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Transparent sighs

Missing image




I can still see

the embers of last equinox,

as you dance from black to indigo.


     This morning,

     you communicate through solar winds -

     as if memories of march

     linger along cashmere isles.


How you remind me

of autumnal antonyms;

painting skies with a whiff of magenta

and the wedding

of saffron and orange...


     Our eyes embrace flocculated fields:


Your transparent sighs 

unfold the hues of dawn,


and I am caught in the turbulence

of fulgent sunrays.






Author notes

aah... visions of spring

This is actually a picture I took from the plane, on our way to Tenerife... that was such a beautiful moment to see the sunrise from that high

Written October 14th, 2006

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  • sora.
    September 16, 2008

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    this is an absolute masterpiece.
    unfortunately it has already won gold in another contest...and i am trying to incorporate poems that have not placed in anything before. >_<

    thankyou anyway, for your beautiful entry.
    =]


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    May 10, 2008

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    Wow this is magnificent. Sheer poetic beauty. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Celticmoon
    October 28, 2007

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    Lee,

    I cannot stress this enough for you to believe me but you are one hell of a poet! You have truly stunned me with this piece. The verbaige within is astounding. The emotion, phenomenal and the metaphor leave me in a fit of jealousy. I truly envy your talent! Thank you for entering and good luck!


    Blessings
    Bel


  • Tarja
    October 16, 2007

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    I love how personal this is! Everything about this from even the picture to the poem... your words were so lovely and gave the poem so much vivid detail that I was there with you watching the sunrise... well done love. And good luck.


  • Death of the Author
    August 28, 2007

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    Oh my holy moly, what an amazing picture! Thanks for sharing it! Thanks for sharing your poem too! Good luck and take care x


  • ur worse nightmare
    December 12, 2006
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    wow wow wow

    this is beautiful the words the style the tone everything very well done i love your poem, the imagery was fabulous, i am typing so fast i cant slow down all i can really say is wow and keep up the great work hun
    raffles xx


  • naked roots
    December 11, 2006

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    Beautiful!

    This morning,
    you communicate through solar winds -
    as if memories of march
    linger along cashmere isles.

    Loved those lines, but this whole poem is a gem. Your imagery is excellent and I love how you used the colors and even combined it to a scent (whiff of magenta). Great work and thank you very much for entering my contest.

  • Nicole Hanna
    November 28, 2006

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    Ah, the equinox. That immediately brought me a lot of wonderful images. Great way to open the poem, and to follow it up with such a range of colors for the mind to play with. The italized section adds a touch of personality and character to the poem, and makes me think I'm the one thinking those thoughts. It's like the readers own personal "aside". The aliteration with "autumnal antonyms" had a wonderful effect for me and really rolled off the tongue, making the rest of the stanza follow suit. And kudos for using the word "fulgent" lol. I loved it


  • Vernal Bloom
    November 20, 2006

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    Afarin to you

    Another nature poem: Spring. To me, spring is the bride of seasons. Something which can quench the third of our spirits, giving us wings to soar and fly. That’s why I chose this username for myself. To be a good poet, you should have beauty in your eyes to see everything beautifully. And yes, this colorful piece is the witness you had this godly grace with yourself while writing this.
    Thanks for penning/painting another magnificent piece with us :-)

    ~Massy~


  • LeanneBridgewater
    November 19, 2006
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    Colourful

    Great high class language in colour! You've wrote a rainbow!


  • Summer Dawn
    November 2, 2006
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    beautiful descriptions. lovely picture.


  • blackday
    October 30, 2006
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    This is amazing, Lee! I'm so shooting jealous beams at you 'cause well, that's how I do things. Your vocab. is of course amazing and all that jazz.

    -Chasey.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    October 23, 2006
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    I'm in awe! I have seen your name around the site for a long time but for whatever reason have not fell onto one of your pages before....or at least not in awhile. This line, "Your transparent sighs, unfold the hues of dawn," brought so many images to my mind and caused a sigh of my own. This is beautiful work. I have been reading a little this morning, trying to get inspired. This one certainly helps.

    ~Lyrical


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    A poetic sigh this is indeed. How wonderful to be able to travel with you on the wings of a silver bird and to see the skies and the wind in all their colours from way up above. I like the personification of morning here and in my mind’s eye I see the traveler communicating with morning while the rest of the passengers are asleep, missing out on this splendour of a field of clouds and sky. Loved the “autumnal antonyms – very vivid and creative, my friend – and also a touch of alliteration there too. The last lines are very powerful and bring the reader right into the heart of a “flying-feeling” with the reference to “turbulence of fulgent sunrays”. A beautiful poem that is rich in language and colour and written with such an authentic voice. .

    ~ Nicolette


  • Anna Emkah
    October 18, 2006
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    In one word: B E A U T I F U L.
    Anna.


  • lavender shadows
    October 16, 2006
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    I try not to read poems that are in contests that I'm planning on entering until either I enter or the contest closes for judging... in this case, it was the latter option.

    But - after reading this, it's not like I would have had much of a chance anyhow...

    This is absolutely gorgeous, Lee. A breath of the rainbow. I could just read this over and over again... caught in the beauty of your words. Wonderful!


  • Blankscreen2222
    October 16, 2006
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    Wow, this is a lovely read.
    Enjoyed much.

    Blank.


  • leander Moderators member
    October 16, 2006
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    lol was that pun intended lol Actually... I did


  • Griswold silver member
    October 16, 2006
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    A beautiful picture and you paint it so well with your words, very well done I Loved it, keep up the wonderful writes...Scott

  • T Eliot
    October 16, 2006
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    Sophisticated elegance

    very nice but for me the wording was a bit higher for my own tastes, but that's mostly due to the fact that i like poetry that anyone can relate to, easily. However i do still love this piece because it definiteely paints a picture for anyone who reads it. Great job! keep up the good work!


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    October 16, 2006
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    Golly Did you swallow a DICKtionary lol I needed one! this was great seriously you spilt open the anatomy of a penultimate solar experience. As we hurtle through the void of space encircling the giver of life in the Good ship Mother Earth. You have captured and held suspended in time this majestic advent that although replicates continuously was unique and almost virginal as seen from a higher plane and the perspective rthat only you can give well done….


  • Valesha
    October 16, 2006
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    excellent

    i felt like i was there. it was sooooooooooooooooo ...i am like blown away.


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    My goodness this was awesome and beautiful.Such a lovely poem.I was visualising what you were describing as I read it. So good!!!GBY


  • eyesofanangel524
    October 16, 2006
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    This is a magnificent write. So beautifully portrayed. I would have felt the colors even if I could not have been able to see them. Brilliant penning. Thank you for sharing such artistic ability. Painting wonderfully on this canvas as an artist does on his. Dawn

  • Revwilliamfoos
    October 16, 2006
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    it made me fee as if i were in the plane or just flying beneath the wings of a dove going closer to heaven great job
    love the papa


  • Iohagh
    October 16, 2006
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    Darling

    Sometimes man glimpses God
    so beautiful beyond sight
    His footprint and nod
    making us feel right.

    Smoosh

    Janet

  • janerankin46
    October 16, 2006
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    A very lovely poem saying everything and more that I have ever seen in so many sunrises. Look forward to the next one. Jane


  • DevilHimself silver member
    October 16, 2006
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    i like the poem but think the format and wording might be a little hard for the average reader to grasp. the photo is particularly stunning and the poem hints towards the ecstatic but i think you could have formatted it simpler so that more would be able to grasp the sense of awe that you are projecting.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 16, 2006
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    Your transparent sighs

    unfold the hues of dawn,



    and I am caught in the turbulence

    of fulgent sunrays

    here I find that poet is entirely caught by the beauty of the poetic interrpretions and with so intensity of the metaphors brigning the depth of the subject up over the scene so strongly.. a great work indeed...


  • Utok Bulinaw
    October 16, 2006
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    Hi Sweetie! This is such a breathtaking piece. Thank you for the delightful read this morning. Hope all is well with you.
    Hugs, Eris

  • Rudolf
    October 16, 2006
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    a delightful poem to read,it's not often i have to go find out what words mean in a poem.with this i had to look up a few.thanks for sharing this well thought out sunrise surprise,rudolf


  • JoyfulWriter
    October 16, 2006
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    This is a most beautiful and breathtaking piece of poetry! I really enjoyed reading every word....this truly blessed my day...smiles, Terry


  • pixxiepoetess
    October 16, 2006
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    This was absolutely beautiful. The language, especially the alliteration was lovely. You did that magnificent sunrise proud! --->pixxie<---


  • gaze
    October 16, 2006
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    Suavity is the word that came to me after reading this.
    Prachtig!!!


  • Child of Water
    October 15, 2006
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    I agree with the common consensus...beautiful, expertly written. Best wishes


  • moonmagick
    October 15, 2006
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    The way you have expressed the colors, it's so unique and lovely. You have also given such a spiritual side to the equinox and all that is suggested between the lines. Beautiful.


  • nichtmich silver member
    October 15, 2006
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    Exquisite

    A unique interpretation of wind ~ in color. Sheer poetic genius, nothing I have ever experienced is as spiritual as a sunrise and a fresh chance for a new day. This poem makes me feel like a child, when the whole world is open and full of delights for me to find. Glorious.


  • ShotgunGoddess
    October 14, 2006
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    wow...you have a way with words...and goddang you have a big vocab! lol. Ive never read the sunrise described so beautifully...wish I could write like you! well done! this is truely a beautiful piece!!!

    Fair Winds and Well Done!
    Kanna


  • Hulali
    October 14, 2006
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    UMmmmmmmm, I'm so glad I clicked on this! I remember the poem I wrote about seeing the sunrise on an airplane.

    Everything is great. I can't pick any favorite lines, I might as well copy and paste the whole poem here. I don't want to gush too much, it's not my style.

    I already have. I never do this. congratulations on this one.

  • Lisa Haslett
    October 14, 2006
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    Good write

    Sounds like the rays of the sunlight!Very good poem I like it very much!Had a great time,when reading this!Great piece of work!Lisa K haslett raytown Missouri!


  • prisms
    October 14, 2006
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    Your word-choice and -usage in this piece is astounding! Everything about it radiates imagery and depth. The style you used was absolutely wonderful, a perfect fit for the write, and it never faded or seemed forced. Every line rolls right of the tongue when read. And the title, in my opinion, was just right-- a fantastic piece of work!


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    Never thought of wind having any colour, just breath and force. Interesting how one interprets the theme of this contest, wonderful words you have used -like the alliteration too.


  • Justified Inc.
    October 14, 2006
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    beautiful

    I think you captured the beauty and feeling very well in this poem and I loved the fact that you took me there as well! Nice job and wonderful vocabulary and flow! The imagery was well maintained all the way through as well as feeling. I really enjoyed this one. Very nicely done!!!!!

  • Meggh LotusMay
    October 14, 2006
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    Good luck contestwise. You deserve your point

    The best thing I like about this poem is that the imagery is brilliant and strong. I think you and I must have similar 'imagery' minds because I always imagine sighs as transparent. Well, they are, but they've always been very clear to me that way. Did you write this poem as you watched the sunrise?

  • bowmore bill
    October 14, 2006
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    Exqusite.

    Beautiful use of words, they describe the picture to a T.


  • catz Moderators member
    October 14, 2006
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    This is beautiful, leander. You've captured it all with this delightful write and tha accompanying photograph..... the colors, the wind, the magnificent sunrise.... they all blend together beautifully, your words doing justice to all.

    I should read more of our work than I have so far. You're a wonderful writer.

    Good luck in the contest

    love and
    Dee


  • silver-X-lining gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    This is beautiful! Lovely imagery--I am very impressed. This poem is amazing. You are a wonderful poet! Excellent job, and good luck in the contest--I think that you'll do very well!


  • Frozentearz
    October 14, 2006
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    very gorgeous indeed,
    and you have so well described through words your vision
    that the imagery was there in words alone,
    Thank you so much for sharing,
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • suthrnbell84
    October 14, 2006
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    Oh, how gorgeous! I LOVE sunsets, the colors just take my breath away, as did your poem. Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed reading this.


  • Brianna M
    October 14, 2006
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    nice


  • Wolfdog silver member
    October 14, 2006
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    Superb/romantic/unique/fun

    An excellant write, just as it is.


  • paullallady silver member
    October 14, 2006
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    good

    This is absolutely beautiful. The vivid imagery that your words portrayed would have been marvelous enough but to have this amazing picture just enhances it. It woul be hard to have mere words describe that picture, but you did it, and you did it amazingly well. good job on this.

  • fredhib
    October 14, 2006
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    Well I think Ill need to get my dictionary out. Great Images and theemotion highlighted by the colours - a wonderfully evocative write


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 14, 2006
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    Wow, this flows with such beautiful images so beautifully. The picture is amazing. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Jeannie D Hunter


  • Snappy - Doodles
    October 14, 2006
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    Five Stars

    First of all I want to say you are such a fantastic writer. I enjoy each one of your poems, they are just exceptional. Your imagery in your poems is just lovely. You are also talented with words as seen in this poem. Looking forward to your next piece. Good luck in the contest.

    Snappy
    Hoping to write as well as you one day.


  • pandora ink
    October 14, 2006
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    Beautiful imagery, I could see the wind blowing the colors across the sky. Stunning piece yet again, Leander.
    Elisa

  • leander Moderators member
    October 14, 2006
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    thank you sugar


  • Eeyores Buddy
    October 14, 2006
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    You never seem to fail to surprise me with what you write, truly talented guy indeed

    Everytime, you capture something different with each picture, your imagery is clear and beautiful.

    Good luck in the contest

    xx SPG


  • senza
    October 14, 2006
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    Lol, yeah I just forgot I had. This piece is definitely stunning.


  • leander Moderators member
    October 14, 2006
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    ooh, you've changed your name
    thank you for your most beautiful comment sweety


  • senza
    October 14, 2006
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    Indeed, both are breathtaking, the picture and the poem. Terrific imagery in this poem, the beauty concealed in the sunrise expressed with talent in your words. I suppose the turbulence you perceived has something to do with the liveness of the sun, how the clouds move, and how the colours seem to want to ooze in the sky, which they do in a way the hues and colours get mixed up as you say yourself in
    "and the wedding
    of saffron and orange...". There is such soft grace in that mixture!
    I am taken away by your words. Enchanting. truly.
    I wish you luck!
    Lady anairO

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