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Murdered Perfection

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His cigarette ashes fall to the ground

reminding me of a raindrop

Here, baby

let's seep into the earth

I'll bury you in your coffin

and you'll die of suffocation

His imperfect words of love

make me remember those lies that make me want to burn;

burn down something a.m.a.z.i.n.g.

and baby,

I think that something is you

I spilled gasoline over his sleeping body

and thought of the angel in my dreams

Come on, sweetheart

I'll light this bed on fire

and hear your fucking screams

I'm holding this blade to his throat

and I feel high from the adrenaline

Don't fear it, honey

Stop trembling

You're dying anyway

(and here lies the body of this perfect boy, dead at my feet)

whoops.

{I killed him}

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Written October 14th, 2006

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  • whiterabbit.
    August 5, 2007

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    This is awesome, I love it. It's beautifully sadistic. The imagery is great. wow, I'm so glad I stopped by your page :] You're very talented.
    xx


  • najji
    July 3, 2007
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    'His cigarette ashes fall to the ground
    reminding me of a raindrop
    Here, baby
    let's seep into the earth
    I'll bury you in your coffin
    and you'll die of suffocation'


    Oh wow, I loved that part.
    You're a really awesome writer.

    [♥]I loved this.


    Monica


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    June 15, 2007
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    incredible, love the background too, it's perfect for this piece.

    whisper

  • indigo child
    April 11, 2007
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    woooh i like the morbidity..


  • Bittie
    February 26, 2007
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    "Come on, sweetheart
    I'll light this bed on fire
    and hear your fucking screams
    I'm holding this blade to his throat
    and I feel high from the adrenaline"

    Its amazing.. that's really all there is to say.

    Beautiful imagery.

    I'm so happy I read this,

    thank you.



    Bittie


  • DJshy
    February 13, 2007
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    WOW

    this is good


  • -foreverandever
    December 27, 2006
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    <3

  • -foreverandever
    December 26, 2006

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    wow
    so extraordinarily sadistic
    this is weirdly beautiful
    weirdly enticing.
    like your imagery puts together the picture but adds a little something more to it, to make it almost uncannily gorgeous.
    hmm.
    so full of warped emotion.
    i loooove it
    and i've run out of applause, ugh. you deserve a lot of it. i'll skip back here tomorrow and give you some happyclappy guys.

    incredible write
    x


  • Crash Into Me
    November 29, 2006

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    wonderful

    im supposed to be your allpoetry sister and i havent been doing a good job at it at all...


    well now.. lookie here your writing is Fucking ah-mazing!!


  • miss midnight
    November 10, 2006
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    wow. great write.

    "Here, baby
    let's seep into the earth
    I'll bury you in your coffin
    and you'll die of suffocation"

    i like those lines.



  • najji
    October 19, 2006
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    I love this poem! I just love it! And your now on meh favorites!! It rocked! I

    P.S. You kind of inspired me.


  • bird-mad girl
    October 16, 2006
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    it's about time you posted something missy!

    anywhoz

    I loved this piece. The sheer romance and darkness. It was a violently beautiful piece. I could taste the bittersweet blood on my tongue and I wanted more. It made me crave the destruction of all the beautiful pretty boy angels in the world. And it's not because they've done something to me it's because it's what I need and want.

    Outstanding piece

    always && forever,
    ~Kendal

    PS. I L♥VE the background.


  • -MrsWonka-
    October 15, 2006
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    this is amazing. i really liked the style of this write. (the background is nice too.)
    the ending has humour, making the reader wonder whether they should laugh at the thought of murder. i like it.
    very good write!!

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