One layer over another
Unleashes the wound ahead
Within a world inside a world
the bodies lay there in their coffin beds
A meaningless wreck of torture
Suffered in sight of reality
No meaning, no purpose, no nothing
You are only here for a limited time of mortality
A pain drains slowly from inside
Unmoved, unquestioned and unbeknown
In 3D blasphemy
You will fall into me
Get lost in me
Stained in my universe
Within.
Author notes
allpoetry.com/Contest/2282566
Contest: originality with blood- can you break a cliche in less than 20 lines?
Contest Hold by shadowedlight
Blood is a common image in poems-
too common
Can you do something original in less than 20 lines?
Rules:
1) in twenty lines or less, a poem somehow relating to blood
2) do NOT use the words blood, knife, drip, red, bond, life, and death
3) no cutting poems
Contest will end on the 19th Oct. (Judging Date)
Author Comment:
This poem is like a funeral poem, and how it ended when people die...I hope it doesn't effect anyone, or mistakenly took it as a cutting poem...Lol. It would be funny though...
Written October 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- originality with blood- can you break a cliche in less than 20 lines? by shadowedlight.
300 points, ended October 22, 2006, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dear Clare,
Hello shadowlight. Thank you for your time in reading and commeting this poem.
Good Luck on judging! -
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by on this piece, Sandgoddess.
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Thanks for stopping by and commenting on this piece.
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i thought the most powerful part of the poem was the last three lines-
they really stuck out.
thanks for entering,
Clare -
Nice piece...
good luck!
rachel -
Wow!!! Your very first stanza really sets up this poem very well. Nice work
Best wishes to you in the contest
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