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Dark Matter


The scientists are searching for dark matter
but they don't know what they're looking for,
they've measured all the matter in the universe
and found it's not enough, there should be more.

 

The matter can account for only 6%
not enough, to let the universe exist,
is it something we have yet to understand
or is it simply something that we've missed.

 

It has a mass, but not made up of atoms
invisible, but with a force so strong,
could be what keeps the universe surviving
or may be our law of physics is all wrong.

 

A scientists life is studying the cosmos
to find most of it gone must be quite odd,
maybe they should give up studying science
and leave the running of the universe to God.

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Written October 14th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • trekker02
    October 1

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    Your poem was well written and clearly explains your beliefs on the matter (or at least I think these are your beliefs), but I'm inclined to disagree. I think when we look at the question of dark matter and think about the way things react and even contemplate the fact that the laws of physics may not always apply, most of us should not step away from it, but we should embrace it more. Finding out we were wrong, or being horribly confused by some phenomenally cryptic event should be the source of our passion. The more we learn, the more we realize how ignorant we are...yet we continue to learn, pushed on by some basic spirit of human creativity.

    Just because I disagree, however, has no impact on the quality of your writing. You did an excellent job and I thank you for sharing.


  • Leance
    July 11

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    I would like to thank you for taking the time to view and enter my contest.
    Contests here on Allpoetry are a lot of fun and I hope that everyone enjoys them.
    I will soon be posting a contest for BRONZE only poems. I do hope you will consider entering.

    If you are dreaming, you should be writing
    For dreams are words we should share
    Sharing makes us all stronger
    So thank you for sharing your dreams and words with me

    Judging:

    Well, this is certainly different. It looks more like a statement of scientists leaving of lives and the world to God. I do believe that we humans do tend to interfere a little too much in this world and somethings are better left untouched. Nicely penned.

    Title: Nice appropriate title that suits the poem.

    Content: The content is good for what you wrote about. Maybe adding a little background would be helpful.

    Imagery: There wasn't too much imagery as it appeared more as a statement.

    Grammar: Did not detect any mispelled words however, they are very long sentences.

    Flow: Flow was good.

    Thanks again for entering.
    Leance
    A goal is a dream with a deadline.
    -Napolean Hill-


  • Sandygram
    June 4
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    Congratulation On The Silver

    A wonderful poem you have penned. Love the rhyme. Take care, Sandy


  • MoonStarRaven silver member
    June 2

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    This is so very true. A well written poem with a great statement good luck in the contest you entered.


  • PurpleSky
    June 2

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    The ending was fantastic and I think this piece speaks volumes and is right on the money! Thanks for sharing. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest and best wishes to you!
    huggles
    Lena

  • Atrus
    March 3, 2008

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    :-D I love reading/thinking about dark matter because it spotlights both how little we know and how fascinating the universe is. Thank you so much for this entry in the contest-- it's exactly the type of thing I was looking for.


  • islekine gold member
    March 3, 2008
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    This is great....although I don't totally agree!

    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • Tarja
    January 14, 2008

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    What I enjoyed about this is how realistic and scientific it is... but at the same time it resembles all that makes a poem. Very interesting indeed. Thank you for sharing this and good luck.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 28, 2007
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    Interesting


  • IndividualEleven
    May 13, 2007
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    very true, great write! - Jacen


  • tender-butterfly
    December 29, 2006
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    Interesting

    This write is really scientific I must say.

    It also suits the title of my contest well enough.
    The message behind is really important to understand.

    I must thank you for taking part in my first contest. All the best...

    tender

  • serious clown gold member
    October 19, 2006
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    Thank you so much for your review,your very kind and I really do appreciate it, best wishes---Norman


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 19, 2006
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    Wow, I am impressed. Very deep thoughts you have penned here. And I like the comment up above me that you made about knowing the answers but not the questions! Awesome. Jeannie

  • serious clown gold member
    October 19, 2006
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    Thanks for your comments,I appreciate it,maybe we already know the answers but don't know the questions,---Norman

  • White Dove
    October 19, 2006
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    Bravo

    Bravo damn awesome man. Yes they should just leave it to God, we will neevr find the answers anyway. I mean even if we did how do they know???? Thanks for sharing your talent.

  • serious clown gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    Thank you so much,I really appreciate your comments and thank you for the read, best wishes---Norman


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    !

    very well written. A joy to read. keep it up.

  • serious clown gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    Thank you for the commentsand applause,I do appreciate it,it's fascinating searching for something that you can't see, good luck---Norman


  • Phineas Red
    October 15, 2006
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    interesting, i liked the ending, it runs fairly close ot my beliefs, and dark matter is somewhat of an interest of mine too

  • serious clown gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    Thank you for your comments and applause,they are much appreciated, best wishes---Norman


  • purple wings
    October 14, 2006
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    bravo!i watched a documentory about that and i couldnt help but think that what the monkeys are trying to study and do is somehow wrong.brilliant write.

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