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Lovely view

Missing image

Be still my heart
its measured part
‘Pon raising pewter’s heady brew,
unquenched as yet
doth tongue abject
Ah; but lovely is the view…

Such delicate pose
Alas; such prose
has been written in the stars!
Of creamy fluff
oh dreamy stuff
with tinkling laughter bars…

A dimple there
with blush so rare
I’ve lost all time’s pretenses,
a goggle in
a wishing bin--
Drink up me lad regain thy senses!


Author notes

Pictures say a thousand words, this is what this one said to me, hehehe I hope you enjoy
Written October 15th, 2006

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  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 19, 2006
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    I'm errant gal if truth be told
    of picking up me mail
    I thank ye pal who's heart is gold
    I send these hugs airmail!

    geeze that was horrible, I've been writing a sage today and I'm burned out...going to get some dinner and take a break!

    Thank you hun!

    Smoosh

    Sandi

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 17, 2006
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    Good morning CB
    They always say - 'write what first pops in the mind' so that's what happened, I'm glad it made you smile. Thank you so much for your kind thoughts!

    Best wishes with your contest, it was a pleasure to write for you. And from what I've been reading thus far, it's an awesome one indeed!
    Blessings Sandi


  • CBminstrel
    October 16, 2006
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    lol this did exactly what it said on the tin. A playful and fun 'ditty' with good rhythm and flow. Made me smile...nice idea :-) Thanks for entering :-)


  • Prince Charming
    October 16, 2006
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    One face and a million thoughts I want coffee a mug full
    Once again you did this in your fantastic style with this form
    Kiss Hermi


  • Iohagh
    October 15, 2006
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    Darling

    I love your tone
    and truth be said
    your prose as intoneed
    is wonderful when read.

    Smoosh

    Janet

  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank you Legend! the muse was feelin frisky today
    I'll be looking for your take on this on, I know it'll be wonderful my friend


  • Legend silver member
    October 15, 2006
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    Mmm This is interesting Sandi I am working with this image Though on a different track to yours.I love the Olde Worlde feel to this piece So suited to the image.and as always a joy to partake of you words Good luck in the contest


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    hehehe Sam every now and then I give the muse free reign, today there was no stopping her! Thank you!


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank you sweetie!


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 15, 2006
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    Thank you Meli!


  • wtchr
    October 15, 2006
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    Very nice! Your poem reads so well I almost missed the qualilty of the piece. Your attention to every facet of a poem is again well represented here. Though brief and just a little mischievious, (bless you for that), you still maintain the wonderful fluid, lyrical, presense of all your poems. Very well done


  • senza
    October 15, 2006
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    Lol, excellent! I liked the kind of tune behind it... The picture does say a lot now I read the poem. I couldn't have pulled such intellectual ideas out of it. great piece!
    s

    Lady anairO
    Artiste.


  • Annalise
    October 15, 2006
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    LOL Sandi, this is cute. Something nice to read upon first waking.

    Good luck in the contest.


    Meli

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