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Behind The Blue Door (Metered Mirror-Rhyme)

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The day will come, when time is right,
And you will walk through the blue door ...
What will unfold as darkest night,
Is something you’ve not seen before ...

Behind your eyes, and not before,
The dwelling-place of truth is found ...
Once found, the seeker seeks no more,
Believes no longer to be bound ...

The wise one with his gaze profound,
He sees the universe within ...
His eyes no longer search around,
For what inside him can be seen ...

Your spirit will become serene,
A dwelling-place for joy and peace ...
Reality behind the scene,
The space where all illusions cease ...

Behind the blue door waits release,
From all you’ve known, which burdens you ...
You’re free now from your mind’s disease,
It was a dream - and never true ...

~~~

It was a dream - and never true,
You’re free now from your mind’s disease ...
From all you’ve known, which burdens you,
Behind the blue door waits release ...

The space where all illusions cease,
Reality behind the scene ...
A dwelling-place for joy and peace,
Your spirit will become serene ...

For what inside him can be seen,
His eyes no longer search around ...
He sees the universe within,
The wise one with his gaze profound ...

Believes no longer to be bound,
Once found, the seeker seeks no more ...
The dwelling-place of truth is found,
Behind your eyes, and not before ...

Is something you’ve not seen before,
What will unfold as darkest night ...
And you will walk through the blue door,
The day will come, when time is right ...



Author notes



this poetry-form won a bronze-trophy in toni a christman's contest
"invitational for invented long forms" allpoetry.com/Contest/2258684

please check out my column about "metered mirror-rhyme" :
allpoetry.com/poem/2191585



Written October 14th, 2006

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  • myrataal silver member
    April 28, 2008

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    The wonder words still ring in my soul ...

    and the pleasure and peace should be shared ... May I please do that?

    Love to you, Precious Marion. You are such a delight to read and reread.

    Blessed be.

    Myra


  • maa gold member
    November 2, 2006
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    dear toni,
    I don't know what or who the jabberwucky is, but you seemed to like him or her ... but thank you for your joyful and kind words concerning my mirror-rhyme, and especially for awarding a trophy to it. it was a joy participating in your contest.
    thank you,

    maa


  • Toni A Christman
    November 1, 2006
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    Dear maa, What a wonderful work! Your example poem is splendid. It reminded me of "What the Jabberwocky Said" because of the rounds. It's fascinating to read and even more fascinating to think about trying to write one! I'm afraid my skills lie in having language so totally diverse on every line that I would't be able to fit my words into your form. However, I am so favorably impressed that I'm going to try! Well, I've just read it and read it - and it's equally entertaining and challenging each time! Wonderful job! Best, Toni


  • maa gold member
    October 24, 2006
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    thank you so much, sweet myra, for your applause and your wonderful comment ...

    maa

  • myrataal silver member
    October 22, 2006
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    Perfect

    Perfect in form and in execution, your work reflects divine images and their twins. Well done, beloved maa.



    Myra

  • maa gold member
    October 22, 2006
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    thank you so much, nyarlathotep, for your kind visit here on this page. I am glad you appreciated my poem and the particular form it took ...
    all the best,

    maa

  • nyarlathotep3
    October 22, 2006
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    Cool

    Cool, awesome idea and a well thought out and technically very proficient poem. I reckon this form helps to add to the poem a lot, a useful technique, though it requires some ingenuity, once mastered, as you have, its very powerful and thought provoking, well done.

  • maa gold member
    October 19, 2006
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    thank you so much, poppin poppy, for your enthousiastic comment on my little poem ... it made me smile ...
    much love,

    maa


  • Poppin Poppy silver member
    October 18, 2006
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    Fantastic

    WOW! Quite an accomplishment and enjoyed the whole thing. Many times I have looked at 'regular' poems and, in my mind, tried to figure out how to make sence of them 'mirrored', just for the hell of it... then thought, my, this is hard. Great job!

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