stimulating the five physical senses. your imagery is exquisit as is your elegant vocabulary chosen for this piece. thank you for sharing this poem with us and offering it as a very precious example in your contest-rules, it greatly helps my inspiration ...
good luck in this contest, little brother,
maa -
Thanks for the great comment Unfortunately I do not get too many reads due to the pace at which I write (And I don't bother promoting
)Thanks again
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Beautiful imagery incorporating all five senses. I think this is an excellent poem as well as a fine example of your contest requirements. All my best,
Belle
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Thank you for the beautiful comment
As always it's appreciated
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Amazing!
WOW! Truly marvellous! I liked the way you have woven the senses into this poem...Wonderful poem...Great imagery...The flow was very good...Nice take on the senses, LOL!
These lines were amazing:
'Weeping leaves sway to the song of the breeze
Like the rosy petals weep often after the rain
Swift arrow blows, stings and ceases to please
The real birth of cerebration shall again reign'
Good luck in the contest...
Madhumita
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Yes, full of metaphors. I really liked this one. The wording especially. I have a thing for the word Aroma and I loved the use of euphony, etc. Well done and good luck in the challenge.
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I am affected by the end of the poems as well as many others, so I feel the endings should be strong making the reader feel a particular sense or emotion Thanks for the comment and applaud
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Brilliant!!!
Oh' very well done(see, I appreciate ur 'good' qualities)...!!! The last stanza was fab(why do i always seem to adore ur concluding lines?!?!?!)...'What is our food without mere salt to extol?'...lol... the way u wove the senses into ur poem is ruly appreciable... beautiful imagery... really it touches the soul... best of luck in the contest...(u r sure to win, anywayz!!!)...lol... keep up the good work, love and cheers, shuvi
Edited on Oct 17, 7:12 because 'sirius black is alive...lol'.
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