You had me at "hello", and I walked into your world
Completely oblivious to the warning signs.
Like a lamb to the slaughter, I followed you
Unaware of the horrors awaiting me there.
You said that you would always be here for me
That your heart would always belong to me alone.
And now I wonder why I ever trusted in you
Why I fell for all of your lies.
You were gravely mistaken when you thought
That you could blind me to your misdeeds
Though I am the fool for believing in you
For I saw not through your many disguises.
But when I saw the light, it dawned on me
That you were never really mine alone.
I had given of myself to you
And you robbed me of my very essence.
Though I discovered, far too late
That, of your own accord, you had deceived me all along
And I am done with you; I'm sick of being lied to.
No longer will I be manipulated for your selfish game.
You thought that I would break under you
That I would assume responsibility for the chaos you've created.
But, if you had known me, you would have known better
That I will never bow to a fool such as yourself.
You cried to me, and pretended that you loved me
But no more will I bleed on your account.
I am taking back my life for myself now
And burning every memory I ever had of you.
But how can I rid myself of something I never had?
Author notes
"Heartbreak and Betrayal"
This is for my ex, Devin. I hate him for all that he put me through.
I was dumped the day that "The Open Door" was released, and CMWYS became my new theme. Although things are better now, I listened to the song as I wrote this, so that I could channel the same anger that was there initially.
Written October 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Use me,Screw me,but you don't fool me by ExpectingMommy18.
600 points, ended March 1, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love Evanescence..
this is a great write,
"You cried to me, and pretended that you loved me
But no more will I bleed on your account.
I am taking back my life for myself now
And burning every memory I ever had of you."
I like the end the best -
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck in the judging!
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Great job using music to channel this. You did very well portraying the hurt and anger.
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wow this was great! exactly what i was looking for with this contest. you have so much emotion flowing through this peice.
thank you so much for antering and good luck. -
I knew you were an Evanescence lover as soon as I read that line. Of all the songs on The Open Door, I think this one was great for the contest. CMWYS or Snow White Queen. Or Sweet Sacrifice. Or Good Enough. lol
Anyways, I think this is a very powerful write. I liked the word choice and the rhythmic-ness of it. It's not really a rhythm, but it had cadence. It just flowed really well. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
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This was very good, it explains how you felt about him. He sounds like an ass, no offense. It is once again beyond perfection!
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thank you for your entry
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Good Luck in the contest!!!This is a really good piece!
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I'm removing to close contest please enter my other one!
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I'm sorry but could you please re enter this poem in a new contest i am holding because of some error made this contest will be shut down a new one will be started same type so don't change the poem please!
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you had me at hello was the one line that stood out!I wish you good luck!
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DAMN THIS WAS WONDERFULLY WRITTEN..................
I WAS IN THIS SAME SITUATION YEARS BACK WHEN I WAS WITH SOMEONE THAT I WAS TO NIEVE TO SEE THAT HE NEVER REALLY LOVD ME AND EVERYTHING HE EVER TOLD ME WAS JUST A LIE..... EVERY SINGLE LIE HE TOLD I FOOLISHLY BELIEVED BECAUSE I LOVED HIM AND I THOUGHT THAT HE COULD DO NO WRONG BECAUSE I TRULY THOUGHT THAT HE LOVED ME IN RETURN AND NOW YEARS LATER AFTER THE BREAK UP I LOOK BACK AND AM SO ANGRY AT HIM AND BECAUSE I AM GROWN AND NO LONGER FOOLISH TO STUPIDITY OF MEN ...... I KNOW HOW YOU FEEL GIRL.... I KNOW HOW YOU FEEL....
thank you so very much for entering this wonderful piece into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
thank you........ and Good Luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!and much much love!!!!!! -
This is a very nice write. My favorite lines are:
You said that you would always be here for me
That your heart would always belong to me alone.
And now I wonder why I ever trusted in you
Why I fell for all of your lies.
I can relate to this
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Omg wow. PUre AgnGer ReLeaSe! Love IT! the open Door.... wow... Lithium best song ever in the whole wide world lol I can relate to your poem... It gets better trust me... Be strong... Don't let the temptation of going back ever overcome you... Very strong and channeled peice... Huanted Doll about covered it. Very Nice!
~Katherine
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defintely an anthem of hate and regret, and you channeled such emotions perfectly into this peice. amazing! this was beautiful
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"Like a lamb to the slaughter, I followed you" and "burning every memory I ever had of you." are my favorite lines in this piece. happy to hear you have mended what was broken and all is well. best wishes and pen on dear.
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