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Named, Unashamed

I miss
One man, my father;
Forever darkness
Seen in his eyes.
Sorrow lies
Here.

I still can see
The shining,
Half-open window,
And still,
Here is where you are.

I am free:

Reclaiming power,
Broken;
Beyond the tears,
Awake from sleep.

May it be
The silent force,
Unknown to all -

Innocence's plea;

Horizon is broader:
Truth buried...

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  • Kain
    January 16, 2007

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    Very nice, although a little jagged toward the end. I can see what you were trying to portray.

    Yours,
    Kain


  • guttermouthxgirl
    November 19, 2006
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    great

    beautiful and sad at the same time. i like it. good job


  • UnderTheWeepingMoon
    November 1, 2006
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    this is verry pretty. You expressed yourself well here. Thanks for sharing.
    ~Rhiannon


  • panegyric ink
    October 31, 2006
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    thehairsmellssweetinherpoem.

    I reaaly adore the thoughts you've expresses here. Very well said. Carry on....!


  • DreamGirl8390
    October 25, 2006
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    this is so sad, it is a great poem though. you are very talented.


  • Twilight Moon
    October 18, 2006
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    very unique...i miss my dad too..he lives in the usa while i'm stucj in egypt


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    October 17, 2006
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    A dedication to a father separated from his daughter. I'm at university in England, and my home is Northern Ireland. I tried to make it read like I miss one man (my daddy), but still have another near (my boyfriend). I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.


  • wishintreeUK
    October 17, 2006
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    This reads like a dedication to a father who was much loved! a sadness threaded throughout that is impossible to miss. The titles you have here all seem to be related to sadness, my prayer is that you find peace of heart, mind and soul. Well done and best wishes for the contest.

    ~Katie~

  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    October 17, 2006
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    Thanx so much for yer lovely comment! Surprisingly, it didn't take that long to find the right titles. I was lucky to find the right ones to emulate the mood I was in at the time. I really loved your contest idea!


  • poetryality silver member
    October 17, 2006
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    This is sad yet quite beautiful. I feel mourning, and loss. I feel that there was so much unsaid. You have many titles within your collection. I think you did a splendid job choosing the ones to depict the sense of this poem. This is exquisitely written Poet.

    I thank you for the time spent to enter my challenge. This must have take some time. I wish you the very best.


    Much Love & Many Blessings ♥

    Renee


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    October 14, 2006
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    Hey Laura, this is pretty unique and looks like it would be fun to do. I had to check the contest to see what was up so, the poem must have been good, even without knowing.

    Paul

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